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Posted by: Phaedrus Jul 9 2001, 05:36 AM
Self-doubt wracks his mind;
our hero goes too far. He
needs a vacation.

Posted by: smurd Jul 9 2001, 08:42 AM
It's hard to believe
that you've created something
we all love, ain't it?

Piro, buck up fella,
we do like it that much. You'll
just have to face it.

(A word about the
today's guest comic -- Mac Hall,
sugoi desu!)


Posted by: affert Jul 9 2001, 08:47 AM
Must attempt to keep
Piro from sharp and pointy
objects for saftey.

Largo speaks as well:
"Blah Blah Blah." Not much to say.
What is on his head?


Posted by: smurd Jul 9 2001, 09:00 AM
His mind? Darkly cute,
beribboned, sailor-fuku'd...
at least, that's my guess.

Posted by: Echo Jul 9 2001, 09:23 AM
Otakon: Once more
the knifes edge of inner-doubt
becomes all too real.

Largo wears a fez?
An odd choice of fashion, yet
strangely alluring...


Posted by: Blindside Jul 9 2001, 09:27 AM
And the fans exclaim
Piro-san, you don't suck!
Will he listen now?

Largo, no linguist
Talks in blurbs of blahs and blahs
Charlie Brown flashback?

It makes you wonder
Where are Kimiko, Yuki?
We'll have to wait, ne?

No fanservice here.
More Miho in fuku, please.
Maybe tommorow.


Posted by: Echo Jul 9 2001, 09:56 AM
Wait! I see it now!
That's not a fez on his head!
It's Otakon b33r!

Posted by: m@x Jul 9 2001, 10:07 AM
You people are weird.
Scary, Creppy, Sleep Deprived.
You forum people...

You people are weird.
Sadly I am one of you.
I think I need help...


Posted by: Phaedrus Jul 9 2001, 10:36 AM
Largo's happy place:
Katana in hand, he leaps!
M4d whirls, and gore flows.

Kimiko's good spot:
Glad girl stars in marquee row -
otaku go wild.

Trackball gives Dom peace:
Rad swirls, a travesty grows.
Fans suffer those days.

Revenge makes Ed calm:
"Cad! Churl! My job-stealing foe!
Dom, you p4y n0w, f00!"

How Ping gets centered:
Set InnerBliss = true
(she runs VBScript????)

[ July 09, 2001: Message edited by: Phaedrus ]


Posted by: smurd Jul 9 2001, 11:35 PM
Piro's day of fame;
the great room is by no means
"deserted and still."

Issa: Damnit, Busson, pick up the phone... hello? Busson, buddy, you may be next.

A day of haze;
the great room
is deserted and still.

[ July 10, 2001: Message edited by: smurd ]


Posted by: fr13dch1k3n Jul 9 2001, 11:35 PM
Piro!!!!!!!!!! Pu-leeeeez don't die!!!
We love you very much! Nooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!
Please remove the knife!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Posted by: fr13dch1k3n Jul 9 2001, 11:38 PM
Wow, this is fun. Yay.
Hiaku is Xtra l33t, man.
Ph33r m4 3n;0jm3n7!

Posted by: smurd Jul 9 2001, 11:41 PM
Covered with the praise,
Instantly I'd like to die
For this strip of mine!

(apologies to Etsujin)

Covered with the flowers,
Instantly I'd like to die
In this dream of ours!

[ July 10, 2001: Message edited by: smurd ]


Posted by: smurd Jul 9 2001, 12:23 PM
Piro says a word,
and Largo makes sounds -- baka
mono
is deep'ning.

(apologies to Takahama)

He says a word,
and I say a word - autumn
is deepening.

[ July 10, 2001: Message edited by: smurd ]


Posted by: Phaedrus Jul 9 2001, 12:47 PM
[metacomment]

Poets of old, sure.
But "real gas music"? Every
thing you know is wrong!

[/metacomment]


Posted by: smurd Jul 9 2001, 01:35 PM
[off-topic]

"We proceded to
get goodly stretched by the hemp
which smok'd us all like

Boston scrod," said Ben
Franklin of the Hopheads, young
lusting Libertines.

It's hotter 'n Heater
in Hellmouth today. So soft
and blue, like a tongue.

