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Fan-made summary - Story - Chapter 12 : Broken [stub] v5.2

Post by cidjen » Mon Jan 22, 2018 6:22 pm

v5.25: let's call him 'uncle' thx darrin :d
v5.2 : got a few ideas, thanks to darrin and Invisigoth.
v5.1 : inline edit: Miho actually frees herself from restraints first, the Horde and Stability arrive after that (spiritual credit : Invisigoth)
v5.0 : updated to proceedings (1541), rearranged the timeline
v4.9 : update to recent events (1537), clarified the last paragraph (re. Yuki being a magical grrl)
v4.8 : update of recent events (1529) and shortened the TMI.
v4.7 : update of recent events (to state as of [1524])
v4.6 : updated resume where appropriate.
v4.5 : again deleting some more TMI moments, actual descriptive sentences of key story moments look like would be FTW.
v4.1 : affecting just 1 paragraph, shortened the TMI on what happens at Junko's. Not justified to make entirely new version.
v4 : more condensing and rearranging.
v3.1: shortening the TMI.
v3: more rewording & rearranging, condensation (but not only, the grrl at the ninja compound may actually not be Junpei's sister, right ?)

Chapter 12 : Broken

Miho wakes up after a heart surgery and panics out, wreaking havoc in the hospital when restrained. Junpei tries to help her, but she beats him up. Miho's and Junpei's fight attracts attention of both Horde and Stability forces. Kimiko convinces Miho to let herself be helped.

Kimiko dresses up as Miho and performs a death scene to distract the Horde. While Junpei carries Miho away, Piro, Largo and Erika witness Kimiko's performance. Erika calls upon help of her own fans.

Largo, Erika and her fans clear out the path for Piro to carry Kimiko away. Junpei helps Megumi break through through the Stability cordon. Piro and Kimiko are hidden away by Megumi in a love hotel (The Foxhole).

At Junko's, Ping undergoes another 'character change', interferes with Junko's messages and sets off to meet Junko's 'uncle' in her stead, leading Ping to The Foxhole.

Meimi and Cha-san accidentally 'restore' Zom-zom to human form.

Yutaka asks Yuki to find and help Ririka, who was injured during the battle in the hospital. Yuki is found out by Yutaka's mom, a former magical girl, to also be a magical girl.

Junpei hides Miho in, and later jumps in with Yakugashi, to his room at the ninja compound.
After that Junpei comes in to the compound again, to rescue Miho and Yakugashi after an altercation with the inhabitants.

Miho and Yakugashi escape as Junpei confronts his family. Miho falls unconscious from exhaustion and a missed landing. During the near-death experience, Miho meets the spirit/consciousness of Moeko.


To Be Continued, as more comics arrive :)
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Re: Fan-made summary - Story - Chapter 12 : Broken v1

Post by cidjen » Wed Jan 24, 2018 7:17 pm

Chapter 12 : Broken

Miho wakes up after a heart surgery in the hospital. She is panicking so much about it, that the nurses have to restrain and sedate her.

Piro sees Miho wake up, but is then sent away by the nurses, and goes to visit Largo instead.

Kimiko intends to visit Largo, but goes to Komugiko's room with Yakugashi instead, where she relays what happened at the Megagamers flat.

Komugiko tells Kimiko about Miho's heart condition and is surprised and shocked when she hears that it's been fixed.

Erika talks with Piro about what happened, Largo is shocked as he hears that Piro has 'healed the evil one'.

Meanwhile, Miho uses her powers to set herself free of the hospital bed, and wreaks havoc in that entire part of the hospital.

Hearing the rumble resulting of Miho's moves, Komugiko calls for Junpei, and asks him to help and save Miho.

Miho tries to fight Junpei, but is interrupted when Kimiko arrives and tries to calm down Miho. Kimiko then prepares for a 'person swap' scenario to facilitate Miho getting away.

Piro, Largo and Erika use a wheelchair to get to the disaster zone; Erika uses her 'power of Moeko-chan' to call her own fans to help fight the Horde.

Kimiko, dressed up as Miho, acts a death scene in front of Piro. Largo and Erika with help of Erika's fans clear out the path for Piro to carry Kimiko away.

Fleeing from the collapsed part of the hospital, Piro encounters Megumi, who sets off to bring her car to help them.

