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Posted by: Lukkai Sep 22 2004, 03:27 PM
No thread yet?
In this case, I start.
Bring it on!


You dare to mock me?
You act hypocritical
And are bad at it!


I am leaving now.
You! Think about it again
Before our next game.

Posted by: Almost Perfect Sep 22 2004, 03:34 PM
A short summary:
Miho blows up at Largo
and hurts his feelings.

Posted by: DCR Sep 22 2004, 07:47 PM
QUOTE (Almost Perfect)
A short summary:
Miho blows up at Largo
and hurts his feelings.

The only feelings he has
Are for b33r and more b33r

Posted by: Almost Perfect Sep 22 2004, 07:53 PM
that's not a haiku
think before you post again
comments should fit in.

largo gets chewed out
ping stands there like a moron
junko is a nerd

Posted by: AncestralHamster Sep 22 2004, 08:06 PM
Know thy enemy:
A challenge is what I seek ...
You are not worthy.

The avalanche starts
With the fall of one pebble:
A word to Junko.

[/haiku]

Almost Perfect: DCR is responding in renga format to your earlier haiku. Without tangible imagery to develop further, he has chosen to comment on an aspect of Largo's personality instead.

renga: thirty-one syllables also arranged in 5-7-5-7-7. As practiced here, the first person writes 5-7-5, and the respondent uses 7-7, taking the imagery of the first "verse" and either developing it further or twisting it slightly to bring something new to the poem. The next respondent then writes 5-7-5 and so on.

[!/haiku]

Posted by: Garran Sep 23 2004, 02:50 AM
QUOTE (Lukkai @ Sep 22 2004, 01:27 PM)
You dare to mock me?
You act hypocritical
And are bad at it!

(Our chastened hero, it seems,
Can't e'en get his failings right.)

Posted by: masamage Sep 23 2004, 03:33 AM
This has been
A disappointment,
Paladin.
You come unprepared--
Tarnished, bent--and I
Am angry.
Never before have
You failed me.

Posted by: Damion Requiem Sep 23 2004, 01:21 PM
A mocking offense
To thing a marionette
Can hold onto strings.

Posted by: Nebulious Sep 23 2004, 01:32 PM
QUOTE (Damion Requiem @ Sep 23 2004, 02:21 PM)
A mocking offense
To think a marionette
Can hold onto strings.

Don't try to take the reigns, fool
If I let go, you'll fall down

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