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Posted by: uberlegen Jun 1 2006, 12:36 PM
[!haiku] This strip should yield some interesting poems. Let's hear 'em! happy.gif [/!haiku]

They should have remained mute,
Now the volume is rising,
Rapidly louder.

If only they could rewind,
Or eject themselves away.


Posted by: Pedophilia Jun 1 2006, 12:42 PM
panties are to be shown
my flesh is interested
i want to see more

she will now lift her skirt up
the "flowerpot" of desire

Posted by: Artemi Jun 1 2006, 01:07 PM
General:
Pinned to their tables,
Caught by her blinding spotlight,
Showing them as fools.
Is it worth it, in the end?
Love thrown 'way for fantasy?

Kimiko:
<So. Her words were true.>
<How'd I'd think I'd be different?>
<Exposing myself...
Is that all men really want?>
<Fine, then, if thats what they want...!>

Piro:
Oh, no... she found out...
Wasn't I like this, before...?
No, not anymore!
These people don't understand-!
-! Kimiko, stop! Don't do it!

Posted by: uberlegen Jun 1 2006, 01:23 PM
An upskirt pic, huh?
Now you'll get one, the hard way.
But was it worth it?

Bordering explicitness,
Not justifying the means.

Posted by: Ibaimendi Jun 1 2006, 03:28 PM
A surprise for fans
From icy idol sadness
Blooms a woman's rage...

Posted by: Kage Jun 1 2006, 03:53 PM
Sensitive fanboys
On forums want not a glimpse;
They delude themselves.

Some of us know what we want;
They're pristine, angelic white.

EDIT:(Solidarity Phil! you're not alone!)

Posted by: TibbyMSTie Jun 1 2006, 04:54 PM
Anger fuels flames
Rising high and so's her skirt
Piro quick - stop her!

Everyone waits to find out
Will they be boxers or briefs?

tongue.gif

Posted by: AkaiLady Jun 1 2006, 05:42 PM
Unsure and angered,
An obession gone awry,
She has had enough.

Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Jun 1 2006, 07:40 PM
Face reality
Pain, shame their notion of love
Idoru has claws


Posted by: masamage Jun 1 2006, 09:35 PM
Do you really need
More reasons to keep wanting
What you'll never have?

~

Somehow, this doesn't
Impress me, or make me feel
The slighest bit loved.

Posted by: Dark Morford Jun 1 2006, 10:17 PM
[!haiku]Been a while since I've been in one of these. Let's see if I've still got it~[/!haiku]

Seemingly pure heart;
In truth, simply a facade.
Pent-up anger flows.
Reality shows its face:
What you seeŚnot what you get.

Posted by: Rapierman Jun 1 2006, 11:23 PM
You have tempted fate.
The volcano will now blow.
This lava is yours.

You should have left it alone.
Now burn in your putrid sins.

Posted by: Shoka Jun 1 2006, 11:37 PM
an imprudent wish
to be showered in riches
may get you buried.

[irish_haiku]
Her feline regard has transfixed
Silly rabbits that tried to get pix;
Now the hunter's soft call
Paralyzes them all,
'Cuz the tigress is on to their trix!
[/irish_haiku]

Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Jun 1 2006, 11:43 PM
QUOTE (Shoka @ Jun 1 2006, 10:37 PM)
an imprudent wish
to be showered in riches
may get you buried.

Releasing the raging flood
Restraint crumbles before them

Posted by: masamage Jun 2 2006, 02:35 PM
All reservation
And any meekness--drowned out
By this pounding in my ears.

Vague nightmares crumble,
Burned scalding hot by anger.
Germs of shame are gone
But rage at the invasion
Carries me, and powers me.

I am lashing out
Because when the fever breaks
The sickness will stop.

Posted by: masamage Jun 2 2006, 06:32 PM
One more, melodramatic, in 4-6-4:

By the graveside
Of murdered innocence,
The guilty weep.

Posted by: Mintaka Jun 2 2006, 10:27 PM
Are you not ashamed?
How dare you take advantage! -- take
The sight that's mine alone

To keep secret, or to show
To only my beloved!

I am no angel.
I too am a sinner, so
I know what you want.

It sickens me, how your lust
Howls to make me just a toy.

I am no cute girl
To blush and stammer and think
This is an honor --

Pretend sophistication,
Accept victimization.

