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Posted by: hauptman Nov 8 2001, 05:19 PM
A little late, I realize, but I was finishing up my treeware backup of the MT strips last night, and when I came across #122 during the readthrough, a bit of a tanka popped up.

[tanka]

Sad Girl in Snow, all
silent, lost in turmoil and
despair from seeing
hopes and dreams of youthful joy
destroyed by life's cruel lessons.

Sad Girl in Snow, now
crying inside, trying to
hold back bitter tears
of a heart shattered by the
finality of love's loss.

Sad Girl in Snow, not
seeing the blizzard of white
surrounding her in
flurries of crystal splendor,
tears captured in deadly cold.

Sad Girl on her bed.
Yuki, lost in a world of
artistic visions
not her own, feeling the pain
of his fierce desolation.

[/tanka]

[ November 08, 2001: Message edited by: Togashi Gaijin ]


Posted by: The False Hoturi Nov 10 2001, 12:44 AM
WOW! I'm seriously impressed with your l33t literary skillz. You can just feel the emotion in the words, and can visualize the scenes perfectly.

Keep up the good work!


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