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Posted by: Cryshalo Dec 18 2002, 09:33 AM
People say eyes are
portals to the soul; can you
see the hurt in hers?

<!haiku>
eee... that one shot of Miho's face... *tears* ...
</!haiku>

<!-- a little verse I my sleep-deprived mind ... I guess the word is mutated. looking at this the only opinion I can think of is "I'm gonna regret this in the morning... but hey, lets see... -->
Dear Miho, what do you whisper?
Under your breath...

Oh Miho, and what do you dream?
Behind your brow...

Pray Miho, let me know your mind,
To ease your pain...

Sorry Ping, my lips are still sealed,
I cannot tell...

However Ping, my eyes are the key,
My life is there...

Posted by: SUSPECT Dec 18 2002, 10:46 AM
damaged in battle
our sad and lonely miho
so misunderstood

she just wants to love
and feel love of another
can't anyone see

maybe largo will
and love her for all she is
a sad lonely girl

....... one can only hope... and if he doesn't, I'll step up, ..... oh no..... does my love for kimiko waver???

Posted by: TronkleUPS Dec 18 2002, 11:37 AM
She left without Ping
her victory tastes sour
this strip made me cry

Largo made me mad
he used to be l33t master
now he makes girls cry

Innocent Ping looks
other students jeer Miho
This is compassion?

Posted by: Reflaxion Dec 18 2002, 12:49 PM
even victory
cannot bring her happiness
does she need a friend?

Posted by: Mintaka Dec 18 2002, 03:00 PM
Bitter victory --
Unseasonably warm day
Turned cold by cruel speech.

The friend is silent;
Only the fallen foe asks
Why the victor runs.

Posted by: Caduceuskun Dec 18 2002, 03:37 PM
The sadness inside
Released by victory, not
Defeat, like you'd think.

Why runs she away?
She hast defeated me, but
She gloats not at all.

[irish haiku]
Losing in Super Moe-Moe Ball
Is apt to drive Largo up the wall
But that look in her eyes,
Stops his rant with surprise
And leaves him feeling unworthy and small.
[/irish haiku]

Posted by: Rowan Bristol Dec 18 2002, 03:56 PM
You didn't get it
Why don't you understand me?
I won to win you.

Posted by: SUSPECT Dec 18 2002, 04:18 PM
In reply to:


You didn't get it
Why don't you understand me?
I won to win you.





Aww, this one is really good.

Posted by: e-Monk Dec 19 2002, 03:28 AM
Tohya can't catch a break, even as she wins.
What could be so dire and horrific sins,
That made her damged in battle,
As she tries to struggle,
and to face her classmates' sinister grins.

Posted by: Master Edward Dec 19 2002, 08:47 AM
Shallow victory
a beautifully sad face -
but when does it snow?

Posted by: Garran Dec 19 2002, 12:38 PM
At times like this the
Veil falls about her, and she
Only wants to cry.

A graceful exit
Under the circumstances.
Her foil, abandoned

In the game, watches
Frustrated in the wake of
Her sudden egress;

Still seeing life through
Hate-coloured lens, he wonders
Why he can't see her.

Posted by: Glitch Dec 19 2002, 11:22 PM
his arm's broken
they played the game
her heart's broken

Posted by: Azuki Dec 19 2002, 11:50 PM
Gah, it's not haiku, tanka, or even the Infamous Irish Haiku of Limerick, but it needed to put scrawled into cybespace

Brash wolf, defeated wolf,
When will you learn?

toss off the retort
to wonder why
at the abject hurt
that lay in her eye(s)

Brash Wolf, Foolish Wolf,
When will you learn?

It's not the battle that wounds her so
But the parting shots


Gah, it's just a little seeding of poetry, but I thought I'd plant it.

Posted by: Shoka Dec 20 2002, 01:03 AM
Once I went out walking
Upon a frozen lake,
And there I laid some kindling,
In which I made a flame.
The ice began to crack,
And melt to liquid black,
But when I turned my back,
The water froze again.

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