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Posted by: smurd Jun 13 2001, 08:56 AM
naze nani (how
indeed) does one clap eyes on
MegaTokyoís sights?

In Piroís vision
quiet streets yield simple
yet pleasant delights;

through Largoís bloodshot
orbs, prospects of grrlz and b33r
and unearthly fights.

[ June 13, 2001: Message edited by: smurd ]


Posted by: MelfinaStarwind Jun 13 2001, 10:11 AM
well, that is Largo
for you, he is quiet insane.
Piro must have a

lot of problems, no?
Dom and Ed drop bricks above.
Miho ponders life.

[ June 13, 2001: Message edited by: MelfinaStarwind ]


Posted by: Phaedrus Jun 13 2001, 10:22 AM
These words I posted
elsewhere, last night. Spooky
how they speak today.

Pray this repeated
post forgive, my mind blocked
with wonder for now.

****

Piro suggests that
truth is fluid in MT.
What is Miho's truth?

I think she is like
Schrodinger's cat: live or
(un)dead, undefined.

Each character's eyes
may perceive her true nature
in their unique way.


Posted by: smurd Jun 13 2001, 12:24 PM
Who is this Miho
bird, darkly cute yet threatíning?
Behind those pupils

indistinct, something
has ph33r-crazed Largo fretíning,
seeking Dutch c0ur4g3.


Posted by: Phaedrus Jun 13 2001, 03:52 PM
Through Largo's eyes
Vile temptress, unholy queen.
A foe to vanquish.

To Piro, mayhaps
a siren - stumbling block
to Kimiko's love?

What of Dom and Ed?
Their liege? Granter of tickets?
Or just some hot babe?

How can one Shell hold,
within so petite a frame,
such a hoard of Ghosts?


Posted by: account-removed-by-admins Jun 13 2001, 04:14 PM
Listen, Dom and Ed!
Drop bricks in Tetris only,
far less dangerous.

Special omake: Megatokyo's proverbial wisdom for l33t b4k4:
#1 "Yuki is in the eye of the beholder"


Posted by: mimuspolyglotis Jun 13 2001, 05:57 PM
Miho, evil queen of
supernatural beings
fear her dark cuteness

Will Largo fall to
her army of undead raver kids
or just fall dead drunk?

Piro, innocent;
falling for one darkly cute?
foreshadowing sucks!


Posted by: Phaedrus Jun 13 2001, 06:13 PM
quote:
Originally posted by jtux:
#1 "Yuki is in the eye of the beholder"

OOOOOOOOO! Magic existential pun +1! Go for the pun, jtux!

MT Fanboy Haiku:

I want a new shirt.
"Megatokyo: It's like
Rashomon. With b33r."


Posted by: smurd Jun 13 2001, 06:41 PM
quote:
Originally posted by Phaedrus:
MT Fanboy Haiku:

I want a new shirt.
"Megatokyo: It's like
Rashomon. With b33r."


[!HAIKU]Yeah! Yeah yeah yeah yeah yeah yeah yeah yeah yeah yeah yeah yeah yeah yeah yeah yeah yeah yeah yeah yeah yeah yeah yeah yeah yeah yeah! Piro, you guys, you reading this?

Is ANYBODY reading this? Seems like no-one cares about all this versifying. (Well, at least Dom ph33rs us, I guess I shouldn't complain.)[/!HAIKU]


Posted by: Dark Schneider Jun 13 2001, 11:42 PM
Haiku........okey i got it isnt that hard just some 5 - 7 - 5 syllable (for the orgn. have seen some othery types like 5 - 5 - 5)

I realy like it on someway......but the english disturbs me.....not that i dont like english but isnt like the original ... so anyone know some good japanes haiku (pages?)


Posted by: Jack Jun 14 2001, 03:02 AM
A Japanese Haiku
Thread? How would we gai'jin
read it? Answer that!

Posted by: smurd Jun 14 2001, 06:40 AM
Boku wa, nihon
no haiku wo, nihon de
yomimasu yo

Posted by: smurd Jun 14 2001, 06:54 AM
quote:
Originally posted by Dark Schneider:
I realy like it on someway......but the english disturbs me.....not that i dont like english but isnt like the original

[!HAIKU]No, of course not. We'll never match the beauty and austerity of something like Basho's classic:

furuike ya
kawazu tobikomu
mizu no oto

I can only speak for myself, but I've used the high-falutin' phrase shin-haiku to dignify my attempts to infuse this fine form with some decidedly gaijin concepts of rhyme, different meters, sentence sturcture, etc.

We do it for fun, we do it because to speak rhetorically (as opposed to off-the-cuff) is to think twice about what one is going to say.

Also, in the three or four threads we've been using, to my knowledge, none of us has flamed or otherwise harrassed any of the others about the quality (or lack thereof) or content, and have welcomed all comers.