Junpei carries Miho away to his family compound and leaves her there to rest. He goes back to the hospital, helping Piro by neutralizing the Horde members and Megumi by clearing a path through the security forces.

Miho encounters Junpei's sister, and tries to come up with a credible ninja story, but fails.

Piro and Kimiko depart the hospital site hidden on the back seat of Megumi's car. Megumi breaks out of the security ring with more help from Junpei.

Meimi and Cha-san attempt to make Zom-zom 'less poisonous', enchanting (or returning Zom-zom to) a human form.

Yuki goes to find Yutaka after seeing the hospital collapse partially. Yutaka asks her to find and help Ririka, which she does, together with Largo, Erika and Erika's fans.

Piro and Kimiko arrive at The Foxhole - a love hotel owned by Megumi's family, where she tells them to lay low and hide from the Horde and other fans.

Yakugashi calls Junpei and orders herself to be carried to Miho's hiding place.

Junko helps Ping wake up and get to 'useable state' with Pings' hair, eyes and body parameters having seemingly gone random overnight.

To Be Continued, as more comics arrive :)
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Re: Fan-made summary - Story - Chapter 12 : Broken v2

Post by cidjen » Tue Jan 30, 2018 10:06 am

Just posted v3 as top-post.

Chapter 12 : Broken

Miho wakes up after a heart surgery. Unsure of the consequences this could cause to her story, she panics and has to be restrained.
Piro sees Miho wake up, but is then sent away by the nurses, and goes to visit Largo instead.
Erika talks with Piro about what happened, Largo is shocked as he hears that Piro has 'healed the evil one' 'again'.

Kimiko intends to visit Largo and Erika, but ends up in Komugiko's room.
Komugiko tells Kimiko about Miho's heart condition.
Kimiko tells Komugiko that Miho's heart has been surgically fixed.

Meanwhile, Miho uses her powers to set herself free of the hospital bed, and wreaks havoc in that entire part of the hospital.
Hearing the rumble of Miho's moves, Komugiko calls for Junpei, and asks him to help and save Miho.
Initially Miho fights Junpei but Kimiko enacts a 'person swap' scenario, to let Junpei carry Miho away to his family's compound.

As Piro arrives at the scene with Largo and Erika, Kimiko, dressed up as Miho, acts out a death scene in front of Piro.
Largo and Erika with help of Erika's fans clear out the path for Piro to carry Kimiko away

Megumi helps Piro and Kimiko get away from the hospital, hidden in the back seat of her car. Junpei helps Megumi to pass through the security forces.
Megumi drives them to a love hotel owned by her family.

At the ninja compound, Miho encounters Junpei's sister, and tries to come up with a credible ninja story, but fails.

Meimi and Cha-san attempt to make Zom-zom 'less poisonous', enchanting (or returning Zom-zom to) a human form.

Yuki goes to find Yutaka after seeing the hospital collapse partially. Yutaka asks her to find and help Ririka, which she does, together with Largo, Erika and Erika's fans.

While Komugiko is sleeping, Yakugashi calls Junpei and orders herself to be carried to Miho's hiding place.

Junko helps Ping wake up and get to 'useable state' with Pings' hair, eyes and body parameters having seemingly gone random overnight.
While Junko leaves the room to prepare for a meeting with one of her clients, Ping sends her own message to him.

To Be Continued, as more comics arrive :)
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Re: Fan-made summary - Story - Chapter 12 : Broken [stub] v3

Post by cidjen » Fri Feb 02, 2018 4:06 pm

New version 3.1 just posted as first post in thread!
v3: more rewording & rearranging, condensation (but not only, the grrl at the ninja compound may actually not be Junpei's sister, right ?)

Chapter 12 : Broken

Miho wakes up after a heart surgery. Unsure of the consequences this could cause to her story, she panics and has to be restrained.
Piro is then sent away by the nurses, and goes to visit Largo instead, hoping to find Kimiko there.
Erika talks with Piro about what happened, Largo is shocked as he hears that Piro has 'healed the evil one' 'again'.

Kimiko intends to visit Largo and Erika, but ends up going to Komugiko's room. Kimiko tells Komugiko, that Miho's heart has been surgically fixed.

Meanwhile, Miho wreaks havoc in that entire part of the hospital. Hearing the rumble of Miho's moves, Komugiko calls for Junpei, and asks him to help and save Miho. Kimiko also runs there.

