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Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Mar 17 2006, 09:15 AM
A dream your heart held
Shattered by base disregard
Pain unchecked by time

Posted by: Elite Owl Mar 17 2006, 09:41 AM
*Largo's point of view*
Many kinds of scars.
All pain kept deep within us.
Death of trust stings most.

*Erika's point of view*
Largo empathize?
This is so surreal. What's next?
Oh, it's flashback time!

Posted by: twofotisx Mar 17 2006, 10:24 AM
belief in allies
the bitter pain of defeat
betrayal's anguish

Posted by: l33t n1nj4 m4st3r Mar 17 2006, 10:34 AM
Largo knows his stuff
Help and advice he can give,
He has seen her pain

Posted by: Shoka Mar 17 2006, 05:40 PM
[3-5-3]
balance fails
when trusted ground shifts
underfoot.
[/3-5-3]

[irish_haiku]
With two hosts, at least ten thousand strong,
I observed, as I looked o'er that throng,
"Their swords are sharp, but
"The unkindest of cuts
"Will be made by a friend who went wrong."
[/irish_haiku]

QUOTE (NekuraEtowaru)
A dream your heart held
Shattered by base disregard
Pain unchecked by time

[renga]
let mourning fade with the dream,
let pain run out through the cracks.
[/renga]

Posted by: Shimizu-san Mar 17 2006, 06:00 PM
irish haiku:
(in honour of st patty's day today biggrin.gif)

When one bears with the brutality
of a friend-enduced fatality
it's hard to go on,
you'll not sing a song
but you can log off to face reality

Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Mar 17 2006, 08:25 PM
Cruelest cut of all
From out of the familiar
Comes the killing stroke

Posted by: Negima Mar 17 2006, 10:48 PM
Important virtue.
Trust: not easy to rebuild
Once it has been cut


(Eh, why not, Irish haiku)
We all speak in song and not twaddle
All the knights walk strong, not waddle
We stand tall with pride
With castle by side
Whoops, it's only a model

Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Mar 18 2006, 01:05 AM
QUOTE (Shoka @ Mar 17 2006, 03:40 PM)
QUOTE (NekuraEtowaru)
A dream your heart held
Shattered by base disregard
Pain unchecked by time

[renga]
let mourning fade with the dream,
let pain run out through the cracks.
[/renga]

[!Haiku] I got renga'ed by Shoka...I can die happy now wink.gif Thank you Shoka that was awesome![/!haiku]

Shifts in the surface
Reveal the darkness beneath
Exposing falsehood


Posted by: Soruk Mar 18 2006, 04:19 AM
Painful memories
unable to shake them loose
eating you alive.

Posted by: FallenAngel080 Mar 18 2006, 10:11 AM
Seeing the tribulation
Watching the horror
Denial it's your life
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Words have no power
They control our hearts
Actions are caused by words
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Hearts weak but free
Finally opening up
Grow strong together

Posted by: AncestralHamster Mar 18 2006, 10:22 AM
QUOTE (Shoka)
[3-5-3]
balance fails
when trusted ground shifts
underfoot.
[/3-5-3]

[5-5]
Uncertain footing
Stops a life's journey.
[/5-5]

QUOTE
[renga]
let mourning fade with the dream,
let pain run out through the cracks.
[/renga]

A infected wound,
Reopened to bleed cleanly.
Healing can now begin.

QUOTE (NekuraEtowaru)

Shifts in the surface
Reveal the darkness beneath
Exposing falsehood

[renga]
Love grows not in poisoned earth:
Delicate flower withers.
[renga]

Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Mar 18 2006, 12:40 PM
[!haiku] *hyperventilating* OMG, AnscestralHamster too???? EEEEEE!!! *squeal* *dances around in a circle fangirling like a nut* [/!haiku]

Foundations weakened
Less substantial than the air
Was his love for her

Posted by: Shoka Mar 18 2006, 06:03 PM
it's been far too long
since we've done this sort of thing;
let's keep it going! happy.gif

QUOTE (AncestralHamster)
[5-5]
Uncertain footing
Stops a life's journey.
[/5-5]

[5-7-5]
tuck and roll,
then take your stand on
firmer ground.
[/5-7-5]

QUOTE (PrimevalFurrball)
An infected wound,
Reopened to bleed cleanly.
Healing can now begin.

anodyne roughly applied
may still heal effectively.

QUOTE (NekuraEtowaru)
Foundations weakened
Less substantial than the air
Was his love for her

that house tumbled to ruins,
rue grew among the debris.

Posted by: AncestralHamster Mar 18 2006, 07:07 PM
QUOTE (NekuraEtowaru)
Foundations weakened
Less substantial than the air
Was his love for her

[renga]
Her hopes built on empty air,
A foundationless future.

