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|Posted by: kezra_cor Feb 1 2002, 01:04 AM|
| Actress plays her part
A girl of nothing but grays
So much like Kimi
[prose] The last line of this comic was just begging to be put into haiku [/prose]
|Posted by: Caesar Salad Feb 1 2002, 01:15 AM|
| You thought the comic
Was rendered in black and white?
It's nothing but grays.
Largo, and all are so much
More than black and white.
|Posted by: Rowan Bristol Feb 1 2002, 04:10 AM|
| Snowy winter thoughts
Emptiness on both screen sides
kindred souls revealed
|Posted by: Northwind Feb 1 2002, 07:37 AM|
| Such poetic thoughts...
Who would have expected it?
Kimiko's a 5cr1b3!
Two girls, both alike
To a stormy winter sky:
Naught but shades of grey.
|Posted by: AkilikaQ Feb 1 2002, 07:42 AM|
| A light creates shadow
As it's blocked by the body
This makes us complete
One without shadow
Is empty, one without light
Is inhuman, gone . . .
|Posted by: squee Feb 1 2002, 08:44 AM|
| She needs tenderness,
Such a sad, monochrome girl,
She cries like I do.
|Posted by: NachoBoy Feb 1 2002, 08:50 AM|
| Break time: "Thanks, I'm fine."
'But, why are they arguing?
Did I screw this up?'
Neither black nor white,
but somewhere in between, our
Kimi likes her part.
(Do you think Kimiko said that for us haikuers? "A girl of nothing but greys." 7 syllables...)
|Posted by: JAFanboy Feb 1 2002, 09:18 AM|
| Hooray for laptops!
Power outages can't stop
19th, meet the 21st.
Comic by candle!
No electric light...
Could it be the reason why
she saw all in gray?
|Posted by: Silver_wolf Feb 1 2002, 10:01 AM|
|*Blink* why is every one posting in rhyme scheme?|
|Posted by: Phaedrus Feb 1 2002, 11:00 AM|
| She's only a sketch;
a girl of nothing but grays.
Why does she move me?
I love the meta-irony of today's strip - Kimiko, herself just a drawing puzzling over how she likes this girl who's nothing but a drawing.
This poem tries to capture a little of that irony; you can read it as either Kimiko commenting about Kotone...or me commenting about Kimiko.
[admin / FAQ]
Silver Wolf, this is the daily haiku thread, where posters write haiku (or other poems) about that day's MT strip.
Haiku has this structural form: 5 syllables, 7 syllables, 5 syllables
Capture the spirit
of Piro-san's offering.
Honor him in verse.
You'll notice that sometimes we extend the pattern to additional 17 syllable stanzas. This is not traditional, but we don't stand on tradition.
Another traditional form you'll sometimes see here is Tanka: 5,7,5,7,7
If haiku too brief,
tanka allows more freedom.
Two lines of seven added,
aching to be filled with words.
Please join us, everyone's welcome.
[!admin / FAQ]
|Posted by: The False Hoturi Feb 1 2002, 01:15 PM|
somehow doesn't want this part.
However, she can't
help but hear the character's
call, such a familar voice.
I hope my use of
Tanka is decent, as it's
My first attempt.
|Posted by: Falan Feb 3 2002, 12:18 AM|
Life consists of more
than two-tones. Inside, we're all
a little smudged.
|Posted by: The T Feb 3 2002, 01:18 AM|
Kotone looks sad
Kimiko looks sad. Two girls
of nothing but grays
They're so much alike.
Kimiko knows best the way
|Posted by: MagusPibbs Feb 3 2002, 01:42 AM|
| ninety nine bottles,
of beer on the wall ninty nine,
bottles of beer
|Posted by: Caesar Salad Feb 3 2002, 02:17 AM|
| If you're going to make a haiku of "99 bottles of beer", do it right. You messed up your syllables on the middle line. Yours is 5-8-4 instead of 5-7-5.
So it would have to be:
Ninety nine bottles
Of b33r on the wall. Ninety
Nine bottles of b33r.
Though, even the fixed haiku has little to do with comic #219.
|Posted by: luckyrabbit Feb 3 2002, 06:19 AM|
| of nothing but grays
this girl is composed, I feel
her eyes are with me
inside I'd like to
think myself to be all red
sometimes I feel gray
and here's a fun one someone else wrote:
"one oh three am
thinking I have commited
an act I have not"
|Posted by: Yota Feb 5 2002, 08:30 AM|
|Am I the only one who thinks that kimiko's comment had nothing to do with the fact that the character she is playing is a drawing?I mean think about it,it's been a long time since cartoons were made all of grays.she is playing a part in an animation which is color.Well I assume it's color since cartoons aren't black and white any more.I think she is refering to the character's personality.|