Miho at first tries to beat Junpei, but when Kimiko arrives and explains his intentions, Junpei carries Miho away to his family's compound.

As Piro arrives at the scene with Largo and Erika, Kimiko, dressed and coloured up as Miho, acts out a death scene in front of Piro.
Largo and Erika with help of Erika's fans clear out the path for Piro to carry Kimiko away.

Megumi helps Piro and Kimiko get away from the hospital, hidden in the back seat of her car. Junpei helps Megumi to pass through the security forces.
Megumi drives them to a love hotel owned by her family.

At the ninja compound, Miho encounters the Ninja Grrl, and tries to come up with a credible ninja story, but fails.

Meimi and Cha-san attempt to make Zom-zom 'less poisonous', enchanting (or returning Zom-zom to) a human form.

Yuki goes to find Yutaka after seeing the hospital collapse partially. Yutaka asks her to find and help Ririka, which she does, together with Largo, Erika and Erika's fans.

While Komugiko is sleeping, Yakugashi calls Junpei and orders herself to be carried to Miho's hiding place.

Junko helps Ping wake up and get to 'useable state' with Pings' hair, eyes and body parameters having seemingly gone random overnight.
While Junko leaves the room to prepare for a meeting with one of her clients, Ping sends her own message to him.

To Be Continued, as more comics arrive :)
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Re: Fan-made summary - Story - Chapter 12 : Broken [stub] v3.1

Post by arimareiji » Thu Feb 08, 2018 1:50 am

Out of curiosity: Who is the intended audience for these summaries?

It's just that it occurs to me that condensing everything down to what we know now, as opposed to what we knew at the time we were reading a given comic, might do a disservice to people who haven't read it sequentially yet.
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Re: Fan-made summary - Story - Chapter 12 : Broken [stub] v3.1

Post by cidjen » Thu Feb 08, 2018 1:58 pm

I am not trying to anticipate the story; It's more like I am trying to 'report' on what happened (past tense deliberate) and condense to give an idea of the story plot node moments; But I try to make the effort to not include too many details, it isn't a re-telling of the story; If anything, more condensation and removal of details may still be needed; it's a resume - intended audience is of people who want to read the Story page.

Some details will still be removed from the summary of Chapter 12, as more comics arrive, for sure.

The goal is to incentivize to read the story, give an 'idea' of the plot, not to give away the plot. (IMO, YMMV)
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Re: Fan-made summary - Story - Chapter 12 : Broken [stub] v3.1

Post by cidjen » Sat Feb 10, 2018 6:58 pm

v4 has just been posted as first message in thread.
v3.1: shortening the TMI.
v3: more rewording & rearranging, condensation (but not only, the grrl at the ninja compound may actually not be Junpei's sister, right ?)

Chapter 12 : Broken

Miho wakes up after a heart surgery. Unsure of the consequences this could cause to her story, she panics and has to be restrained.
Piro goes to visit Largo, hoping to find Kimiko there. Largo is shocked as he hears that Piro has 'healed the evil one' 'again'.

Kimiko intends to visit Largo and Erika, but ends up going to Komugiko's room. Kimiko tells Komugiko, that Miho's heart has been surgically fixed.

Meanwhile, Miho wreaks havoc in the hospital. Hearing the rumble of Miho's moves, Komugiko asks Junpei to help and save Miho. Kimiko also runs there.

Miho at first tries to fight Junpei, but when Kimiko arrives and explains his intentions, Junpei carries Miho away to his family's compound.

As Piro arrives at the scene with Largo and Erika, Kimiko, dressed and coloured up as Miho, acts out a death scene in front of Piro.
Largo and Erika with help of Erika's fans clear out the path for Piro to carry Kimiko away.

Megumi helps Piro and Kimiko get away from the hospital. Junpei helps Megumi to pass through the security forces and the Horde.

At the ninja compound, Miho encounters the Ninja Grrl, and tries to come up with a credible ninja story, but fails.

Meimi and Cha-san attempt to make Zom-zom 'less poisonous', enchanting (or returning Zom-zom to) a human form.

Yutaka asks Yuki to find and help Ririka, which she does, together with Largo, Erika and Erika's fans.

While Komugiko is sleeping, Yakugashi calls Junpei and orders herself to be carried to Miho's hiding place.

