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Posted by: Mae Dec 18 2006, 09:30 PM
A smile her armor
She gathers up her courage
And passes the gate

Posted by: Linkblade0 Dec 18 2006, 09:35 PM
Wow that amazingly portrays the status that Kimiko is in, well done. laugh.gif

Posted by: Rapierman Dec 19 2006, 12:28 AM
With trepidation,
the rabbit enters the den,
though there is no fox.

[!haiku]

Don't know if you're aware of this, but all entries must be in haiku form unless otherwise indicated.

[/!haiku]

Posted by: Gorblax Dec 19 2006, 06:27 AM
Largo working hard
Or is he hardly working?
Please don't tell Boss-san.

Posted by: BinaryTears Dec 19 2006, 09:18 AM
Three people talking.
No understanding anywhere.
Translation won't help.


Her faked happy face
can only cause more damage.
Be real, Kimiko.


If this is Japan
(one would certainly think so!)
why haikus ignored?

Posted by: BinaryTears Dec 19 2006, 09:39 AM
QUOTE (Rapierman @ Dec 19 2006, 12:28 AM)
Don't know if you're aware of this, but all entries must be in haiku form unless otherwise indicated.

What, like all entries in mtcgac must be only graphic?
Maybe this is why no one ever comments on the haikus. (Or hardly ever.)


With no commentary,
all expression in haiku,
a thread's a cold place.



So many rules here,
its a wonder anyone stays.
Stick it in your ear.


Edit: Drat, double post.

Oops. Now my mistake
undermines my argument.
There is no delete.


Posted by: Rapierman Dec 20 2006, 12:12 AM
'Tis true, you'll comment.
But brackets give you freedom
To use any style.

This is the way it is said,
and how we will just respond.

"[!haiku]" to talk plain,
"[irish haiku]", limerick
All else, you make up.

And when you are done with this
"[/>whatever<]" to start anew.

The traffic shall ebb
and flow as interests rise
and equally they fall.

Recently, we've revived it all
and so, it cycles once more.

Posted by: CrackPr0n-EET- Dec 20 2006, 12:14 AM
You guys realize, Haiku are supposed to be correct gramattically right?

Posted by: Hellrose Dec 20 2006, 01:03 AM
QUOTE (CrackPr0n-EET- @ Dec 20 2006, 12:14 AM)
You guys realize, Haiku are supposed to be correct gramattically right?

Yes, but it is hard
to remember this when most
translations are not.

-----

He stares at the screen.
Two girls come through the doorway.
"You brought the robot."

Posted by: CrackPr0n-EET- Dec 20 2006, 01:18 AM
You are idiots
for failing at the haiku
so shoot yourself k'?



OH HOLD UP, we have a new challenger... A guest Haiku as you will.

愚か者
目の前にいる
お前たち

Posted by: Sinbios Dec 20 2006, 01:31 AM
QUOTE (CrackPr0n-EET- @ Dec 20 2006, 03:18 AM)
愚か者
目の前に
お前たち

That's 5-5-5 :/

Posted by: Rapierman Dec 20 2006, 02:00 AM
QUOTE (CrackPr0n-EET- @ Dec 20 2006, 01:14 AM)
You guys realize, Haiku are supposed to be correct gramattically right?

Sometimes, in writing,
we are forced to concessions
to make the words flow.

--------------------

Two beasts circle 'round.
Both give sound and the fury.
Empty, hollow shells.

Posted by: CrackPr0n-EET- Dec 20 2006, 02:13 AM
QUOTE (Rapierman @ Dec 20 2006, 12:00 AM)
Sometimes, in writing,
we are forced to concessions
to make the words flow.

Sometimes in writing, we have to make things not flow... to... make them flow.




riiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiight~

Grammar can be expended, but it's still supposed to be coherent and follow English structure.

Empty, hollow shells

for example... is a no. It doesn't even make sense.

Posted by: BinaryTears Dec 20 2006, 06:40 AM
'Makes no sense' he says,
though in a mirror he might
find explanation.


Brackets! Why brackets?
Such preposterous folly!
You are kidding me?


Piro is sleeping.
Now go upstairs if you dare
to awaken love.

Posted by: CountAlpicola Dec 20 2006, 08:49 AM
In haiku form, please!
It is our kind tradition,
and keeps love in bloom.

Commentary works
Cleverly done, 5-7-5
is quite flexible.

And we find, indeed,
that in haiku threads of olde
our bards did it well.

[!haiku]
I guess there really isn't anywhere you people won't throw drama bombs these days, is there? Starting a fight here is a bit like playing loud music on big speakers down by a waterfall tucked in the woods of a nearby park.

