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Posted by: Rapierman Jun 16 2006, 09:34 PM
Incoming shrapnel
caused by a friendly firestorm
in the fog of war.

The volcano spews forth lava,
even the innocent die.

Posted by: Shoka Jun 17 2006, 12:12 AM
[!haiku]Erm...just some verse I was playing around with, that I didn't feel like postin' in its own thread. Last few comics have been kind of a downer (not that that's a bad thing!^^) Gomen.[/!haiku]

[verse]

Tonight was the night
When you thought things might change,
You would treat your fans right,
Get respect in exchange,
If you stood in plain sight,
Understanding their plight,
Then perhaps they would not act so strange.

But in typical fashion
Their behavior was lame,
And the scene you imagined,
You hoped for in vain;
In a last, desperate action,
You showed them your passion;
They showed you that they had no shame.

The girl will get wasted tonight at some bar,
Perhaps she'll be joined by her friend,
She'll drink 'til the memory has gone away far,
And her conciousness comes to its end.


When self-loathing rose
Like a storm-swollen tide,
And your calm, quiet pose
Bled away with your pride,
Then the words that you chose
Flew like merciless crows
At the eyes of the friend by your side.

So what's left to say
When the bottom drops out,
And there's no room to play,
And there's nothing to shout?
There's just hell left to pay
At the end of the day,
All alone with the pain and the doubt.

The girls'll get wasted on beer and rice wine,
'Til their eyes cross in back of their heads,
When it's no longer tasted, their drink-sodden minds
Will be ready to sink into bed.


[/verse]

Posted by: killmoms Jun 17 2006, 01:16 AM
[!haiku]Still can't compete with the best, but it is fun.[/!haiku]


[irish haiku]
Our hero, his patience now worn,
Is the target of feminine scorn.
Accusation is made:
"You just wanna get laid!"
A phrase she'll regret in the morn'.
[/irish haiku]

Posted by: Shoka Jun 17 2006, 01:18 PM
[!haiku]The great thing about these threads is we don't compete in here. In fact, it's more often the case that we extend each other's comments:[/!haiku]

QUOTE (Rapierman)
The volcano spews forth lava,
even the innocent die.

i know it "rains on
the just and unjust alike",
but man, it still bites!

QUOTE (killmoms)
[irish haiku]
Our hero, his patience now worn,
Is the target of feminine scorn.
Accusation is made:
"You just wanna get laid!"
A phrase she'll regret in the morn'.
[/irish haiku]

[irish_haiku]
While it wouldn't do Kimiko harm
To ask pardon, for getting so warm,
Of Piro, but yet,
She may have some regret
If she woke up with him on her arm.
[/irish_haiku]

[!haiku]And btw, that was a well done "irish haiku", km. happy.gif[/!haiku]

Posted by: Temenus Jun 17 2006, 02:56 PM
Like the northern wind
Words, cold harsh they steal my warmth
Yes, I did fuck up!

/Temenus, who should leave bad poetry to the teenagers but just cannot help himself...

Posted by: AncestralHamster Jun 18 2006, 11:17 AM
The pendulum swings
One extreme to another
With no middle ground.

Posted by: killmoms Jun 18 2006, 12:17 PM
QUOTE (Shoka @ Jun 17 2006, 02:18 PM)
[!haiku]The great thing about these threads is we don't compete in here. In fact, it's more often the case that we extend each other's comments:[/!haiku]

[irish_haiku]
While it wouldn't do Kimiko harm
To ask pardon, for getting so warm,
Of Piro, but yet,
She may have some regret
If she woke up with him on her arm.
[/irish_haiku]

[!haiku]And btw, that was a well done "irish haiku", km. happy.gif[/!haiku]

[irish_haiku]
Well I certainly wouldn't endorse
A night's worth of intercourseó
Though that argument zest
Oft-times makes it the best,
For them it might bring some remorse.
[/irish_haiku]

[!haiku]Certainly not competition, but I do envy a good limerick writer. wink.gif[/!haiku]

Posted by: Haldane Jun 18 2006, 01:36 PM
From Piro, Kimiko mistakes
All Otaku as trodden down saints,
When the fans set her straight,
It's at Piro she'll hate,
And accuse him of their depraved taint.

Posted by: russianwolf Jun 18 2006, 01:39 PM
fire is hate,
water gives kindness,
when the fire is put out there is peace

Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Jun 18 2006, 05:18 PM
Felled by friendly fire
He lies helpless before her
Easy prey for barbs

Posted by: Shoka Jun 18 2006, 10:28 PM
QUOTE (NekuraEtowaru @ Jun 18 2006, 05:18 PM)
Felled by friendly fire
He lies helpless before her
Easy prey for barbs

what follows now? i foresee
an ambiguous regret.

Posted by: Mr. No Duh Jun 18 2006, 10:34 PM
there once was a man from nan...

woops

If I had any poetic talent at all I would make one... but I dont so all I can do is complment all the others.

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