Junko helps Ping wake up and get her to 'useable state' after another 'character change'.
While Junko leaves the room to prepare for a meeting with one of her clients, Ping sends her own message to him.

To Be Continued, as more comics arrive :)
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Re: Fan-made summary - Story - Chapter 12 : Broken [stub] v3.1

Post by SpaceCobraJoe » Sun Feb 11, 2018 4:13 am

arimareiji wrote:
Thu Feb 08, 2018 1:50 am
Out of curiosity: Who is the intended audience for these summaries?
I can see them being helpful for the person responsible for updating the "Story" page.
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Re: Fan-made summary - Story - Chapter 12 : Broken [stub] v4.1

Post by cidjen » Tue Feb 27, 2018 7:58 am

Posted next version as top-post, this is a backup of v4.1
v4.1 - affecting just 1 paragraph, shortened the TMI on what happens at Junko's. Not justified to make entirely new version.
v4 : more condensing and rearranging.
v3.1: shortening the TMI.
v3: more rewording & rearranging, condensation (but not only, the grrl at the ninja compound may actually not be Junpei's sister, right ?)

Chapter 12 : Broken

Miho wakes up after a heart surgery. Unsure of the consequences this could cause to her story, she panics and has to be restrained.

She wreaks havoc in the hospital. Komugiko learns from Kimiko what has happened, and asks Junpei to help and save Miho.

Kimiko dresses up as Miho to distract the Horde, Junpei carries Miho away to his family's compound.

Piro arrives at the scene with Largo and Erika. Largo and Erika with help of Erika's fans clear out the path for Piro to carry Kimiko away.

Megumi helps Piro and Kimiko get away from the hospital with help from Junpei; Megumi drives them to a love hotel.

At the ninja compound, Miho encounters the Ninja Grrl, and tries to come up with a credible ninja story, but fails.

Meimi and Cha-san accidentally 'restore' Zom-zom to human form.

Yutaka asks Yuki to find and help Ririka, who was injured during the battle between the Horde and Erika's fans.

Yakugashi orders herself to be carried to Miho's hiding place.

At Junko's, Ping undergoes another 'character change' and interferes with Junko's messages to one of Junko's 'users'.

To Be Continued, as more comics arrive :)
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Re: Fan-made summary - Story - Chapter 12 : Broken [stub] v4.5

Post by cidjen » Thu Mar 22, 2018 5:50 pm

New version posted as the first post in thread.
v4.5 : again deleting some more TMI moments, actual descriptive sentences of key story moments look like would be FTW.
v4.1 : affecting just 1 paragraph, shortened the TMI on what happens at Junko's. Not justified to make entirely new version.
v4 : more condensing and rearranging.
v3.1: shortening the TMI.
v3: more rewording & rearranging, condensation (but not only, the grrl at the ninja compound may actually not be Junpei's sister, right ?)

Chapter 12 : Broken

Miho wakes up after a heart surgery, panics and wreaks havoc in the hospital, trying to defend herself. Komugiko learns from Kimiko what happened at the flat, and asks Junpei to help and save Miho.

While Kimiko dresses up as Miho and plays dead to distract the Horde, and Junpei carries Miho away, Piro arrives at the scene with Largo and Erika. Largo and Erika with help of Erika's fans clear out the path for Piro to carry Kimiko away.

Megumi drives Piro and Kimiko away from the hospital with help from Junpei.

At the ninja compound, Miho encounters the Ninja Grrl.

Meimi and Cha-san accidentally 'restore' Zom-zom to human form.

Yutaka asks Yuki to find and help Ririka, who was injured during the battle between the Horde and Erika's fans.

Yakugashi orders herself to be carried to Miho's hiding place.

At Junko's, Ping undergoes another 'character change' and interferes with Junko's messages.

At the love hotel, Piro faces the real choice.

To Be Continued, as more comics arrive :)
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Re: Fan-made summary - Story - Chapter 12 : Broken [stub] v4.6

Post by cidjen » Wed May 16, 2018 4:02 am

New version is in the first post of the thread.
v4.6 : updated resume where appropriate.
v4.5 : again deleting some more TMI moments, actual descriptive sentences of key story moments look like would be FTW.
v4.1 : affecting just 1 paragraph, shortened the TMI on what happens at Junko's. Not justified to make entirely new version.
v4 : more condensing and rearranging.
v3.1: shortening the TMI.
v3: more rewording & rearranging, condensation (but not only, the grrl at the ninja compound may actually not be Junpei's sister, right ?)

