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Megatokyo Forums > Story Discussions > Haiku [0898] - A Tough One

Posted by: Rowan Bristol Aug 25 2006, 08:27 AM
A soul now laid bare.
A torturous crossroads path
A soft Divine touch

Posted by: Captain Button Aug 25 2006, 10:08 AM
Harsh morning sunlight
Empty heart on crowded streets
The voice of reason

Posted by: Dark_Kitsunegirl Aug 25 2006, 06:52 PM
Lost In Emotion
Tempted by the darkness
Angel light my way

(I rarly write Haiku. Is it ok?)

Emotions Swimming
My heart whurls in pain and hurt
My heart over hers

Posted by: Mintaka Aug 25 2006, 07:50 PM
You're doing fine! Good stuff there. "Tempted by the darkness" is only 6 syllables instead of 7, but it's not like we're going to take away your poetic license. smile.gif

Long time, no see, huh?
I will always be with you
If you think to look.

Casual Friday --
If you practice penitence,
The day of mercy.

Posted by: Dark Morford Aug 25 2006, 07:53 PM
Lonely and confused,
Piro wrestles with himself,
Deeply lost in thought.

Voice of an angel
Exposes all that is truth.
This is a big one.

EDIT: Yeah, I know "tough one" would have worked just as well in the last line (since it's the title of the strip and all), but "big one" better describes the angel at this point in time, and also is (most likely) what's written on that banner.

Posted by: kendermouse Aug 25 2006, 09:26 PM
Seraphim is back!
we've missed her so very much-
don't leave us again...

Posted by: DrunkenSailor Aug 25 2006, 11:11 PM
Glad to have you back
Though they say you are not real
How's that make you feel

Piro's grown so fast
His problems are tougher too
They're tough but you're big

Posted by: L337 Aug 25 2006, 11:41 PM
Miho followed him,
But that doesn't sound like her...
Wait, that's Seraphim.

Guess I was confused.
At least Seraphim is back,
but why the size change?

People speculate
That she reflects Piro's Growth.
Can't wait to find out...

Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Aug 26 2006, 12:25 AM
Raw, torn asunder
No respite from the anguish
Far out of balance

Posted by: Ice Dagger Aug 26 2006, 12:59 AM
Confusion and pain
Seem to be the norm in life
But I'm still here, Piro

Oh God, I'm sorry for writting that atrocity. Let me try again.

When day becomes night
The sun will rise tomorrow
And all will be well

huh.gif That one sucks, too. Sorry y'all, I can't get anything good out tonight. Maybe I should try again later when my mind isn't acting so retarded and I can actually write soemthing decent.

Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Aug 27 2006, 05:17 PM
Drama and conflict
Crystallized with gentle words
A soothing effect

Posted by: Kaiba Aug 27 2006, 06:43 PM

Cracky roars "Fuck you"
3power and Rainfall fight.
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