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Posted by: NekuraEtowaru May 11 2006, 11:34 PM
Reward for kindness?
Blood of a companion spilled
Love is not enough

Posted by: Shoka May 12 2006, 12:17 AM
hmm - if i dood it
i'm gonna get in twuble...
i'm gonna dood it! - Tweetie Niho

[WK_haiku]
When she healed him, he finally stood,
And stabbed Largo as hard as he could.
It's cliché, yes I know,
But it just goes to show,
In every dark soul, there's some good.
[/WK_haiku]

[!haiku]Damn, just can't seem to get into a serious frame of mind on this one. Gomen, Nekura. Maybe later.[/!haiku]

Posted by: Mintaka May 12 2006, 10:18 AM
Turn the other cheek --
Though "greater love hath no man",
One responds cruelly.

In this sad and fallen world,
Defend as well as forgive.

But there's no take-backs
Of the gift of life; it turns
The betrayer's thrust

Into gut feelings, sinks deep,
Transforms her -- though 'gainst her will.

Who at last will reap
What Pirogoeth's hand then sowed?
The whirlwind waits.

Posted by: TibbyMSTie May 12 2006, 10:35 AM
[WK_haiku]
When she healed him, he finally stood,
And stabbed Largo as hard as he could.
It's cliché, yes I know,
But it just goes to show,
In every dark soul, there's some good.
[/WK_haiku]

OMG - TOO FUNNY!! laugh.gif


Such a sad vision
The fallen hero lies still
Purple ribbons laugh

Posted by: Gandor May 12 2006, 12:38 PM
What is this feeling?
Are you trying to save me?
For that he will die.

Posted by: littlethunder May 12 2006, 01:06 PM

friend now enemy
lover turns into hater
so close to the end


LittleThunder

Posted by: XkyRauh May 12 2006, 01:49 PM
Well for goodness sake!
He's already unconscious...
Why the coup-de-grace?

Your attempt at an ending was blown.
The blood on your cloak is your own--
But with one simple thrust,
comes confidence; trust:
Insurance against the unknown.

With Largo's defeat...
Is this what failure tastes like?
My blood is boiling.

Posted by: AkaiLady May 12 2006, 02:35 PM
Exhausted and unsure,
Torn between love and loyalty,
Betrayal rewards her.

[aside] I can't seem to get the syllables to fit with this haiku. No matter what picture I want painted, I have to shave away something that seems too vital to this poem. Dang... this sucks, and it'll just have to be what it is. Sorry to those who read this and realize how unhaiku-like it is. C'est la vie. [/aside]

Posted by: Makarot May 12 2006, 03:14 PM
Heal fast as to die.
Rise ye Betrayer, take sword.
Oh! The easy kill.

Posted by: Monkey-Sensei May 12 2006, 04:00 PM
There is little joy
in killing you when you're down.
I will do without.

Posted by: NekuraEtowaru May 13 2006, 12:08 PM
[!haiku] There is nothing wrong with lightening things up, Shoka...this was a very dark strip...[/!haiku]

Love, creeping poison
Dementia taking over
Dooms wounded comrades

Posted by: russianwolf May 13 2006, 05:03 PM
death for love
love for kindness
why, for me

Posted by: NekuraEtowaru May 13 2006, 07:31 PM
Love, an illusion
Hatred is a reality
Deception the rule

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