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|Posted by: Elite Owl Feb 22 2006, 04:11 AM|
| *Erika's point of view*
Present confronts past.
This change is quite frightening.
Can I handle it?
*Largo's point of view*
Beer in a machine.
It has both king size and jars.
Erika needs one.
|Posted by: l33t n1nj4 m4st3r Feb 22 2006, 09:04 AM|
| Some quarters for booze.
Now, what concoction to choose?
whats this, jars of beer?!
|Posted by: littlethunder Feb 22 2006, 09:12 AM|
so hard, sharp and bent
thrown away, he's back again
my red boomerang
|Posted by: l33t n1nj4 m4st3r Feb 22 2006, 09:19 AM|
|thats a good haiku, but i was wondering how it related to the page? |
|Posted by: squ33k Feb 22 2006, 09:19 AM|
| Beer from a machine?
What will Japan think of next?
|Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Feb 22 2006, 09:21 AM|
| Not need...attraction!
No velvet gloves for his queen
Healing out of pain
|Posted by: l33t n1nj4 m4st3r Feb 22 2006, 09:23 AM|
they... actually... have... somthing like this.. ^^;
|Posted by: Shadowy Intent Feb 22 2006, 09:36 AM|
| A simple offer:
Fellowship and alcohol--
Take it or leave it
|Posted by: littlethunder Feb 22 2006, 09:50 AM|
For starters, the basic physical action depicted in the strip is "Largo goes away, Largo comes back". That reminded me of boomerangs and annoying little brothers. Since boomerangs are more picturesque, I looked for ways to use that theme. Largo would have to be the boomerang, so I needed someone to be throwing him. All I had left was Erika. Is there a way she could be described as throwing him?
Yes, there is. As I mentioned in the discussion thread, Erika gave Largo a good amount of money. One interpretation could be that she was trying to get rid of him, consistent with http://www.megatokyo.com/index.php?strip_id=682. Though I don't personally believe Erika was trying to push Largo away in this strip, that idea matched well with what a person does to a boomerang: throw it away from themselves.
So I wrote the haiku from the viewpoint of an Erika who keeps trying to get rid of Largo, but finds him back in front of her again. He is her boomerang. He has red hair, so he's her red boomerang.
l33t n1nj4 m4st3r, can you please try to stick to haiku poems in the haiku threads like this one?
|Posted by: Moneneko Feb 22 2006, 10:07 AM|
Why does this strange man
Insist on melting my mask
Softening my face?
When has pushing off
Become so hard? Why do I
want to clutch the flames?
For the first one: Erika dosen't really now Largo all that well, but since her old Fiance left her, he's the first man who managed to have such an effect on her life. She's afraid of what will happen if she lets herself feel comfortable with him, but there's something about Largo that she can't seem to deny, and it's bringing her out a bit more.
Second one: Erika has gotten used to pushing aside most of her more tender emotions, shes gotten good at it over the years. Now Largo comes and becomes determined to protect her, and though she dosen't want to admit it, shes greatful to his devotion to her. And although she wants to push him away from her, everything she does to try, dosen't seem to faze Largo. The flames are to represent Largo, for a mix of his red hair and his firey personality, and the clutching means she knows she will be sad if he gives up on her.)
|Posted by: Soruk Feb 22 2006, 10:24 AM|
Anything strangely bizarre,
|Posted by: Negima Feb 22 2006, 10:38 AM|
[!haiku]And other vending machines that's hard to believe at times.[/!haiku]
That is what you mean to me
So why do you stay?
|Posted by: l33t n1nj4 m4st3r Feb 22 2006, 11:15 AM|
| @ littlethunder: ok. i see. now i really like your haiku. excellent visualization.
sorry. i do usually just stick to the topic, haiku. so i'll make another and put it here.]
feeling so confused
seeking to understand him
(my first haiku was for Largo, this one is for Erika.)
|Posted by: L33tsaber Feb 22 2006, 04:20 PM|
| Largo now returns
Eri claims she needs him not
He thinks she needs beer.
|Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Feb 22 2006, 09:09 PM|
| Dance in their orbits
Neither sure of the right steps
But willing to try
|Posted by: Mae Feb 22 2006, 11:08 PM|
| For some reason I was reminded of http://www.megatokyo.com/index.php?strip_id=716... I'll add the translation in because I had to look it up again....
Don't do this!! Please, don't run away! Erika didn't mean to hurt you!
She may seem really cold, but inside she's really a kind-hearted girl!
I think Erika is just afraid to open up her heart to anyone else because she's been hurt before so many times.
But she's just trying to be tough about it. Largo, she's really just afraid of having the same things happen to her all over again...
But I'm sure that she really doesn't want you to give up. I'm sure of it!
Frame5: So... if you like Erika even just a little, please don't give up.
You won't give up, right Largo? Can you promise me that?
And what I got from that:
Her cold words guarding
Her fear of pain repeating
A kind-hearted girl
|Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Feb 23 2006, 10:53 PM|
| A spring thaw in fall
Ice cracks and reveals beauty
In no dependence
|Posted by: l33t n1nj4 m4st3r Feb 23 2006, 10:58 PM|
nice haiku! how does it relate? nice imagery.
here for you is beer
you need not me, beer you need
need I not you, just beer
|Posted by: NekuraEtowaru Feb 24 2006, 01:51 AM|
[!Haiku] (which is the convention used for non-haikuage in haiku threads) It just kinda came to me, to be honest. What I was trying to say with the imagery used was that progress is being made in Erika and Largo and how they relate to one another. I don't know that I'm ready to jump on the ExL bandwagon, but this last strip gives me great hope that they can at least be friends. The first line refers specifically to the fact that it is September in the strip...and relations between Largo and Erika are showing a thaw...[/!haiku]
The barriers fall
Not another Otaku
He can call her friend