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Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Jun 18 2006, 10:55 PM
Quiet resolve found
The hateful torrent quelled
Whipping boy no more

Posted by: uberlegen Jun 18 2006, 11:00 PM
QUOTE (NekuraEtowaru @ Jun 18 2006, 09:55 PM)
Quiet resolve found
The hateful torrent quelled
Whipping boy no more

While the whip exchanged control,
It gave no more cruel lashes.

Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Jun 18 2006, 11:04 PM
Stink of injustice
His eyes have been forced open
She'll just bring him pain

Posted by: uberlegen Jun 18 2006, 11:06 PM
QUOTE (NekuraEtowaru @ Jun 18 2006, 10:04 PM)
Stink of injustice
His eyes have been forced open
She'll just bring him pain

Exposed to the glare of angst,
The brilliant frustration blinds.

Posted by: caed Jun 18 2006, 11:07 PM
My god ive never been this happy, i mean that was the right thing to do, nothing hurtful, he is totally correct he did not deserve that at all, he has been nothing but a loyal friend this entire time, bravo Piro

bravo

Posted by: Rapierman Jun 18 2006, 11:31 PM
[!haiku]

Caed: This is a haiku-only thread. The MDT and ADT for the comic are elsewhere.

[/!haiku]

Enough is enough.
This thunderstorm will end now.
Off with the anger.

Silenced, there will be regrets.
For now, this tempest finished.

Posted by: AncestralHamster Jun 19 2006, 09:18 AM
Your favorite http://www.megatokyo.com/index.php?strip_id=286:
That I will be no longer.
Goodbye Kimiko.


Renai this is not.
There is no reset button
For a broken heart.

Posted by: Wing alpha Jun 19 2006, 09:25 AM
You crossed a line
your eyes despice me
even after what I did
maybe this is my cue
as I stand quiet
I mutter the words
as the door closes
I stand there
lost in my heart

Posted by: marthwmaster Jun 19 2006, 09:47 AM
Piro has no heart
Why'd he not get on that train?
They have no future.

Posted by: Blayze Jun 19 2006, 10:09 AM
Softly spoken words
The venom has found its mark
She must ponder now

Hope I got that right. tongue.gif

Posted by: Monkey-Sensei Jun 19 2006, 10:14 AM
Nothing is as cruel
as the calmly whispered truth.
Tears are welling up.

Posted by: Mae Jun 19 2006, 10:45 AM
He takes a step back
So she sees her position.
She's gone much too far.

Posted by: Wing alpha Jun 19 2006, 01:17 PM
she looks in fear
she's gone too far
no reason she knows
she hates herself
he mutters his words.
he stays her tears burn
as she knows she lost

Posted by: AkaiLady Jun 19 2006, 01:51 PM
Bubble exploded,
Fantasies stripped of color
Damaging a friend.

Posted by: russianwolf Jun 19 2006, 02:12 PM
why hate,
why pain,
why me,
should I die.

no...I live,
why should I,
life is short.

Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Jun 19 2006, 11:16 PM
Realized far too late
Poisoned words fell the spring blooms
The petals scatter

Posted by: Arimikoe Jun 19 2006, 11:27 PM
Truth descends, spectral
She did not mean to say that,
Cause him such sadness

Posted by: plasmamoon Jun 20 2006, 12:03 PM
a worrier,
a lover,
both boughtt freedom for others
with their hearts.

targeted my the suppressors,
the 3vil one will come,
only the free can save
the heartless.

huh.gif
( more like free write )

Posted by: Hiryu Kaga Jun 20 2006, 12:50 PM
No venomous words
Just simple facts stated
For she knows her fault

Posted by: russianwolf Jun 20 2006, 01:09 PM
kimiko don't ye love thou,
yet ye toss thou in to the darkness,
thou I love ye and yet ye don't tell.

(not my best work, but you get the point)

Posted by: Hiryu Kaga Jun 20 2006, 01:32 PM
[OffT]
Russianwolf, it sounded like:

"Kimiko, don't you love you
yet you toss you into the darkness
you I love you and yet you don't tell"

unless my knowledge of non-modern English is lacking.
[/OffT]


tears of self-loathing
silence after the thunder
the damage is done

Posted by: masamage Jun 20 2006, 01:33 PM
[3-5-3]
Why argue?
What more could I say
Than the truth?
[/3-5-3]

The only way to
Stop you from hurting people,
Including yourself,
Is to remove the target
And to leave you, all alone.

Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Jun 20 2006, 11:16 PM
The line has been drawn
The enemy is engaged
Will self-loathing win?

Posted by: Hiryu Kaga Jun 21 2006, 04:40 AM
no more can be said
though thoughts scream to leave my mouth
our time is over

Posted by: mylemonblue Jun 21 2006, 05:06 AM
Hell in anger is given
Hell quitely returns
The door is closed

Posted by: qwertyui Jun 21 2006, 05:39 AM
Regret fills her eyes
Pain locks his heart
Their day ends

P.S:
My first 3 line haiku-like creation ever
Don't kill me if it sucks.
Tell me if i broke any haiku rules tongue.gif

Posted by: UltraPredAlien Jun 21 2006, 06:12 AM
That was... Deep. I felt sad myself, just looking at that this strip. sad.gif

Posted by: BlackLiger Jun 21 2006, 06:18 AM
QUOTE (UltraPredAlien @ Jun 21 2006, 06:12 AM)
That was... Deep. I felt sad myself, just looking at that this strip. sad.gif

[!haiku]
Indeed. I agree, Beau.
[/!haiku]

[Verse]
The door shuts.
He waits for her to speak.
A final THUNK
[/verse]

Not quite a haiku, I don't think, but close enough for me smile.gif

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