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Posted by: masamage Aug 30 2004, 07:10 PM
[3-5-3]

I'm sorry
I didn't mean to
Scare you and

I never
Mean to make a mess
But somehow

I always
Get my blood, my hurt,
Everywhere

[/3-5-3]

Posted by: dimension_drift Aug 30 2004, 07:33 PM
[irish haiku]
When some blood falls in an awkward place,
Piro decides that he needs some space.
Closing tight shut the door,
We wonder what's in store,
As Piro tries to clean up his face.

-------

With Kimiko worthy of mention,
For altering Piro's conceptions;
This some see as a dream,
But poor Piro, it seems,
Still has problems with blood retention!
[/irish haiku]

(Meh... not bad for a first try... tongue.gif)

Posted by: snark Aug 30 2004, 08:31 PM
QUOTE (masamage @ Aug 31 2004, 01:10 AM)
[3-5-3]
I'm sorry
I didn't mean to
Scare you and

I never
Mean to make a mess
But somehow

I always
Get my blood, my hurt,
Everywhere
[/3-5-3]

[5-5]
I spoil things again
This time her nice shirt

I don't deserve help
She's too nice to me

No, that's not it... I
Want to be alone
[/5-5]

Posted by: cosmicShadow Aug 30 2004, 08:36 PM
[waltz_haiku]
Hurrying, Scurrying,
Piro hides in his room;
Kimiko stands in the back
hallway alone.

Is it the bleeding or
something exceeding
that keeps him from showing
what he feels to the bone?
[/waltz_haiku]

I hope that's good - it's my first in this style.

Posted by: Forest Sage Aug 30 2004, 08:43 PM

Linked by blood, we touched--
a connection too strong--a
contract I can't sign.

The pool: deep. Rich. Red.
You see only drops but I'm
more hurt than I look.


Posted by: Shoka Aug 30 2004, 11:22 PM
[3-5-3]
autumn leaf
tossed upon the wind;
i'm worthless
[/3-5-3]

[irish_haiku]
I just wanted to help her get through
Her ordeal, but I guess that I knew,
When the fecal cascade
Hits the rotating blades,
There ain't a damn thing I can do.
[/irish_haiku]

Posted by: AncestralHamster Aug 31 2004, 01:22 AM
Even her embrace
Cannot fill the emptiness.
How useless I am.

QUOTE (Shoka @ Aug 31 2004, 05:22 AM)
[3-5-3]
autumn leaf
tossed upon the wind;
i'm worthless
[/3-5-3]

[5-5]
My life, like the leaves,
Trampled underfoot.
[/5-5]

Posted by: masamage Aug 31 2004, 03:15 AM
[!haiku] Wai, Forest Sage. I loved those. [/!haiku]

Posted by: cosmicShadow Aug 31 2004, 05:41 AM
[3-5-3]
Suppressed love
hidden, crying out -
blood mixed tears.

Piro yearns -
his heart bleeds, like his
countenance.
[/3-5-3

Posted by: Forest Sage Aug 31 2004, 08:51 AM
[3-5-3]

Aw, thankies
masamage. Piro
comics give

to me sweet
inspiration. I
hope for more.

[/3-5-3]


Wait, is masamage three syllables or four? Sorry. If it's four just change "Piro comics" to "these comics" and it works! happy.gif



Posted by: E-chan Aug 31 2004, 11:41 AM
[No reason to the form, just a little rhyme...]
She touched me; she held me…
If my heart beats any faster,
This nose bleed will never stop.

She may care; she may dare…
But how can I accept it when
I just got blood on her top?
[/No reason to the form, just a little rhyme...]

[Kimiko haiku]
Is this little blood
Really what’s bothering him?
He seemed so nervous…

Why’d I hug so hard?
I should have been more gentle!
Please, Piro… come out.
[/Kimiko haiku]

[Irish haiku]
Now safely back in the store,
hiding behind a sliding door.
What a day it’s been for Piro!
All beat up and not the hero,
But closer to Kimiko than before?
[/Irish haiku]

Posted by: masamage Aug 31 2004, 12:09 PM
QUOTE (Forest Sage @ Aug 31 2004, 07:51 AM)
[3-5-3]
Aw, thankies
masamage.  Piro
comics give

to me sweet
inspiration.  I
hope for more.
[/3-5-3]

Megatokyo--my
Muse has so many voices
When I travel here.

[!haiku] You were right; three syllables. ^^ [/!haiku]

Posted by: Nebulious Aug 31 2004, 12:55 PM
Wicked transaction:
To fill the heart of my soul
While earthly empties

QUOTE (Forest Sage)
The pool: Deep. Rich. Red.
You see only drops but I'm
more hurt than I look.
A mere trickle in the dam
Cracks grow wider, more comes through

[3-5-3]
QUOTE (AncentralHamster)
My life, like the leaves,
Trampled underfoot.
A slow death
For one unworthy
Of your light
[3-5-3]

Posted by: DCR Aug 31 2004, 01:59 PM
I'll do it myself
I can do things on my own
Tired of their pity

Physical body will heal
But the mental's been shattered

I'm so far from home
Can't keep Largo from trouble
Failing to teach art

Was rescued by Erika
Instead of protecting her

Found a girl I like
She found Ping and thought me hentai
Met me in real life

And tried to drink me away
Did wonders for my ego

So don't stand so close
Give me some room, let me breathe
Thanks, but I've got it

I must do this by myself
Get my life back together

[/long-winded view of Piro's state]

Posted by: Lukkai Aug 31 2004, 04:13 PM
First blood loss
Then she sees my mess.
Hitting ground.


[freestyle]
On the edge of sanity
Piro reaches the bottom
Kimiko is left alone
Without any chance to help
[/freestyle]

Posted by: masamage Aug 31 2004, 08:46 PM
QUOTE (DCR @ Aug 31 2004, 12:59 PM)
So don't stand so close
Give me some room, let me breathe
Thanks, but I've got it

I must do this by myself
Get my life back together

[!haiku] Wai.. [/!haiku]

[3-5-3]
I know what
It is like to feel
Pathetic
[/3-5-3]

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