Chapter 12 : Broken

Miho wakes up after a heart surgery, panics and wreaks havoc in the hospital, trying to defend herself. Komugiko learns from Kimiko what happened at the flat, and asks Junpei to help and save Miho.

While Kimiko dresses up as Miho and plays dead to distract the Horde, and Junpei carries Miho away, Piro arrives at the scene with Largo and Erika. Largo and Erika with help of Erika's fans clear out the path for Piro to carry Kimiko away.

Piro and Kimiko are hidden away by Megumi in a love hotel, while Junpei hides Miho in, and later jumps with Yakugashi to, his room at the ninja compound.

Meimi and Cha-san accidentally 'restore' Zom-zom to human form.

Yutaka asks Yuki to find and help Ririka, who was injured during the battle between the Horde and Erika's fans.

At Junko's, Ping undergoes another 'character change' and interferes with Junko's messages.

To Be Continued, as more comics arrive :)
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Re: Fan-made summary - Story - Chapter 12 : Broken [stub] v4.7

Post by cidjen » Sat Jul 07, 2018 12:20 pm

Updated to version 4.8 as top post of this thread.
v4.7 : update of recent events (to state as of [1524])
v4.6 : updated resume where appropriate.
v4.5 : again deleting some more TMI moments, actual descriptive sentences of key story moments look like would be FTW.
v4.1 : affecting just 1 paragraph, shortened the TMI on what happens at Junko's. Not justified to make entirely new version.
v4 : more condensing and rearranging.
v3.1: shortening the TMI.
v3: more rewording & rearranging, condensation (but not only, the grrl at the ninja compound may actually not be Junpei's sister, right ?)

Chapter 12 : Broken

Miho wakes up after a heart surgery, panics and wreaks havoc in the hospital, trying to defend herself. Komugiko learns from Kimiko what happened at the flat, and asks Junpei to help and save Miho.

Kimiko dresses up as Miho and performs a death scene to distract the Horde, while Junpei carries Miho away, Piro, Largo and Erika witness Kimiko's performance.

After Largo, Erika and her fans clear out the path for Piro to carry Kimiko away, Piro and Kimiko are hidden away by Megumi in a love hotel (The Foxhole).

Junpei hides Miho in, and later jumps with Yakugashi to his room at the ninja compound, where Miho is then told of Kimiko's and Piro's whereabouts.

At Junko's, Ping undergoes another 'character change', interferes with Junko's messages and sets off to meet Junko's date in her stead, leading Ping to close vicinity of The Foxhole.

Meimi and Cha-san accidentally 'restore' Zom-zom to human form.

Yutaka asks Yuki to find and help Ririka, who was injured during the battle between the Horde and Erika's fans, and is found out by Yutaka's mom, a former magical girl, to also be a magical girl.


To Be Continued, as more comics arrive :)
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Re: Fan-made summary - Story - Chapter 12 : Broken [stub] v4.8

Post by cidjen » Fri Sep 28, 2018 7:37 am

(summary saved at the time of [1537] publication)
Chapter 12 : Broken

Miho wakes up after a heart surgery, panics and wreaks havoc in the hospital, trying to defend herself from the Horde.

Kimiko dresses up as Miho and performs a death scene to distract the Horde. While Junpei carries Miho away, Piro, Largo and Erika witness Kimiko's performance.

After Largo, Erika and her fans clear out the path for Piro to carry Kimiko away, Piro and Kimiko are hidden away by Megumi in a love hotel (The Foxhole).

Junpei hides Miho in, and later jumps with Yakugashi to his room at the ninja compound.
After Junpei goes back to Komugiko's bed at the hospital, Miho is told of Kimiko's and Piro's whereabouts, and Yakugashi is apprehended by ninjas.

At Junko's, Ping undergoes another 'character change', interferes with Junko's messages and sets off to meet Junko's date in her stead, leading Ping to close vicinity of The Foxhole.

Meimi and Cha-san accidentally 'restore' Zom-zom to human form.

Yutaka asks Yuki to find and help Ririka, who was injured during the battle between the Horde and Erika's fans, and is found out by Yutaka's mom, a former magical girl, to also be a magical girl.


