[poetry - 0953] Love Poems, In tribute to 'The Big Hug'

While some of you know I'm no poet, I dust this off every decade or so because it seems appropriate.

Come to Me
R. Stancliff

Come to me in times of sadness.
Let me share your sorrows load.
Gladly will I bear your burden
That you not be overcome.

Come to me in times of gladness.
Sharing joy can make it grow.
Joy will aid us on our journey
To the land of love's abode.

Come to me to ease your mind,
To leave it calm, serene, and clear.
Peace can be found in my arms,
Safe from the world, secure from fear.

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If you have one you like, feel free to post it here.

I have really loved this chapter, especially the last few pages. Fred's ability to show subtle emotions through the eyes has gotten so good it is beginning to outstrip the rest of his art.

When I watch Kimiko step up to Piro and work her arms under his, I feel her saying...
I want to hold you.
I want you to hold me.
I feel safe and comforted when I'm near you.
I'm through running away.

From Piro I am getting...
How did this happen?
Ping did this just yesterday.
Don't talk, just hold her.


Edit - Would a mod fix the name to make it 0953???

This post has been edited by Haldane on Jan 9 2007, 04:53 PM

While I seriously doubt that I could memorize poetry, I can at least contribute with this:

I know that you can't speak
But actions say so much
so I'll remove your pain
with just a gentle touch.

This post has been edited by Rapierman on Jan 9 2007, 04:58 PM

Mulling over some old favorites, I remembered this one which, in a way, seems singularly appropriate to Kimiko's and Piro's relationship.

Be Still As You Are Beautiful
Patrick McDonough

Be still as you are beautiful,
Be silent as the rose,
Through miles of starlit countryside
Unspoken worship flows
To find you in your loveless room
From lonely men whom daylight gave
The blessing of your passing face,
Impenetrably grave.

A white owl in the lichened wood
Is circling silently,
More secret and more silent still
Must be your love to me.
Thus, while about my dreaming head
Your soul in sleepless vigil goes,
Be still as you are beautiful,
Be silent as the rose.

That's very nice Shoka, but are you Patrick McDonough? I certainly wasn't clear, but I intended original pieces. I don't guess it matters though, the thread isn't getting a lot of attention.

Yeah it isn't getting a lot of attention cos we suck @ poetry maybe?

Perhaps a thread for original poetry would be better placed in the Creative Writing forum? If not, can we still post love poetry if we give due credit to the author?

"I'm sorry," she says.
"Me too," he replies.
Yet no words are spoken,
by mouth, but by eyes.

Enfolded in hug,
Unrequested, yet held,
Harsh words are undone,
Unwritten, unspelled.

Live for this moment,
Be free from the past.
Let the bread of your love,
on these waters be cast.

Tomorrow will bring,
New battles, new pain.
But these moments will help
You standup under strain.

In these arms there are peace,
and from sorrow, release.

(Okay, not my best effort by a long shot,.)

The Embrace
By slez

Froggy, Groggy I need to sleep,
But so many thing I have to say.
The words won't come – I see her weep.
With outstretched arms she comes my way.

Is this a dream, could it be real?
I feel her arms around me wind.
My body tenses my senses reel -
I can not relax with a tangled mind.

She feels my pain and holds me tight -
Her body says: Let go, let go.
In silence I struggle, strive and fight,
To trust in her and feel her glow.

I am paralyzed, I can not move -
She cries on me and squeezes tight.
Her body yearns, it needs to prove,
That everything will be alright.

I feel her need to have my trust -
It warms my soul, it burns so bright.
It breaks my bonds they now are dust,
And now I hold her with all my might.

This post has been edited by slez on Jan 10 2007, 03:10 PM

Nervous and shaking,
He claps his hands around her
If for a second mistaking

The inherent nature of the embrace,
A depart, not by her part,
A mistake.

Confusion Abounds
Does she like him so?
His arms should circle and surround

The clumsy effort he makes
One of self-deprecation,
And admittedly, self-hate.

Something deeper perhaps?
With posture and demeanor,
Showing more than circumstance.

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What? This is the same as all other fan work. You are the author and its about the comic.

"We" didn't write anything but this poorly written /one sentence/ post, so either expand on your critique on how the other poems suck, or don't post. And it is "at" and "because" just for your information.

~Wynds

This post has been edited by WyndhamHeart on Jan 10 2007, 08:10 PM

In addition to Wynd's comment, I'm not sure it would be very well received there. They're kinda like CW in that they expect a certain level of effort/quality. This thread could be more like a cg thread, I think, with different standards (based more on personal enjoyment and applicability to the comic).

I may try to come up with one, but I rarely compose when not in the mood, and even more rarely publish.

I misunderstood - I thought you were asking for favorite love poems, and didn't twig to the fact you wanted originals. No, I'm not Patric McDonough; if I could write like that, I'd call myself a poet!

Anyway, here's an original sonnet by me to sorta match the thread:

The questing heart is ever beating blind,
Its blood a medley interlaced with pain,
Red yearning surges out like brandywine,
Grey longing drizzles in like chilly rain.

Such tides of sorrow seem to swell too strong
For any merely mortal frame to bear:
The dread that what is said is taken wrong;
The fear the one we reach for doesn't care.

And when the pitch of two hearts match at last,
The resonance may shatter both their lives
To fall upon the ground like shards of glass,
But where the fragments mingle, love survives.

Among the ruins questing hearts console,
And broken lives may make each other whole.

Go ahead, it won't hurt. I only request that it be appropriate to the story arc.

These are very nice submissions, thanks to all.

I wrote my poem just over 22 years ago, that's why I said that I accasionally dust it off.
The only poetry I have written regularly is the 60 or so haiku and renga posts I have done for MegaTokyo.

I apologize for bring back this mostly dead topic, but I had the desire to add some images (as well as a few edits) to my poem now that the hug sequence is complete. I think it turned out pretty good, if your interested you can have a look.

http://mosaic.myphotos.cc/embrace/

This isn't original and it's not even a poem, it's song a lyric but I've always liked it and seeing Piro and Kimiko holding each other reminded me of it and I thought I'd share it:

Hold Me, Thrill Me, Kiss Me
by Harry Noble
As recorded by Mel Carter

Hold me, hold me
Never let me go until you've told me, told me
What I want to know and then just hold me, hold me
Make me tell you I'm in love with you

Thrill me (thrill me), thrill me (thrill me)
Walk me down the lane where shadows will be (will be) will be (will be)
Hiding lovers just the same as we'll be, we'll be
When you make me tell you I love you

They told me "Be sensible with your new love"
"Don't be fooled, thinking this is the last you'll find"
But they never stood in the dark with you, love
When you take me in your arms and drive me slowly out of my mind

Kiss me (kiss me), kiss me (kiss me)
And when you do, I'll know that you will miss me (miss me), miss me (miss me)
If we ever say "Adieu", so kiss me, kiss me
Make me tell you I'm in love with you

(Kiss me) kiss me, (kiss me) kiss me
When you do, I'll know that you will miss me (miss me), miss me (miss me)
If we ever say "Adieu" so kiss me, kiss me
Make me tell you I'm in love with you

(Hold me, thrill me)
(Never, never, never let me go)
(Hold me, thrill me, never, never, never let me go)

FADE
(Hold me, thrill me, never, never, never let me go)