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Posted by: masamage Apr 7 2002, 11:31 PM
A soft, wistful look,
Ribbons embracing her hair...
And Yuki-chan smiles.

Sugoi desu ne!*
A stylish knapsack and such,
But little fabric.

* "Hey, it's wonderful." Since the 'u' at the end of 'desu' is often silent, I'm treating it as such.

Posted by: -bb Apr 8 2002, 01:07 AM
[I'd treat the firstline of the second Haiku as each japanese letter being its own syllabol, because thats what I thought thats what each character stood for]

Piro's art, always
sad - maybe because its cold?
Sad girl fetish, ne?

[i've decided to be lazy and make several varitions of that above haiku]

Piro's art, always
sad - maybe because its cold?
Sad artist, perhaps?

Piro's art, always
sad - Why does Piro draw sad girls?
Is Largo to blame?

Posted by: Dom Apr 8 2002, 03:13 AM
髪型の
リボン、重いか。
雪重さ

Posted by: Cl0ud Apr 8 2002, 03:21 AM
Curse my system
it blows!
Cant read japanese characters.

Posted by: ChillyManMkII Apr 8 2002, 03:41 AM
Something about Ribbon, hair style, snow weighing it down or stuff like that... Curse my japanese level!

Posted by: Rowan Bristol Apr 8 2002, 03:46 AM
Symbiotic fun
A peek into an artist
who does not exist

Posted by: Yami o Makumono Apr 8 2002, 03:55 AM
I can't make much sense of it either. This is my best guess:

kamigata no
ribon, omoi ka
yuki omosa

This hairstyle's
ribbon, is it important?
The weight of snow

Especially the last line makes no sense to me. Then again, I am not exactly fluent in written Japanese. In any case it's nice to see another one of these. Nice work Dom, I'm looking forward to the next one!

Posted by: Rerrs Apr 8 2002, 04:06 AM
I agree, Yuki-
She should be wearing stockings.
Are fanny packs back?

Posted by: Aenril Apr 8 2002, 07:21 AM
The last line confused me as well. I dont think it is the weight of snow that is being referred to, but the weight of Yuki-chan's opinion on the hair. I think the Kanji compounds were used to get a pun effect. Yuki's name does mean 'snow' and that is the kanji that is used. An alternative reading of the 'omo' kanji is 'kasa' for 'kasaneru' which means 'to pile up'. Effectively saying that the Snow is piling up. Maybe he misses winter?

Of course, I could just be dead wrong... but it is a thought.

Posted by: Reflaxion Apr 8 2002, 12:16 PM
Lines and squiggles are
What I see when Dom replies
To a "Haiku" post

Posted by: Garran Apr 8 2002, 03:26 PM
Gazing into a
Distant sky; I wish I could
See what she can see

Perhaps what she sees
Holds some clue to her sadness
It's not just the cold

And surely what she
Sees is what he sees; but all
I see is her hair

And though I gladly
Offer what I can, I can't
Help but feel left out

Posted by: fuzen Apr 8 2002, 05:11 PM
yes her legs are cold
and what she sees wont be told
hair is frozen there

[bah! first haiku here heh. hopefully i'll get better with practice.]

Posted by: -bb Apr 8 2002, 06:08 PM
Mystical Dom, whose
Japanese characters I
cannot read, Help me.

Where can I find the
Character set that haiku
is written in, please?

Posted by: ibmjones Apr 9 2002, 01:08 AM
Urr, Dom, HTML is turned off on this forum, so I don't think you can use international characters in this case.

Posted by: DietWaterCzar Apr 9 2002, 01:19 AM
No you can see Japanese characters as long as your browser can support them. If you use IE go View->Encoding->Japanese. I saw the characters fine, I just couldn't read them.

Posted by: ibmjones Apr 9 2002, 01:22 AM
Ah, I see. Cool! (Dom: Sorry, my mistake).

Posted by: Shoka Apr 9 2002, 03:08 AM
skirting the issues,
and stocking up on bad puns,
her style is so cute

Posted by: blob Apr 9 2002, 11:43 AM
Wistful and lovely
she braces against harsh wind
effect: beautiful

In short skirt she stands
shivering in the cold air
stockings would be good

--blob

Posted by: Werawolf Apr 9 2002, 02:30 PM
That is such
of standing in the wind
with eyes gazing
over an eternity
of spiral pages

--patorikku

Posted by: wilgabriel Apr 9 2002, 08:42 PM
Yuki-chan's writing
Advice for Piro's sketches
Does he need this help?

Posted by: I_S Apr 9 2002, 08:53 PM
A little girl's critiques
Worth more than thousand praises
Uttered by blind fans...

Posted by: Konoko Apr 9 2002, 09:00 PM
only thing I understood was:
Light or the base form of light

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