To Be Continued, as more comics arrive :)
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Re: Fan-made summary - Story - Chapter 12 : Broken [stub] v4.9

Post by cidjen » Wed Nov 07, 2018 9:35 am

Posted v5.0 as top-post.
v4.9 : update to recent events (1537), clarified the last paragraph (re. Yuki being a magical grrl)
v4.8 : update of recent events (1529) and shortened the TMI.
v4.7 : update of recent events (to state as of [1524])
v4.6 : updated resume where appropriate.
v4.5 : again deleting some more TMI moments, actual descriptive sentences of key story moments look like would be FTW.
v4.1 : affecting just 1 paragraph, shortened the TMI on what happens at Junko's. Not justified to make entirely new version.
v4 : more condensing and rearranging.
v3.1: shortening the TMI.
v3: more rewording & rearranging, condensation (but not only, the grrl at the ninja compound may actually not be Junpei's sister, right ?)

Chapter 12 : Broken

Miho wakes up after a heart surgery, panics and wreaks havoc in the hospital, trying to defend herself from the Horde.

Kimiko dresses up as Miho and performs a death scene to distract the Horde. While Junpei carries Miho away, Piro, Largo and Erika witness Kimiko's performance.

After Largo, Erika and her fans clear out the path for Piro to carry Kimiko away, Piro and Kimiko are hidden away by Megumi in a love hotel (The Foxhole).

Junpei hides Miho in, and later jumps in with Yakugashi, to his room at the ninja compound.
After that Junpei comes in to the compound again, to rescue Miho and Yakugashi after an altercation with the inhabitants.

At Junko's, Ping undergoes another 'character change', interferes with Junko's messages and sets off to meet Junko's date in her stead, leading Ping to The Foxhole.

Meimi and Cha-san accidentally 'restore' Zom-zom to human form.

Yutaka asks Yuki to find and help Ririka, who was injured during the battle between the Horde and Erika's fans. Yuki is found out by Yutaka's mom, a former magical girl, to also be a magical girl.


To Be Continued, as more comics arrive :)
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Re: Fan-made summary - Story - Chapter 12 : Broken [stub] v5.0

Post by Invisigoth » Wed Nov 07, 2018 10:54 am

Correction needed, Miho didn't need to defend herself from The Horde but rather a wide assortment of mercenaries, assassins and private military contractors all seeking to fulfill sanctions to kill her and restore her cycle of death

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Re: Fan-made summary - Story - Chapter 12 : Broken [stub] v5.0

Post by cidjen » Thu Nov 08, 2018 3:30 am

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Correction needed, Miho didn't need to defend herself from The Horde but rather a wide assortment of mercenaries, assassins and private military contractors all seeking to fulfill sanctions to kill her and restore her cycle of death
I thought those started arriving only after the hospital has been smashed?

And tried to keep people away from the scene (we don't need another half naked woman there).

Thinking about it more, the hospital explosion is more like the thing Yuki caused at the Megagamers... I'll think of something.
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Re: Fan-made summary - Story - Chapter 12 : Broken [stub] v5.0

Post by Invisigoth » Thu Nov 08, 2018 8:10 am

Nope, that was all Miho.

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Re: Fan-made summary - Story - Chapter 12 : Broken [stub] v5.0

Post by darrin » Thu Nov 08, 2018 12:21 pm

Aaand... this is why any fan summary is doomed to, well, I hate to use the "f" word, but... let's say "non-success". :( No two fans will ever have summaries that overlap in any significant way. Sorry cidjen; I do consider the attempt a heroic one, please don't think I am denigrating your effort here.
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Miho didn't need to defend herself from The Horde
It turned out that she didn't need to, yes. But in 1455 it's pretty clear she's talking about the fans who "have to watch [her] die", which is the threat she thought she was facing at the time. This was the meaning I inferred cidjen's original "trying to defend herself" (as opposed to just plain defending herself) to mean.
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I thought those [mercenaries] started arriving only after the hospital has been smashed?