I'm a grown woman.
I am human, I have worth,
And this will not do.

Posted by: russianwolf Jun 2 2006, 10:35 PM
"ashamed,
emberassed,
loved,
not the same,
for human action,
that does not trust,
my self"

Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Jun 2 2006, 10:37 PM
Depravity shown
In a flash, a soul is lost
In a camera

Posted by: unfuse Jun 3 2006, 12:41 PM
Everybody stares at her scared -
quite so verbally impared! -
will she finish her lift?
or calm to a drift?
~nobody at all will be prepared!~

first shot at a haiku happy.gif

Posted by: Dark Morford Jun 3 2006, 06:57 PM
[irish]
Those fanboys; our Kimiko caught 'em
With cameras. They thought she'd not spot 'em.
Their gazes askant,
She completed her rant
Saying, "Panties? You want 'em, you got 'em!"
[/irish]

EDIT: Misplaced apostrophe

Posted by: uberlegen Jun 3 2006, 09:56 PM
[!haiku]
unfuse:
A haiku has three lines. 5 syllables in the first one, 7 in the second, and 5 in the third. And it doesn't have to rhyme. That's what's generally done in this thread.

What you attempted was a limerick, or "irish poem". This style is different, which is why the posters of these put [irish] or such around it. You can read more about the specifications on that form of poetry http://tinyurl.com/no95h, since I'm no expert on it.

And there's no problem, I just wanted to let ya know what was up since you're new. laugh.gif

Very good first attempt, I might add. happy.gif

Everyone else: DarkMorford's poem was win, just wanted to confirm that. tongue.gif

[/!haiku]

Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Jun 4 2006, 12:11 AM
Unfettered fury
Long concealed, now flows freely
Regrets to follow

Posted by: unfuse Jun 4 2006, 12:21 AM
QUOTE (uberlegen @ Jun 3 2006, 09:56 PM)
[!haiku]
unfuse: .....

And there's no problem, I just wanted to let ya know what was up since you're new.  laugh.gif

Very good first attempt, I might add.  happy.gif
(etc )

[/!haiku]

thanks! i'll try better next time happy.gif

Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Jun 4 2006, 12:44 AM
With his fury spent
He can do naught but stand by
As she vents her spleen

Posted by: bulmabriefs144 Jun 4 2006, 05:38 PM
Secretly leering,
Otaku hid in shadows
Waiting for a peek.

Kimiko glared.
"You want to see my panties?
Take a peek, losers!"

All gasped in room.
"We mustn't defile purity!"
They said to Pure Heart.

Pure Heart spoke just then,
"If I'm pure, I wouldn't mind,
...I'm not very pure though."

"Did you not see 'nough?
Was there not enough fetish?
Have your fill and leave!"

Posted by: Small Pink Mouse Jun 4 2006, 06:19 PM
I do know your wish.
Should I grant your desire
and then poison it?

Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Jun 4 2006, 06:57 PM
I gave them my faith
They captured my innocence
Leaving it to die

Posted by: masamage Jun 4 2006, 08:05 PM
QUOTE (NekuraEtowaru @ Jun 2 2006, 09:37 PM)
Depravity shown
In a flash, a soul is lost
In a camera

Nice one!

~

I guess I'll have to
Switch to gym shorts, maybe. Or
Bloomers, or boxers--
Even black-lace lingerie,
Just so nobody quite knows.

Posted by: littlethunder Jun 4 2006, 09:37 PM

This is a message
I've long wanted you to get
Are you listening?



LittleThunder

Posted by: TibbyMSTie Jun 5 2006, 10:04 AM
QUOTE
Pretend sophistication,
Accept victimization.

*VERY Powerful and wonderful - thank you!!!





If she shows them all
What will their reaction be?
Poor Piro! This sucks.

Posted by: masamage Jun 5 2006, 11:52 AM
Finally, tonight,
The next comic will tell all.
What? Back to Largo??

tongue.gif

Posted by: TibbyMSTie Jun 5 2006, 12:01 PM
Masamage, how cruel
To predict such a plot change
Sigh. It's so likely.

Posted by: masamage Jun 5 2006, 01:20 PM
QUOTE (TibbyMSTie @ Jun 5 2006, 11:01 AM)
Masamage, how cruel
To predict such a plot change
Sigh. It's so likely.

I actually trust Fred more
Than that, but he's fun to tease.

^_^

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