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Posted by: Shoka Aug 27 2002, 11:41 PM
girders reinforce
walls that want to crumble down;
loosened nails weep rust.

does kotone want to fade?
does her spirit weep grey tears?

Edit - added two lines, made it a tanka.

Posted by: Cryshalo Aug 28 2002, 01:55 AM
Cityscape, a land
Of grays and browns, and people
Yearning to be free.

Posted by: vonSudden Aug 28 2002, 02:28 AM
Building a city,
Is it so different from
Building character?

Posted by: The False Hoturi Aug 28 2002, 10:37 AM
Kotone stares out
on the world, lost in thought.
A Sad Girl on Fence.

Posted by: DeosArcana Aug 28 2002, 12:16 PM
See the world below
With its changing shades of grey
Look down on forever.

For we are all shades
Shadows of the world around
In this we are one.

<!haiku> Not really relevant, but it sounds nice. </!haiku>

Kotone can see
Trapped in the rust and decay
The passage of time.

Posted by: Shoka Aug 28 2002, 01:29 PM
Huddled in a covert
Of faded, rust-stained planks,
Softly shedding tears,
Into little, calloused hands,
Pardon my intruding
On your solitary grief,
Tell me, sparrow, please,
What is it makes you weep?

Much speculation on Kotone's hands floating around. IMO, this is a scene from the game Sight. Kotone was sitting alone, absorbed in private thoughts, her face in her hands (perhaps she was weeping, perhaps not). She looks up and around, startled by the arrival of the player. That is her pose in this drawing.

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