And tried to keep people away from the scene (we don't need another half naked woman there).
They did try to keep civilians out, but 1457 makes it clear that was secondary to the primary goal of "plan[ning their] next attack" in order to "defeat her". While they are never explicitly identified as "mercenaries" (or assassins or private military contractors etc.), and never explicitly state that by "defeat" they mean "kill", it's pretty clear that these aren't part of the fanboy horde, and thus probably have a different agenda. (Miho does tell Kimiko in 1455 that the fans will "have to hunt [her] down and kill [her]" to achieve the goal of The Story; but these two seem to have a much more business-like attitude to the issue than fannish. Compare the much more emotional response of the fellow in 1466; sure, they're all dressed weird (whether "mercenary" or "fanboy"), but his "She's dead!" lament is more consistent with a fan response than a mercenary irked at missing his chance at the bounty.)
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Nope, that [destruction of the hospital] was all Miho.
In 1445, the "destruction" (so far) is expensive-looking but largely cosmetic (doors, room contents, ceiling tiles, ceiling fixtures, as opposed to the later structural collapse that will be seen). By 1453 we are starting to see more alarming things like walls having come down... but we also see at least two tanks partly buried under the rubble. (Perhaps these are standard hospital equipment in MegaTokyo, but the question would remain of who authorized their deployment and why.)

In 1457, we see that the hospital (or at least part of it) has indeed collapsed, but this is after Kimiko managed to calm Miho down and start working on her exit plan. In 1489, Yuki sees ongoing damage to the hospital. Miho is long gone by now. It might have been claimed that the hospital was collapsing due to structural damage Miho caused (but which we didn't really see in the fight scene with Junpei, at the end of which Kimiko is standing in the same (damaged) corridor speaking calmly without any indication of "omg this places is collapsing we need to get out"). But here we see debris being forcibly ejected outward, not merely rubble collapsing downward, and a sound effect indicative of an explosion. (In the next strip Yuki says "they smashed up the hospital"... not an unseen "someone", but someone she's in some way aware of.) In 1495, Ririka similarly addresses a plural group of "stupidheads" to stop using "explodies", that is, not ongoing structural collapse from Miho damaging supporting walls or whatever, but incoming ordinance or artillery.

Again, granted that most of what's going on is being kept deliberately ambiguous, there appear to be strong indications that what was done to the hospital was not "all Miho".
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Re: Fan-made summary - Story - Chapter 12 : Broken [stub] v5.0

Post by Invisigoth » Thu Nov 08, 2018 12:53 pm

MOUT will do that to a building

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Re: Fan-made summary - Story - Chapter 12 : Broken [stub] v5.0

Post by darrin » Thu Nov 08, 2018 5:46 pm

Invisigoth wrote:
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MOUT will do that to a building
Miho's Occasional Uncontrollable Tantrums? :lol: :lol: Kidding, kidding, no I know how to use google, don't worry. :P

Hmm, while I am here...
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Ping [...] sets off to meet Junko's date
... I will try once more to point out that while Ping (and a large fraction of the audience :D) think the Old Man is indeed an EK "date" (read client) of Junko's, this has yet to be confirmed in-comic.
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Re: Fan-made summary - Story - Chapter 12 : Broken [stub] v5.0

Post by cidjen » Thu Nov 08, 2018 6:55 pm

darrin wrote:
Thu Nov 08, 2018 12:21 pm
this is why any fan summary is doomed to, well, I hate to use the "f" word, but... let's say "non-success".
I welcome any kind of feedback from any fan ;) whether I get convinced to their view, or they get convinced to mine, is still an open matter though :)

In this case, we're still forgetting that Junpei was involved at first (before Kimiko got to the scene) - but if you read the first version of the summary, you'll see I actually considered this to be TMI. Because if I wrote that, I also then have to write, that it was Komugiko who sent Junpei to help Miho. The second rumble was from Miho fighting Junpei.

Was that already enough to blow up the hospital walls? Not sure (because when Kimiko arrives, there is still walls and remains of the rooms around them). My bet is, the 'foom' that Yuki sees, is the Stability or the Horde attacking the place they think Miho is at. Although, 'FOOM' seems to be pretty closely associated with Junpei's fighting style (practically everywhere Junpei fights, you see 'FOOM'). So not sure what to think about that.

