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Posted by: Elite Owl Mar 10 2006, 02:19 PM
*Kimiko's point of view*
It's time for the show.
Oh my, look at all of them!
Stagefright creeping in.

*Megumi's point of view*
What was that loud noise?
Please do not lean on the glass!
Such stupid fanboys!

*Fanboys' point of view*
Murmur and murmur.
Oh my, is that really her?
Oh please serve me first!

Posted by: Monkey-Sensei Mar 10 2006, 02:20 PM
*snaps his fingers in bohemian approval*

Posted by: Elite Owl Mar 10 2006, 02:23 PM
QUOTE (Monkey-Sensei @ Mar 10 2006, 03:20 PM)
*snaps his fingers in bohemian approval*

Umm thanks I think...

But please, if you are going to post in here bring a haiku with you! Thanks. wink.gif

Posted by: Monkey-Sensei Mar 10 2006, 02:36 PM
Ah, I see. And yes, it was a compliment.

Reader's POV:

Time for the buildup
I feel so damn excited
Now wait for Monday

Posted by: kaitou Mar 10 2006, 06:15 PM
Great! All four of them!

I almost hate to ruin the quality by adding my pitiful attempt, but...

Reviewer's viewpoint:

Most excellent work,
But Fred still thinks that it sucks.
What is with this guy?

or, (very simple Japanese translation):

すごいだね、
ピロがまずいって。
なにやってんの。

If I'm going to do bad haiku, might as well do badly translated haiku. tongue.gif

Posted by: jellylu Mar 10 2006, 06:35 PM

a hundred fanboys,
some too enthusiastic,
goodbye pie display.

viola: my first attempt at a haiku. hope it is allright unsure.gif

Posted by: l33t n1nj4 m4st3r Mar 10 2006, 09:15 PM
goes out to face them,
the crazed fanboy otakus.
why poor kimiko?

Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Mar 11 2006, 01:36 AM
Put up or shut up
Speaking of things we know not
Asking for trouble

Posted by: Monkey-Sensei Mar 11 2006, 02:45 AM
I've got another one.

Beware, Kimiko
The jaws that bite, claws that catch!
Beware the Otaku!

Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Mar 11 2006, 09:55 AM
Father forgive me
I knew not what I wrought
They're not innocent

Posted by: jellylu Mar 11 2006, 05:09 PM
she goes through the door,
like a lamb to the slaughter.
where are you piro?!

Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Mar 11 2006, 11:52 PM
Oh, the poor fanboys!
But what about poor Kimi?
They no longer care

Posted by: quikwit47 Mar 12 2006, 12:13 PM
Piro-san grows a spine
Fanboy perverts form a line
It's asskicking time

Posted by: TechnoPenguin Mar 12 2006, 01:47 PM
Nice one, quikwit biggrin.gif

Maybe Largo will stop by:

What's with all the hassle?
Some fools drooling for a girl
Bah, beertime for me.

And greetings to my english teacher...

Posted by: l33t n1nj4 m4st3r Mar 13 2006, 08:58 AM
yah, quikwit! awesome haiku!

-------------------------------------
kimiko's problem,
a hundred drooling fanboys.
what can piro do?

Posted by: AncestralHamster Mar 13 2006, 09:56 PM
Deer in the headlights:
Facing terror o'erwhelming,
But by her own choice.

Posted by: Haldane Mar 14 2006, 07:28 AM
She enters the room
Their hungry eyes watch the prey
Ravening beasts crouch

Hey AncestralHamster, are you finally back? You've been missed since November. I regret to say that the Renga faded away 3 or 4 weeks ago due to insufficient posters. Mae and NekuraEtowaru occasionally helped to keep it alive, but our efforts were insufficient.

Posted by: l33t n1nj4 m4st3r Mar 14 2006, 09:07 AM
many crazed men waiting.
to what end goes Kimko?
has Piro a plan?

Posted by: 1man_army Mar 14 2006, 09:26 AM
ok, here is my FIRST ohmy.gif attempt at a haiku... so dont say it sucks, because i already know that.

Piro:
She couldn't have
She just walked out.
Why are they so crazy about her?

Kimiko:
Here I go..
Off to fix what i said...
Why me?

Posted by: l33t n1nj4 m4st3r Mar 14 2006, 09:37 AM
i'm not going to say they're bad, just a question. do you know the format for haiku?

(5 syllables, 7 syllables, 5. or at least follow 17 syllables.)

so the first one is fine.

Posted by: AncestralHamster Mar 14 2006, 01:46 PM
QUOTE (Haldane @ Mar 14 2006, 06:28 AM)
She enters the room
Their hungry eyes watch the prey
Ravening beasts crouch

Sacrificed for their appetites
On the altar of duty.


[!haiku]
QUOTE (Haldane)
Hey AncestralHamster, are you finally back? You've been missed since November.

For a litle while at least, but every time I take one of these long sabbaticals from the forums, I'm less active in the forum than when I left. As such, I won't make promises that I can't keep.

QUOTE
I regret to say that the Renga faded away 3 or 4 weeks ago due to insufficient posters. Mae and NekuraEtowaru occasionally helped to keep it alive, but our efforts were insufficient.

Yes, I saw that when reading the Piro renga yesterday, and I appreciate that the three of you tried to keep it going. Keeping the Piro renga alive was an uphill battle, since even when there was greater interest, Piro simply did not have the drawing power that other characters did. People wanted to write about Erika, Kimiko, Ping et al and so there was no need to boost flagging enthusiasm.

With the Piro renga, often it seemed people felt writing something for Piro was like pulling their own teeth, and so it moved slowly (even allowing for the new guidelines). It might have been a different story had it been about Miho instead.

[/!haiku]

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