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|Posted by: Rowan Bristol Nov 3 2001, 12:59 AM|
Dreams fading away
Typical bad day
|Posted by: glump Nov 3 2001, 01:35 AM|
| I paused in the street
Stood there just a moment's time
Suddenly, I'm tired
What ugliness have
And why, after all
The world in a stark
And wonder what it
[glump]I do like this, but I'm not satisfied; it's too simplistic. I don't think I captured her right. I'll try again later.[/glump]
[ November 03, 2001: Message edited by: Garran ]
|Posted by: Quinn Nov 3 2001, 01:47 AM|
| Generous stranger,
does she love you very much?
Must she be so young?
The hunger that leads
so it hurts to ask:
[ November 03, 2001: Message edited by: Quinn ]
|Posted by: Khym Chanur Nov 3 2001, 03:10 AM|
Gah! I'm so dense! It did occur to me that Kimiko started looking down because she finally realized that the nice seeming Piro might be a pervert until I read these haikus.
Hmmm. I think this lends some weight to the theories that Kimko's shock at seeing Ping was at least partial due to disappointment; if it was just because of embarassment, the "Is he a pervert or what?" thought would have occurred to her a lot sooner.
|Posted by: Phaedrus Nov 3 2001, 05:34 AM|
| Frost-wilted flower,
petals dropping one by one.
Her smile is fading.
[edit: better closing line]
[ November 03, 2001: Message edited by: Phaedrus ]
|Posted by: Phaedrus Nov 3 2001, 09:05 AM|
| Found Haiku
What kind of guy is
|Posted by: Phaedrus Nov 3 2001, 09:15 AM|
| Could my card-giver
prove so base and honorless?
No. Eat some ramen.
|Posted by: smurd Nov 3 2001, 09:35 AM|
| Little hopes rise up,
and then pop like soap bubbles...
I'm just not hungry.
|Posted by: HitScan Nov 3 2001, 01:22 PM|
Doubt now rules the day,
Uncertainty now abounds,
Trust this strange one now?
Dejection now shows its face,
On poor Kimiko's visage.
I too know her pain,
|Posted by: Kojiro Takenashi Nov 3 2001, 01:55 PM|
| Kimiko wonders
Erika arrives with food
|Posted by: O.P. Nov 3 2001, 06:43 PM|
| Sleeping with schoolgirl?
He who gave me the rail card?
A hunger daydream!
|Posted by: Kojiro Takenashi Nov 3 2001, 08:08 PM|
| Foolish young Idol
You must be rather confused
Eat this now, or else
|Posted by: smurd Nov 4 2001, 09:48 AM|
The pretty smile fades…
[ November 04, 2001: Message edited by: smurd ]
|Posted by: Traks Nov 4 2001, 05:30 PM|
| Can't Haiku right now
Dragon Warrior Seven
Ouchy Eyes bleeding
|Posted by: Ajax Nov 4 2001, 06:10 PM|
| Is Piro a perv?
Erika doesn't think so.
Eat more, scrawny freak!
|Posted by: Master Edward Nov 5 2001, 04:37 AM|
| Piro a pervert?
Turn to Shoujo Manga
there is the answer!
|Posted by: Master Edward Nov 5 2001, 04:41 AM|
| A klattering plate -
Just Dinner invitation
Or a hidden threat?
|Posted by: Northwind Nov 5 2001, 11:12 AM|
| When she left her work
All happiness and kindness
The world seemed so bright
Now, scant hours later