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Posted by: Traks Nov 21 2001, 07:29 AM
Family living
does such a job on the mind
when one is lovesick.

Posted by: Rowan Bristol Nov 21 2001, 07:36 AM
Cataclysm Corps
No single trial compares
to lovesick daughter

Posted by: smurd Nov 21 2001, 07:42 AM
How I sympathize
with Sonada Keibu...
Each day a crisis.

Posted by: Spiff Nov 21 2001, 08:10 AM
Myself having been
lovesick before, fear Yuki
soon may hurt herself

An emotional
paradise can turn into
tragedy, beware

[ November 21, 2001: Message edited by: Spiff ]


Posted by: Phaedrus Nov 21 2001, 08:12 AM
Yuki, my snow child,
how did Spring come so quickly?
What son melts your heart?

Posted by: Phaedrus Nov 21 2001, 08:18 AM
Sensing her distress,
Gamera, friend to children,
comes to help Yuki.

Posted by: HitScan Nov 21 2001, 08:19 AM
[tanka]
Cataclysm group,
Just finished rebuilding bay,
You silly turtle,
Bays are for boats you see,
Not for turticular ph34r.
[/tanka]

[!haiku]
Yes, that sucks most verily. Best I could do with no more patience than I have, heh. You have to admit though, turticular ph34r is a pretty good line.
[/!haiku]

Poor lovesick Yuki,
A crush on Piro or his
Artistic License?


Posted by: Traks Nov 21 2001, 09:11 AM
Phaedrus, those were great. I liked the first one.

Posted by: smurd Nov 21 2001, 09:44 AM
quote:
Originally posted by HitScan:
You have to admit though, turticular ph34r is a pretty good line.

[!haiku]So good, in fact, it inspires me thus:[/!haiku]

[daikame_no_dashi_tanka]

Oishii yo!
Gamera is full of meat!
Ureshii yo!
Gamera is fun to eat!
Gamera just can't be beat! [1]

[/daikame_no_dashi_tanka]

(apologies to Joel 'n' the 'bots)


[1] If complete plagarism doesn't bother you and if you can dispense with the rhyming scheme, you can substitute the rest of that classic MST3K ditty: We are eating Ga-me-ra!

[ November 21, 2001: Message edited by: smurd ]


Posted by: Northwind Nov 21 2001, 10:00 AM
Morning's come again:
On the distant horizon
And in Yuki's heart.

Posted by: fayest fayenatic Nov 21 2001, 10:04 AM
quote:
Originally posted by smurd:

Gamera is full of meat!
Ureshii yo!
Gamera is fun to eat!
Gamera just can't be beat!

Turtle soup???

So Yuki was confused with her feelings.
(was actually, infatuated with Piro's artwork)
But after the awkward encounter with Ping has now gotten over Piro.
For now........


Posted by: Phaedrus Nov 21 2001, 10:16 AM
quote:
Originally posted by smurd:
[daikame_no_dashi_tanka]

ROTF!

Kaga-san will need
a bigger stadium for
daikame fight!

[edit]
done in yet again
by nihongo diphthong lore.
a i counts as two!
[/edit]

[ November 21, 2001: Message edited by: Phaedrus ]


Posted by: Justy-san Nov 21 2001, 10:19 AM
unexpected art
piro has not drawn before
such a startled face

my turtle Andy
is not in Tokyo Bay but
she's destructive too

(Yes, Andy the turtle is a girl. Long story. Hey... do YOU know how to find turtle "hardware"?)

one can expect great
elation or regret will
result from this day

at the end, who will
discuss it all with
...largo or ren'ai?

This haiku brought to you by Tim Horton's purveyor of the X-Large Mocha. Justy-san starts his day with a visit to Tim's... shouldn't you?


Posted by: Echo Nov 21 2001, 10:21 AM
Calm at the center
of the household hurricane:
the breakfast table.

Posted by: smurd Nov 21 2001, 10:52 AM
[alternate_daikame_no_dashi_tanka]

Oishii da!
Gamera is full of meat!
Ureshii da!
Gamera is fun to eat!
We are eating Ga - me - ra!

[/alternate_daikame_no_dashi_tanka]

[!haiku]Additional apologies to Joel 'n' the 'bots. And, yes, why NOT turtle soup? If it's good enough for Ryori no Tetsujintatchi it's good enough for me![/!haiku]

[ November 21, 2001: Message edited by: smurd ]


Posted by: Phaedrus Nov 21 2001, 11:23 AM
quote:
Originally posted by HitScan:
You have to admit though, turticular ph34r is a pretty good line.

Indeed we must. I loved that!

[limerick]

The inspector is dismayed to hear
there's mayhem afoot at the pier.
Daikame rampage
is causing outrage,
generating turticular ph34r.

