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Posted by: DeosArcana May 20 2002, 06:41 AM
Tears flow without pause
For the dam hath broke within
The truth is revealed

Is it truly love
If it is an algorithm
Or is it a lie?

"I don't need your love"
Miho says through tear-stained eyes
But we know the truth

Posted by: Mintaka May 20 2002, 06:58 AM
Winter stays too long
But when the sun breaks through
Rain waters green sprouts

-- Mintaka

Posted by: Hideyoshi-san May 20 2002, 07:04 AM
Alone she was strong.
Love disrupts her confidence -
so the Dark One cries.

Posted by: Reflaxion May 20 2002, 07:13 AM
Parasitic one,
taking all that you can use;
Will you ever love?

Posted by: Rowan Bristol May 20 2002, 07:48 AM
Foolish plastic toy
You cannot truly love me.
These tears are not mine.

(Miho) = friend
Ping loves friend [Infinite loop]
Tears fall. [System error]

Such nice young ladies
Each of them a little strange
Glad they are such friends

Posted by: dancnpiro May 20 2002, 08:01 AM
She watches silent,
Her face a mask of cold stone,
Her heart is destoryed.

Love was once so pure,
An evilness consumed it,
And left her broken.

Posted by: l33t G4m3r May 20 2002, 08:17 AM
And still the seeds grew-
Into mighty hempstalks.
Yeah, I have spoken.

It is a sad day,
How long will the rain come?
For this, I wonder when.

Why did I take you-
Into the darkness forth?
Because I am death. (damnit, im dead!)

When the flower dies,
It's spirit goes within-
The next flower seed.

What is a soul's structure?
Our essence, our life, what?
We need more knowledge.

What is in a game?
Another universe?

Why are you so lost?
Do you not have a home?
I shall care for you.
Do you lack the love-
That you need for happiness?
That is why you're sad.

....I r34lly suck 4t Haiku. th3 l4st time I wr0t3 Haiku w4s b4ck in sch00l...i'm rusty (so stop laughing your arses off ).

Posted by: DeosArcana May 20 2002, 08:31 AM
It's supposed to be 5-7-5.

And try for seasonal references if you can.

Though that isn't a REQUIREMENT, just a requirement.

Technically none of this is haiku because it doesn't involve season reference. But you pick and choose which rules to obey. (Except the 17 syllable one, that one's sacred)

Posted by: affert May 20 2002, 09:18 AM
Wakefulness returns
Greeted by a caring nurse
And a faithful friend.

"Why does she follow?"
The dark one wonders aloud.
"You are yet unused"

[tears == saddness]
[Why is Tohya-san so sad?]
"I'm sorry! Don't cry."

The dark one resists
"You have nothing I can use"
"Empty and unused"

Posted by: Shoka May 20 2002, 10:50 AM
on Ohashi Bridge,
comforting and comfortless,
raindrops fall like tears

Posted by: Monthenor May 20 2002, 11:00 AM
Kawaii confidant
A mirror of my soul; why
Do I see nothing?

Defined by my friends --
What I call my friends -- but here
Is naught to feed from.

Recursion problem:
Each defined by the other,
Bring each other life.

Posted by: Shoka May 20 2002, 03:20 PM
When it's sickness and loss that enfold
All your seasons with perilous cold,
Then the absence of rain
Is a stark, cutting pain,
And the warmth is a shock to your soul.

Posted by: Cryshalo May 20 2002, 08:11 PM
Miho spins, cold and
confused; emotions race about her.
Winter in her soul.

~~ ~~

Past the icy chill into
the heart and soul; tenderness;
confusion rules all.

Posted by: lonebountyhunter May 21 2002, 12:28 AM
i have returned, and it is with great pride that i give my non-haiku responce:

Here I sit alone
My friend by my side
But who is she?
Just a toy to me...

And yet it hurts
Not the pain inside of me
I am stronger than this
What is wrong with me?

I look outside to see
But all I get is misery
Into my soul I want to die
I do not even know why

I would give all away
Just to be at peace
Why do the memories come?
Why cannot I be released?

I have wronged
A horrid wrench am I
This is the only reason
This is why I want to die...

Posted by: Shoka May 21 2002, 11:13 AM
frozen snowflakes spin
dancing in the whirling wind
stillness held within

~~ ~~

snow fields, still and cold
sunlight shines on the bright snow
blinding the lost soul

Posted by: Archange| May 21 2002, 12:15 PM
i'm a n00b
read so many, thought i might try a hand at it...

A new feeling grows,
Lonely, what is she to do
The ice cold mask breaks.

Confused, rejection,
Reaches out but pushes back,
She yearns for a friend.

Independence, true,
but what is Miho to do?
The ice has melted.

Friend? just a plaything?
Ping, why do you care for me?
I would just use you.

Go away from me,
I don't need, don't want you here,
Just leave me alone

Posted by: dancnpiro May 21 2002, 02:26 PM
Wow there are so many good poems here. you guys rock!! Here is yet another one from my pencil.....BTW do any of you ever enter the daily Haiku contest @

As the warm sun sets,
Painted clouds float in the sky,
Stars twinkle above.

Her eyes are burning,
Fire dances in her soul,
Love pours from her heart.

Posted by: grasshopperKAT May 21 2002, 06:06 PM
i stood alone ,hidden darkly....
now a hand
pulls me out of the shadows

I rip away....
leave me here in the fimillar dark.....
don't blind me in your light.....

(--__--)still stinks

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