[/off-topic]


Posted by: smurd Jul 9 2001, 03:04 PM
Piro found success
but mono no aware
had found him before that

Posted by: jasonargosy Jul 9 2001, 03:43 PM
I hate to nitpick
But he's using the wrong knife
Needs wakizashi

Posted by: Northwind Jul 9 2001, 04:56 PM
Piro's confidence
Waning, waning, 'till at last
It reaches new low.

Largo, beer on head,
Utterly drunk, helpfully
Tells him, "Blah blah blah"

Depressed, uncaring
He prepares to end his life
honourably. But,

"No!" cry all the fans,
"You don't suck, Piro! You're 133t!
Sad Girls In Snow! Yeah!"

So Piro is saved
From disembowelment. Wonder
What he'll try next year!

EDIT: Stupid me. I did 5-8-5 instead of 5-7-5. I need caffeine.

[ July 09, 2001: Message edited by: Northwind ]


Posted by: smurd Jul 9 2001, 07:26 PM
"Sad Girls in the Snow"...
doesn't it sound like a song
that Neil Young might write?

Newbie: Neil Young? Who's that?

Smurd: Uh, that's Ni-Il Yung, a Chinese poet. Now shaddup.

[ July 10, 2001: Message edited by: smurd ]


Posted by: smurd Jul 9 2001, 07:41 PM
Piro's doesn't suck,
nor does his work, we're saying.
Piro's not a schmuck!

Thanks to Piro and
his ilk, in grim T.V.Land
we're no longer stuck.

[ July 10, 2001: Message edited by: smurd ]


Posted by: doctortripp Jul 9 2001, 09:01 PM
Will Piro commit
himself to the Great Void? I
hope not: that would suck.

Perhaps there is yet
another way, possibly
involving bad gin.

That might, at least, be
some cause for hilarity.
Ph33r his extreme b33r.


Posted by: smurd Jul 10 2001, 06:48 AM
Despite obvious
success, the Master has still
got a real death wish.

(runs and hides from Busson)

At the over-matured sushi,
The Master
Is full of regret.

[ July 10, 2001: Message edited by: smurd ]


Posted by: Echo Jul 10 2001, 07:30 AM
Hrm... I was going to make one about self-perception and how we are at times our own harshest judges, but all I came up with was this:

No warm summer day
can brighten our hearts when we
embrace the winter.


Hrm :

[ July 12, 2001: Message edited by: Echo ]


Posted by: smurd Jul 10 2001, 12:34 PM
Eternal curse of
the artist: no critic's barbs
hurt quite like his own.

Posted by: Phaedrus Jul 11 2001, 02:24 PM
quote:
Originally posted by smurd:

At the over-matured sushi,
The Master
Is full of regret.


Risking disrespect
towards dead poets and fish:
Busson's humor stinks.


Posted by: Kimichan Jul 11 2001, 03:10 PM
Ah, Megatokyo,
Itsumo tanoshi yo,
Piro-kun dai suki!

ki wo tsukete
Piro-kun, daijoubu yo!
ganbatte ne!

-Kimi-


Posted by: Phaedrus Jul 12 2001, 06:04 AM
quote:
Originally posted by smurd:
"Sad Girls in the Snow"...
doesn't it sound like a song
that Neil Young might write?

Newbie: Neil Young? Who's that?

Smurd: Uh, that's Ni-Il Yung, a Chinese poet. Now shaddup.


[!haiku]

I found a badly damaged copy of the Complete Works of Ni-Il Yung, which contained a fragment of this classic poem:

quote:

Hello, Sad Girl in the Snow
There are two ways you could go.
Cute schoolgirl or Queen, undead.
Or something else, yet unshown by Fred.

Largo, Piro see you their own way.
What's real for you, only you can say.
It's the doubts in you, that keep you saying yea or nay...

A related work, for those not born during Ni-Il's era: Cowgirl in the Sand

[/!haiku]

[ July 12, 2001: Message edited by: Phaedrus ]


Posted by: smurd Jul 12 2001, 02:55 PM
In the tradition
of Master Yung, let me say
then, "Long may you pun."

Posted by: Rincewind Jul 12 2001, 07:51 PM
fellow bungiefen
has made victorious strip
the tru7h will be spread

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