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Posted by: Opt498 Oct 27 2004, 02:18 AM
そんな事
自分で決める
べきじゃない

<You should not decide such a thing by yourself.>

A sad memory
Raises her indignation
I too could be wrong

Posted by: AncestralHamster Oct 27 2004, 02:25 AM
Past devastation.
Emotional tidal wave:
Her world still ruined.


A new seed planted:
An unintended lesson.
What sapling will sprout?

Posted by: Arram Oct 27 2004, 02:33 AM
Being successful
But losing the one you love
Can only bring pain

Erika's sadness
Over a pathetic dork
Peek into the past

New revelation
American embarrassed
No right to decide

Posted by: snark Oct 27 2004, 02:36 AM
QUOTE (AncestralHamster @ Oct 27 2004, 08:25 AM)
A new seed planted:
An unintended lesson.
What sapling will sprout?

Plants will thrive in fertile soil;
Listen, then, if you have ears!

[irish haiku]
While helping him clean up the shop,
Miss Kimiko gives Piro the chop,
Her unwitting low-blow,
That will none-the-less show,
His pronouncement would come as a flop!
[/irish haiku]

Posted by: IAmNotADuck Oct 27 2004, 07:54 AM
Cling to those you can.
The only one who loved her,
Ran into darkness.

Bitter memories.
Reliving the deepest cut;
A helpless angel.

Posted by: AncestralHamster Oct 27 2004, 10:26 AM
QUOTE (snark @ Oct 27 2004, 08:36 AM)
Plants will thrive in fertile soil;
Listen, then, if you have ears!

The brambles of fear
grew and choked Hitoshi's heart.
Let love grow instead.

Posted by: Opt498 Oct 27 2004, 12:41 PM
QUOTE (AncestralHamster @ Oct 27 2004, 09:26 AM)
The brambles of fear
grew and choked Hitoshi's heart.
Let love grow instead.

That brambles sprouted at all-
An inattentive gardner?

Posted by: ChibiChibi Oct 27 2004, 01:39 PM
The one I wanted
Didn't think he was for me
though I loved him so

Showbiz was for me
But he cowered in my light
Afraid of the crowd

Though I knew you,
beloved for everything,
Why did you leave me?

I should have seen it
Should have met his needs
It was my failing

And yet here I am,
changed to make him happy
but he still won't come

Gonna grow, be strong;
I'm mov'n on, mov'n on
in another light


Sorry, today just hit a chord with me, so I don't know if this is appropriate.

Posted by: AncestralHamster Oct 27 2004, 08:49 PM
QUOTE (Opt498 @ Oct 27 2004, 06:41 PM)
That brambles sprouted at all-
An inattentive gardner?

The worm gnaws the roots
When the gardener is careless.
Love must be nurtured.

[!haiku]

ChibiChibi: Yes, that's perfectly fine. This is the haiku thread, it's usually pretty relaxed in here as long as it pertains to haiku, other Japanese verse forms, or "adopted haikus" like "Irish haiku" (limerick).

If the muse favors you, then run with the inspiration.

[/!haiku]

Posted by: snark Oct 27 2004, 09:30 PM
QUOTE (AncestralHamster @ Oct 28 2004, 02:49 AM)
The worm gnaws the roots
When the gardener is careless.
Love must be nurtured.

When one plants roses, and the
Other tulips, neither grow

Posted by: Spiritsnare Oct 27 2004, 10:05 PM

no one understood
why erika would go with
such a boring boy...

"i think you deserve
much better than me," said he--
she had cried that night...

she was loving and
caring, but hitoshi thought
he was unworthy

devastation and
depression mix to form
the erika we know...

after that she could
not take it anymore -- she
had been abandoned

it is rather sad,
kimiko mentions as she
puts the books away

meanwhile, piro thinks
about how he felt while on
the crapper with sera

piro begins to
empathize with hitoshi
about the dark past

he had also felt
the same way as he pondered
in that there restroom

-=-

Spiritsnare cannot
wait for Friday's comic -- more
will be revealed happy.gif

On the second-to-last haiku...I cheated, lmao XD

All of the above was created using the emotions I got from http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v162/Scientision/Megatokyo/Chapter%205/0627b-sci.jpg

hope my haikus are good happy.gif

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