Again, speaking for myself, I fully intend to make some attempt at "classical" haiku (Phaedrus included a link for this recently), which does indeed involve a 5-7-5 syllable pattern, is limited to a single stanza, generally makes a reference to the season, and involves a change of action or intention in the middle verse.[/!HAIKU]


Posted by: jamboy Jun 14 2001, 08:34 AM
Piro seems static
In all Naze Nani strips.
Could it be a fake?

Cunningly disguised
Cardboard cutout, with concealed
Tape-playing device?

Smurd, you are quite right.
While our efforts aren't Haiku
In the purest sense,

Nonetheless I feel
They stand on their own merits,
In some little way.


Posted by: jamboy Jun 14 2001, 08:48 AM
The works of Basho,
New to these less cultured eyes,
Were a pleasant find.

First sighted within
"Tonari no Yamada",
Ghibli's recent work.

(To be more correct,
There should be "~kun" at the end
Of the film's title.)

My Nihongo lacks
Ability to unlock
Their full native truth;

Yet some small meaning,
And their pure and simple form,
Pleases me greatly.


Posted by: smurd Jun 14 2001, 09:29 AM
How did you manage
to witness Tonari no
Yamada-kun
, hm?

Posted by: jamboy Jun 14 2001, 09:36 AM
Japanese Import
Of the Ghibli DVD,
Here to the UK.

It's a lovely disc;
The sharpest picture around,
And great Audio.

But the best of all:
In-house Ghibli translated
English subtitles!


Posted by: smurd Jun 14 2001, 10:16 AM
Well, heck, then, off to
Target, a DVD to
score, I must away!

Posted by: jamboy Jun 14 2001, 10:35 AM
Just one caveat:
Japan, just like the UK,
Is in Region 2.

Beware ye, also,
Region-free players won't play
"Region Enhanced" disks.

Players which, instead,
Allow manual selection
Are the way to go.

I can recommend
Pioneer models for this,
Or perhaps Wharfdale.

If you have BIG bucks,
Then you'll find Meridian
Put the rest to shame...

But alas, alack,
Their cheapest model to date
Costs nearly five grand.

<!haiku> http://www.meridian-audio.com/

Meridian 596 == Audio Visual Joy on a Stick.
( Don't get me started on the 800... 8^> )
</!haiku>


Posted by: Phaedrus Jun 14 2001, 10:47 AM
Some other student
posted that "learn haiku" link
yet I read humbly.

[!Haiku] I wrote an absurdly long thing about our local haiku style over the weekend, thought better of it, and never posted. But since the topic is open...sorry for the length:[/!haiku]

No Milquetoast am I.
Western in outlook, I fear
breaking no stricture.

Yet I confess that
multi-stanza haiku does
make me pause and think.

Rules I would break to
capture thoughts seventeen beats
could not encircle.

But what of spirit?
Do we loose the essence of
a captured moment?

I give two poems:
One short, but perhaps cryptic.
Can you understand?

quote:
Haiku restrictive?
No web-safe palette needed:
sans rhyme, use orange!

Another poem
waxes long on the same thought.
But is it haiku?

quote:
Sometimes fine art is
drawn, not from bounty
but from scarcity.

Haiku is like that.
Restriction of syllables
gives focus to scribes.

The web too, forces
artists to hew to its rules
or be '404'.

For good rendering,
CG artists must obey
the web-safe palette.

But through this dark glass
beauty may yet be crafted -
see fredart dot com

Perhaps such a sparse
palette offers new rewards
and other freedoms?

In haiku, it's so:
Sans rhyme, use any "orange"
with impunity!


Was the first poem
too incomprehensible?
Did the second bore?

Or do I probe things
that were best left unask-ed?
(Zen path: "Just say Mu").


Posted by: smurd Jun 14 2001, 01:17 PM
quote:
Originally posted by JamBoy:
Just one caveat:
Japan, just like the UK,
Is in Region 2.

Beware ye, also,
Region-free players won't play
"Region Enhanced" disks.


quote:
Originally posted by JamBoy:
Players which, instead,
Allow manual selection
Are the way to go.

I can recommend
Pioneer models for this,
Or perhaps Wharfdale.



Posted by: smurd Jun 15 2001, 01:30 PM
From writing text to
writing Perl code my work has
taken me, and on

the way, itís pulled my
Haiku plug. So many good
responses Iíve seen;

Iíd compose ripostes
For every frigginíone, but
Sadly, I must work.

But I promise, like
Ahnold in that great cyborg
flick, that Iíll be back.


Posted by: Phaedrus Jun 15 2001, 03:20 PM
Oh, friend smurd farewell
who could keep this pace for long?
We all do have lives.


As Tarquin foretold
each thread has it's time, no more.
Our time, maybe past.

I for one will still
post for now, but echoes and
silence make poor sport.

One note (you still there?)
A book - you will like I think
Try this: House of Leaves


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