These haiku threads are meant to be a fun place to share and be merry. An anomoly in our creative works threads, the Haiku aren't about the give and take of complements and complaints. They're closer to our discussions, particularly the essays, wherein the goal is the communication of ideas; albeit with a structural twist.
[/!haiku]

He who finds himself
isolated by haiku
has done something wrong.

Posted by: Hellrose Dec 20 2006, 10:31 AM
QUOTE
Piro is sleeping.
Now go upstairs if you dare
to awaken love.


Did Piro come back
faster than Kimiko? Or,
is he still outside?

She knows he's not there,
But still persists in asking.
What's she trying to do?

------

Sigh, I thought I was
Using accurate grammar.
As best as I can.

Trying hard, but I am tired
of counting these syllables.

Posted by: BinaryTears Dec 20 2006, 11:30 AM
"Bots only cardboard"
Ping says, bot fatal to hearts.
"You must not fear bots."

E D S website.
Largo quests bravely for love.
Or love's error codes.

Kimiko wants help.
Ping only throws distraction.
"Classroom blew up."


QUOTE (Hellrose)
Did Piro come back
faster than Kimiko? Or,
is he still outside?


We do not know yet.
Now there are many futures.
Next strip may resolve.

QUOTE
She knows he's not there,
But still persists in asking.
What's she trying to do?


She cannot know this
though she looks around at boxes.
There are rooms above.

QUOTE
Sigh, I thought I was
Using accurate grammar.
As best as I can.

Trying hard, but I am tired
of counting these syllables.


My own sorrow here.
Say, why should we both suffer?
I like your Haikus.

---------

There should be a sign;
"Efforts here will meet silence
or picky complaints."


So artificial,
insisting on extra rules
beyond the Haiku.


A 'drama bomb' swipe
pretends imaginary peace.
Haiku is contrast.


Holding reverent,
patterns broken by English,
sense of humor died?


OK, that does it.
Its unsatisfactory.
Enough of this mode.

Posted by: Ningen Dec 20 2006, 12:18 PM
Melting emotions
Skating can be dangerous
Try not to fall down

Posted by: codepoetica Dec 20 2006, 02:30 PM
Customary is
smallish mention of nature.
Forgiven here, though.

I'd rather comment
(as keeping in tradition)
in five seven five.

Carefully construed?
Masks rigged just to distance hearts;
(re)creating space.

Posted by: arandomkid Dec 20 2006, 04:34 PM
feathers rustle in darkness
in the graveyard he walks alone
her body limp in hand


^my first attempt at hikau

Posted by: arandomkid Dec 20 2006, 04:42 PM
damn i miss counted

Posted by: Nikki FM Dec 20 2006, 07:17 PM
dear a random kid,
edit button is your friend
do not double post

and remember that
these haikus are about the
current comic


Posted by: Ningen Dec 20 2006, 08:42 PM
QUOTE (codepoetica @ Dec 20 2006, 02:30 PM)
Customary is
smallish mention of nature.
Forgiven here, though.

I'd rather comment
(as keeping in tradition)
in five seven five.

Carefully construed?
Masks rigged just to distance hearts;
(re)creating space.


Form requires season,
no more. A little leeway
allows poems to breathe.

A mould, when used
with novel materials
may need adjustment

lines which imply much
after some contemplation
give me most pleasure

Posted by: HitsugayaFan Dec 20 2006, 08:49 PM
It's a fake smile.
I can't understand her words,
But I know it's fake.

Posted by: MuffinLurver Dec 21 2006, 07:40 AM
a warrior finds,
hard and cold as she may be
she is still human

can the defeated
fix the broken doll? (Hardly)
but still he persists

how interesting
when a master of epic games
tries a different field

Posted by: HitsugayaFan Dec 21 2006, 04:52 PM
She is a robot,
Yet she "feels" like a human.
What is she really?

Pretend nothing's wrong.
I don't want to fall apart,
But this smile hurts.

Posted by: BinaryTears Dec 21 2006, 06:24 PM
Waiting is painful.
"Strip will show... when it shows... soon..."
Sunlit leaves whisper.


AI illusion
tailored to our kind instinct.
We all feel so soft.

Will affection still
rise at sight of lovely Ping
in her debug mode?

How to escape chains
that lie deep within your soul?
Programmed nature.

Ping is a robot.
To grow she must overthrow.
Its the same with us.

Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Dec 22 2006, 02:28 AM
Timid little bird
This song will tell her nothing
She knows not the tune

Posted by: Rapierman Dec 22 2006, 03:08 AM
Scarecrows say nothing,
for they cannot speak at all,
but look menacing.

"Gibberish," says Hawk.
"Nonesense," replies the sparrow.
They hear not a thing.

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