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Posted by: Rowan Bristol Dec 10 2001, 01:18 AM
Railway memories
showcase love on separate fronts
Take the next step, dear.

Posted by: O.P. Dec 10 2001, 02:04 AM
Baka; he's not good?!
Baka; but he gave the card!
Baka; I'll be late!

Posted by: Phaedrus Dec 10 2001, 05:04 AM
Just a sliver of
plastic. No meaning. Really.
A foolish keepsake.

Posted by: jasond Dec 10 2001, 05:04 AM
A chance meeting leads to shame
Poor she
She pitys herself.

Posted by: Falan Dec 10 2001, 07:30 AM
Lovely Erika
for once removes her armour,
fragile heart revealed.

Posted by: Northwind Dec 10 2001, 10:28 AM
<TANKA>
He's only one boy,
Yet he hides two men inside.
One hands out rail cards,
One shacks up with younger girls.
I wonder which one is real?
</TANKA>

EDIT: fixed syllable count. Teaches me to post early in the morning.

[ December 10, 2001: Message edited by: Divinewind ]


Posted by: Justy-san Dec 10 2001, 11:12 AM
in j.r. station
near ticket box; silent voice
echoes, 'you've got rail'

Posted by: jamboy Dec 10 2001, 11:14 AM
Morning's light brings forth
Bittersweet reverie from
Everyday trinkets.

Posted by: Northwind Dec 10 2001, 11:34 AM
But wait! What is this?
"Pulled until further notice"?
I wonder what's up.

EDIT: "But wait!" isn't a question.

[ December 10, 2001: Message edited by: Divinewind ]


Posted by: Northwind Dec 11 2001, 12:25 AM
<TANKA>

All is right once more.
Our beloved comic's back,
And the flamers gone.
But, most importantly of all,
The haikus shall continue!

</TANKA>


Posted by: kezra_cor Dec 11 2001, 12:28 AM
Finding a railcard
Kimiko remembering
So glad it's back up

Erika is nice
Looking out for Kimiko
Like a big sister


Posted by: temporal_amnesia Dec 10 2001, 02:04 PM
The brightly cute one
shows a moment of sadness.
At last! Now what next?

Posted by: Traks Dec 10 2001, 02:11 PM
Life's little worries
keep me from enjoying the
new MT. Sad, sad.

Posted by: oneechan19 Dec 10 2001, 03:12 PM
haiku time.. woo!
ahem...

(1)
"Good luck" and "Thank you"
friendship, sisterliness, kindness
all wrapped into one

(2)
who is the baka?
is it the one who gave the card
or is it herself?

(3)
the heart is aching
one man can do this? it seems so
what is one to do?


Posted by: NachoBoy Dec 10 2001, 04:16 PM
Erika wishes
Luck and gives words of kindness.
Kimiko's big day.

Looking for her card.
"Oh, I've only used it once.
Never since that day."

The unknown "baka."
Is it her or is it him?
I think that it's me!!

-The Nacho
(Bakacornchip)


Posted by: Phaedrus Dec 10 2001, 06:45 PM
How can seventeen
beats capture the despair of
that single word? "<Oh.>"

Posted by: O.P. Dec 10 2001, 07:13 PM
quote:
Originally posted by Phaedrus:
How can seventeen
beats capture the despair of
that single word? "<Oh.>"

That one is too good. I bow.


Posted by: smurd Dec 10 2001, 08:06 PM
quote:
Originally posted by O.P.:
That one is too good. I bow.

[!haiku]I was gonna stick one in too but I now decline.[/!haiku]


Posted by: Phaedrus Dec 10 2001, 09:15 PM
[tanka]
My heart soars with praise
but crashes again to hear
"but now I decline".
Must I vow silence to hear
the wit of my fellow scribes?
[/tanka]

Posted by: r4pt0r_x Dec 10 2001, 09:49 PM
is the "baka" meant
for Piro? I hope not, for
he's not a baka....

I hope she doesn't
think that way about Piro
cuz he feels for her.

oh the irony
in stories like this, love is
so complicated.


Posted by: Falan Dec 10 2001, 10:45 PM
all this craziness,
this tension, it dissipates
in our haiku land

*breathes sigh of relief*
Thank god for the serenity of verse


Posted by: nlowre01 Dec 11 2001, 11:56 AM
Steel your resolve girl,
you alone deserve the prize.
Give 'em hell today!

Posted by: nlowre01 Dec 11 2001, 11:56 AM
Kimiko's inner
thoughts are not revealed. Would the
real baka please stand?

Posted by: temporal_amnesia Dec 11 2001, 06:34 PM
If technology
did not exist, if there was
no railcard, then what?

Would they have met in
some other way? Or would they
have never met...yet?

Would their paths cross, or
would another girl recieve
Piro's charity?


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