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Posted by: Rowan Bristol Apr 25 2002, 02:14 AM
Shame coalescing
Can you teach me to draw, please?
<I'm not here for long>

Posted by: Skeletor Apr 25 2002, 03:01 AM
The moment of truth.
Whew, Piro didn't explode.
Yet Yuki is hurt.

Posted by: Shoka Apr 25 2002, 04:29 AM
Piro can't teach her.
Will Erika twist his arm?
Will Nanasawa?

Posted by: Goushiken Apr 25 2002, 07:01 AM
To poor Yuki
[haiku]
Artistic Wisdom,
It is yours that I seek, please.
<I'm sorry, I can't.>
[/haiku]

To piro
[haiku]
Her native language,
If she hears, I will be safe.
Disgust her no more.
[/haiku]

Erika
[haiku]
Many schoolgirls here
Piro looks confused again.
must be his fan club.
[/haiku]

Damn I suck at this

Posted by: Reflaxion Apr 25 2002, 09:44 AM
Argh, I read through the strip three times and I still have no inspiration. It's just too perfectly set-up for words.

Just the same, I'll try to force a double haiku. This strip just tells too much of a story for a regular haiku to cover it. Think of it like a Big Mac.

Just to get the girl
Piro crushes Yuki's hopes.
With a "fan club" speech
Erika just makes it worse.
Kimiko is stunned.

Posted by: Stryker Apr 25 2002, 10:12 AM
here's a haiku for you...(Hmm...I rhyme.)
Worry not artist
Your haikus are better than most.
So please stop whining.
Yes, that's the best I could do. Don't hurt me.

One for Ping-Chan, since we haven't seen her for a while.
Where are you Ping-Chan?
Your kawaiiness is quite missed
But KOPE will wait
*NOTE* KOPE is 2 syllables. (KO-PE)

Posted by: Garran Apr 25 2002, 10:23 AM
A quiet moment
As the courage in her eyes
Slowly collapses

"<You... Can't?...>" Wounded child;
She's reached and failed. I'll never
Touch as he touches.

Posted by: Garran Apr 25 2002, 10:33 AM
Enunciate well
And speak clearly; sell your soul
For understanding

Please don't look at me
That way... I'll show you how it
Really is, so please...

Posted by: lonebountyhunter Apr 25 2002, 11:34 AM
Non-Haiku entery:

In the moment,
all seems lost.
Here for a minute,
then to the wind be tossed.

A love to be,
a death unseen.
The cracking of a heart,
the fading of a soul.

Each to hear
what none wish.
Though long for one,
a simple kiss.

Another to watch,
confusion reigns.
But only in time,
shall she feel pain.

A longing for something,
to a life of not,
A single chance,
could be forgot.

The line is clear,
but none shall pass.
And all will cry,
because she asked.

Posted by: DeosArcana Apr 25 2002, 12:55 PM
Like glass, shattered dreams,
Hopes and aspirations die,
<I cannot teach you.>

Mightier than blades,
The pen deals death of a sort:
The death of her dreams

This world we live in,
Full of misunderstanding.
Just be honest, Piro.

Posted by: Shoka Apr 26 2002, 01:46 AM
Our Kimiko looks somewhat shaken,
By Erika's sly implication,
Of sharing,it seems,
With junior high teens,
A mutual Piro-fixation!

Posted by: Phaedrus Apr 27 2002, 01:05 PM
Been pulled away awhile; pleased to see that haiku still flows here!

While the Yuki storyline is of course heart-wrenching, was no one else struck by those glances in panels 5 & 6?

Our eyes, both askance,
brush in brief recognition.
Two hearts stop beating.

Posted by: Garran Apr 27 2002, 01:48 PM
The door swings open
And a familiar form
Stands in the archway

Road-dusty, potent
Verse in hand, he is returned!
Welcome back, poet!

[inmydefense], composing for Kimiko intimidates me... I always feel a little inadequate. ^^;;[/inmydefense]

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