[filk] A Foreigner's Life..., some beatles for today.

here is a filk from me and wordsmith, hope all of you like it
Thus, I present....



A Foreigner's Life -- Reblekid, ft. Madwordsmith

I read the news today, oh boy
About a fanboy riot in the streets
And though the news was rather odd
I couldn't help but laugh
I saw the photographs

They sought a seiyuu in a store
Who didn't notice their destructive ways?
The crowd cosplayed and sang away
They heard her song before
Nobody was really sure why their idol fled away

I played a game today, oh boy
His "sight" was on a girl of many grays
A crowd of people drew away
But i just had to play
Having known her voice
1'd l0v3 t0 l0g j00 1n...

Woke up rolled out of bed
Played some quake across the 'net
Made my way to the sink and ate ramen
I'm broke again, so that was all I ate

Went downstairs to work in the store
Stacking stock and sweeping floor
Chilled in the break room, played a game
It was the same, but I didn't even care

I read the news today, oh boy
Ten thousand posts on forums on the net
And though a lot of them were spam
Mods didn't give a damn
So much about an idol that the servers crashed from being crammed
I'd l0ve t0 l0g j00 0n...

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John Lennon/Paul McCartney
A Day in the Life

I read the news today oh boy
About a lucky man who made the grade
And though the news was rater sad
Well I just had to laugh
I saw the photograph.

He blew his mind out in a car
He didn't notice that the lights had changed
A crowd of people stood and stared
They'd seen his face before
Nobody was really sure
If he was from the House of Lords.

I saw a film today oh boy
The English Army had just won the war
A crowd of people turned away
But I just had the book.
I'd love to turn you on

Woke up, fell out of bed,
Dragged a comb across my head
Found my way downstairs and drank a cup,
And looking up I noticed I was late.
Found my coat and grabbed my hat
Made the bus in seconds flat
Found my way upstairs and had a smoke,
Some body spoke and I went into a dream

I read the news today oh boy
Four thousand holes in Blackburn, Lancashire
And though the holes were rather small
They had to count them all
Now they know how many holes it takes to fill the Albert Hall.
I'd love to turn you on.
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This filk was done by me with some help from themadwordsmith,

Now here are some words from themadwordsmith:

I think it's okay... but probably could use some tweaking.

pretty cool

i would like to hear it with music, could prove to be interestin,

Really a fitting song for a Gai-Jin. Is it about me??? No? Oh!

The middles section from "Woke up ..." doesn't fit the rhythm of the original. There seems to be a lot of messing about to get the words to fit. Definitely needs work there.

The opening section I like. Good choice of material for this song too. The subject and the song fit well together, though it's a little vague in places. You might want to better consider who it is that's singing.

Conclusion: Good idea. Some parts carried off well. Needs work, especially in the middle.


Sabyr
... under a blue sky ...

In terms of syllable count, the middle part fits. In terms of singability, it would be tricky. I'll admit it needs work, most of it being mine, but I couldn't think of anything better. The song was still downloading when I wrote it, so I couldn't hear it to get the rhythm right. It works, though. I think...
-Mad Word
"For a Beatles filk, it turned out okay..."

then i guess this is a bad time to mention this site