The goal of these summaries is to relate the events, not to re-tell the story... To incentivise reading it yourself, not to give it all away. Hence I (feel I) intentionally (need to) omit certain (key) details. The summary is a synthesis of an analysis of the story... or so I think it should be :)

Secondary goal is to fit just in as much text, as the Story page(s) can bear to show (the summaries there are pretty short)

That can hit me the wrong way though, I can see that. But I can take any comment on board. So thank you.
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Re: Fan-made summary - Story - Chapter 12 : Broken [stub] v5.0

Post by Invisigoth » Thu Nov 08, 2018 7:28 pm

MOUT ~ Military Operations, Urban Terrain

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Re: Fan-made summary - Story - Chapter 12 : Broken [stub] v5.1

Post by cidjen » Fri Nov 09, 2018 5:05 am

posting v5.2 as toppost shortly.
v5.1 : inline edit: Miho actually frees herself from restraints first, the Horde and Stability arrive after that (spiritual credit : Invisigoth)
v5.0 : updated to proceedings (1541), rearranged the timeline
v4.9 : update to recent events (1537), clarified the last paragraph (re. Yuki being a magical grrl)
v4.8 : update of recent events (1529) and shortened the TMI.
v4.7 : update of recent events (to state as of [1524])
v4.6 : updated resume where appropriate.
v4.5 : again deleting some more TMI moments, actual descriptive sentences of key story moments look like would be FTW.
v4.1 : affecting just 1 paragraph, shortened the TMI on what happens at Junko's. Not justified to make entirely new version.
v4 : more condensing and rearranging.
v3.1: shortening the TMI.
v3: more rewording & rearranging, condensation (but not only, the grrl at the ninja compound may actually not be Junpei's sister, right ?)

Chapter 12 : Broken

Miho wakes up after a heart surgery, panics and wreaks havoc in the hospital, which lures in the forces of Stability and the Horde.

Kimiko dresses up as Miho and performs a death scene to distract the Horde. While Junpei carries Miho away, Piro, Largo and Erika witness Kimiko's performance.

After Largo, Erika and her fans clear out the path for Piro to carry Kimiko away, Piro and Kimiko are hidden away by Megumi in a love hotel (The Foxhole). Junpei helps Megumi through the Stability cordon.

At Junko's, Ping undergoes another 'character change', interferes with Junko's messages and sets off to meet Junko's date in her stead, leading Ping to The Foxhole.

Meimi and Cha-san accidentally 'restore' Zom-zom to human form.

Yutaka asks Yuki to find and help Ririka, who was injured during the battle between the Horde and Erika's fans. Yuki is found out by Yutaka's mom, a former magical girl, to also be a magical girl.

Junpei hides Miho in, and later jumps in with Yakugashi, to his room at the ninja compound.
After that Junpei comes in to the compound again, to rescue Miho and Yakugashi after an altercation with the inhabitants.

Miho and Yakugashi escape as Junpei confronts his family. Miho falls unconscious from exhaustion and a missed landing. During the near-death experience, Miho meets the spirit/consciousness of Moeko.


To Be Continued, as more comics arrive :)
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Re: Fan-made summary - Story - Chapter 12 : Broken [stub] v5.1

Post by darrin » Fri Nov 09, 2018 3:47 pm

cidjen wrote:
Fri Nov 09, 2018 5:05 am
Ping [...] sets off to meet Junko's date in her stead
darrin wrote:
Thu Nov 08, 2018 5:46 pm
while Ping [...] think[s] the Old Man is indeed an EK "date" (read client) of Junko's, this has yet to be confirmed in-comic.
cidjen wrote:
Mon Jan 22, 2018 6:22 pm
Ping [...] sets off to meet Junko's date/client in her stead
:|

An engineer, a physicist, and a mathematician are in a train traveling across the Scottish countryside. The mathematician is reading the morning paper, the physicist is scribbling something on the back of an envelope, and the engineer, with occasional bored glances at the other two, is staring out the window.

Suddenly the engineer brightens and points out the window. "Hey, a sheep! Well, what do you know, Scottish sheep are black."

Without looking up from the envelope, the physicist intones, "'Some Scottish sheep are black,' I believe you mean."

Glaring at the other two, the mathematician states, "At least one Scottish sheep is black on at least one side," snaps the paper testily, and continues reading.

8-)
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Re: Fan-made summary - Story - Chapter 12 : Broken [stub] v5.2

Post by cidjen » Sat Nov 10, 2018 5:25 am

Welp I am an engineer lol.

Well nothing says he isn't just an old acquaintance... Uncle maybe? :) In manga terms, uncle would be perfect thanks :D
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