[/renga]

[!haiku]
QUOTE (NekuraEtowaru)
[!haiku] *hyperventilating* OMG, AnscestralHamster too???? EEEEEE!!! *squeal* *dances around in a circle fangirling like a nut* [/!haiku]

Heh! But I've done it http://forums.megatokyo.com/index.php?showtopic=1702859&view=findpost&p=3920950

QUOTE (DancesWithHerrings)
[3-5-3]
tuck and roll,
then take your stand on
firmer ground.
[/3-5-3]

[5-5]
Firm ground is useless
If one will not walk.
[/5-5]

Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Mar 18 2006, 07:56 PM
QUOTE (AncestralHamster @ Mar 18 2006, 05:07 PM)
QUOTE (NekuraEtowaru)

[!haiku] *hyperventilating* OMG, AnscestralHamster too???? EEEEEE!!! *squeal* *dances around in a circle fangirling like a nut* [/!haiku]


Heh! But I've done it http://forums.megatokyo.com/index.php?showtopic=1702859&view=findpost&p=3920950

[!haiku] blink.gif Wow where was I? Blonde roots showing *sheepish look* I like how the haiku thread has turned to renga...fun! [/!haiku]

Flowering cavern
Concealed the dragon from view
The flames seen too late

[!haiku] Making Shakespeare spin in his grave for the win! [/!haiku]

Posted by: Shoka Mar 18 2006, 10:09 PM
QUOTE (PrimordialJellybeanFactory)
[5-5]
Firm ground is useless
If one will not walk.
[/5-5]

[3-5-3]
when the girl
regains her center,
she will walk
[/3-5-3]

QUOTE ("NekuraEtowaru")
Flowering cavern
Concealed the dragon from view
The flames seen too late

not flowers, but fanboy flesh
concealed the fiendish spirit!

[!haiku]heh...let's make the ol' bard spin faster![/!haiku]

Posted by: Mae Mar 19 2006, 12:06 AM
QUOTE (Shoka @ Mar 18 2006, 10:09 PM)
[3-5-3]
when the girl
regains her center,
she will walk
[/3-5-3]

[5-5]
Walk forth and trample
Her foes 'neath her feet
[/5-5]

[3-5-3]
No longer
Bound by treachery,
Awakened
[/3-5-3]

[!haiku] Nice to see you again, AH.[/!haiku]

Posted by: AncestralHamster Mar 19 2006, 03:00 AM
QUOTE (Mae @ Mar 18 2006, 11:06 PM)
[5-5]
Walk forth and trample
Her foes 'neath her feet
[/5-5]

[!haiku]
Shades of Conan the Barbarian!

[Shameless Conan ripoff]
From the Akihabara Chronicles.

"... Hither came Erika the cynical, black-haired, sullen-eyed, coffee in hand,
a idoru, a model, an armbreaker, with gigantic angst and gigantic *ahem*,
to tread the jeweled thrones of the earth under her slippered feet."


[/Shameless Conan ripoff]
[!haiku]

QUOTE
[3-5-3]
No longer
Bound by treachery,
Awakened
[/3-5-3]

[5-5]
Rising from a tomb:
Buried emotions.
[/5-5]

QUOTE
[!haiku] Nice to see you again, AH.[/!haiku]

[!haiku]Thank you, Mae. It's good to be back. Nekura's fangirling was also good from my ego! smile.gif [/!haiku]

QUOTE (DolfieMaster*)
[3-5-3]
when the girl
regains her center,
she will walk
[/3-5-3]

[5-5]
What path does she take,
on this new journey?
[/5-5]

[!haiku]
* Not many people are going to get that reference!
[/!haiku]

QUOTE (NekuraEtowaru)
[!haiku]I like how the haiku thread has turned to renga...fun! [/!haiku]

[!haiku]
Indeed. Cooperative verse is an interesting exercise, and one I find enjoyable.
[/!haiku]

Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Mar 19 2006, 10:39 AM
QUOTE (AncestralHamster)
[!haiku]Thank you, Mae.  It's good to be back.  Nekura's fangirling was also good from my ego! smile.gif [/!haiku]


[!Haiku]Always glad to oblige, AH! You've been absent for a long time...missed ya![/!Haiku]

QUOTE (AncestralHamster)
[!haiku]Indeed.  Cooperative verse is an interesting exercise, and one I find enjoyable.[/!haiku]


[!Haiku]We might wanna 'splain it for the newer folks though...don't wanna leave people out...

I am going to leave out the fancy terms for the different parts (cuz I'm being blonde and can't remember them), but how it works is this:

Someone writes a haiku 5-7-5 then someone *quotes* that person and adds their own bit in two lines, each 7 syllables.

and so on...it can be a lot of fun!
[/!Haiku]

A Warrior heart
Can bear many travesties
Save for betrayal

Posted by: AncestralHamster Mar 20 2006, 11:50 AM
QUOTE (NekuraEtowaru @ Mar 19 2006, 09:39 AM)

[!Haiku]Always glad to oblige, AH! You've been absent for a long time...missed ya![/!Haiku]

[!haiku]Feel the love! biggrin.gif [/!haiku]

QUOTE (NekuraEtowaru @ Mar 19 2006, 09:39 AM)
A Warrior heart
Can bear many travesties
Save for betrayal

Such wounds never heal cleanly,
A legacy of lasting scars.

Posted by: Shoka Mar 20 2006, 05:05 PM
QUOTE (HabitrailPiper)
[5-5]
What path does she take,
on this new journey?
[/5-5]

[3-5-3]
trust again,
or trust nevermore;
light or dark.
[/3-5-3]

QUOTE (Conan_the_Hamsterian)

Such wounds never heal cleanly,
A legacy of lasting scars.

every cicatrix
is a memory of pain;
some call this wisdom.

[irish_haiku]
Now this parody by the Hamsterian,
That derived from a famous Cimmerian,
For a girl among men
With gigantic *ahem*,
Makes me wonder what bottle of beer he's on. happy.gif
[/irish_haiku]

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