[/limerick]


Posted by: AkilikaQ Nov 22 2001, 12:03 AM
From the same sea, yet
They are on opposite sides
Bovine, human, nill

Posted by: HitScan Nov 22 2001, 12:15 AM
[!haiku]
It was my intention to use "turticular terror" originally, since as much as I like a good haiku, I really like alliterations. Alliterations are almost always awesome.
[/!haiku]

Posted by: Crash Man Nov 22 2001, 12:51 AM
Niiiiiiice.....

Posted by: smurd Nov 21 2001, 01:26 PM
quote:
Originally posted by HitScan:
[!haiku]
Alliterations are almost always awesome.
[/!haiku]

[!haiku]Indeed... I frequently use Garrison Keillor's fictional title Bob's Big Book of Booger Jokes to explain the term to kids.[/!haiku]


Posted by: temporal_amnesia Nov 21 2001, 02:32 PM
"What did you say!? Is
it true?! Is my daughter is----"
Oh, those damn turtles!

Posted by: glump Nov 21 2001, 03:24 PM
(Tanka tanka!)

Yuki's diary:
Breakfast as usual; I
Suspect my brother
Is a turtle in disguise -
A big, ugly, warty one.

But I won't let him
Get me down - I am feeling
Good about today!
Making a decision does
Wonders for your appetite.


Posted by: JB Nov 21 2001, 03:34 PM
*disengaging haiku circuits***
GAMERA!!!!
Thank you, I KNEW there was a giant turtle, just couldn't think of the name.
***resume haiku mode***

Ha! A nemesis.
Of who? Dear Rent-A-zilla.
How big are dad's cuffs???


Posted by: glump Nov 21 2001, 03:35 PM
Otousan needs a
Bigger lunch; he mumbles a
Grudge against turtles
The haiku thread suggests he
Somehow might combine the two

[ November 21, 2001: Message edited by: Garran ]


Posted by: jamboy Nov 22 2001, 07:04 PM
[iambic_pentameter]

As giant turtles in the bay appear,
So fathers sat at breakfast interrupt
Their usual morning's feeding when they hear
The sound of urgent phonecalls to pick up.

The half-express'ed fatherly concern,
That but a beat ago held grave import,
Shall have to join the queue and wait its turn
When all's been taken care of at the port.

A brother, as genetics would dictate,
Is more concerned with taunting sister-dear;
The sounds of farmyard beasts he'll imitate,
Though her chagrin, at least to us, is clear.

And yet a mother seems to understand,
Alone in sensing feelings hid so deep
That even in their bearer's mind they stand
Beneath a veil, denied, and there to keep

Their silence until times less fraught with doubt,
When questions have been answered, truths revealed,
And either cause for joy, to laugh and shout,
Or else th'eternal wait as wounds are healed.

Our heroine, of course, may credit not
That Mum went through this in her younger years.
"They couldn't understand! They'd think I've got
Some teenage crush! Not so!" resound her fears.

And so, while turtles, dad and brother, mum,
Finish their preperations for the day,
Dear Yuki sees that her moment has come.
And so, to resolution, she'll away.

And as for us, dear readers, we must wait
And see what Piro-san has has yet in store,
For though the passing time may seem so great,
You know they'll leave us crying out for more.

[/iambic pentameter]

Figured I may as well make my return with more than the usual three lines, since it's been a while, and I've always liked the iambic form despite being pretty lousy at it...

I have an urge to play around with some funkier rhyme patterns, but that'll do as a first attempt. I may return with some more IP verse at the weekend, depending upon the attendance of my muse, or lack thereof...


Posted by: Echo Nov 23 2001, 12:43 AM
Why does Gamera
come to mind? Couldn't it be...
Mecha-Poitier?

[!haiku]A bit contrived, but... think SouthPark [/!haiku]


Posted by: 5parrowhawk Nov 23 2001, 08:20 AM
A giant turtle?
Size is not important for
Onsen Tamago.

Posted by: Phaedrus Nov 23 2001, 09:44 AM
Recipe - onsen
daikame tamago:
first get a big pot...

Posted by: Glump Nov 23 2001, 10:03 AM
"Turtles eat cows, you
Know. You had better watch out."
Yuki makes a face.

Posted by: Meagen Nov 24 2001, 12:53 AM
quote:
JamBoy wrote:

[/iambic pentameter]


[claps] That was wonderful.

Meagen


Posted by: jamboy Nov 23 2001, 01:19 PM
quote:
Originally posted by Meagen aka SailorM:

[claps] That was wonderful.

Meagen


[tanka]
Arigatou
Gozaimasu, Meagen.
I shall try not to
Disappoint you in future,
As my efforts plod along.
[/tanka]


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