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Posted by: nekobawt Jul 18 2004, 11:15 PM
"my little princess"?
int'resting choice of pet names
for a doomed android...

after complaining,
ed adjusts the targeting
of his brand new toy;

he leans lazily against
his killtrunkô and tries again.

keep in mind that we
can be divested of that
which we think we own

lost amid her thoughts,
ping stares sadly at her hair--
well, what's LEFT of it...

from his reptile perch,
sonoda-san notices
something is amiss.

"what, ANOTHER load?
damn, i've got bigger problems!
someone take it out!"

ping looks up, startled,
shaken from her revery
by sonoda-san.

Posted by: Dark Morford Jul 18 2004, 11:30 PM
Amazing Haiku
How do you write them so fast?
Wish I could do that

[/haiku] Sorry, I don't know much about haiku beyond 5-7-5... what's with the two-liners?

Posted by: nekobawt Jul 18 2004, 11:51 PM
QUOTE (Dark Morford @ Jul 18 2004, 10:30 PM)
Amazing Haiku
How do you write them so fast?
Wish I could do that

[/haiku] Sorry, I don't know much about haiku beyond 5-7-5... what's with the two-liners?

practice. MUCH practice.
i've been 'ku-ing for at least
three years at this point.

besides, i just love word play,
and haiku quite fit the bill. smile.gif

[/haiku] i think my first megatokyo-related haiku was for the one where largo got the idea to use his cool thing to plug ping into a power line. i could be wrong. i do know that my first haiku wasn't really a haiku (though it DID have 17 syllables biggrin.gif), but it still inspired the posting of megatokyo haiku topics. my one claim to non-fame (since no one knows who i am in that context laugh.gif).

as for the two-liners, if memory serves, a haiku in the form of 5-7-5-7-7 is called a "renga." someone please correct me if i'm wrong, which is quite likely. tongue.gif

Posted by: Nebulious Jul 19 2004, 05:01 AM
You are property
All your rights are illusions
Come back now, my dear


Your mind, mere numbers
Your heart, written equaisions
Your soul, fantasy


Standing at death's door
Teetering oblivion
Unaware of fate

Posted by: Lukkai Jul 19 2004, 09:20 AM
Fanboys and students
Are now aware of the RAZ
And flee in terror.

But what about Erika
And the people beneath her?


And did Sonoda
Jump down from the RAZ or did
Ping climb up to him?

[/haiku]A good one, a bad one, can't think of more now. And I think you're right about the name nekobawt.[haiku]

Posted by: masamage Jul 19 2004, 12:10 PM
QUOTE (nekobawt @ Jul 18 2004, 10:51 PM)
as for the two-liners, if memory serves, a haiku in the form of 5-7-5-7-7 is called a "renga." someone please correct me if i'm wrong, which is quite likely. :P

Inexact, but close--
A poem in this form is
Known as a 'tanka'.
When you write the three lines, and
Your friend the two, that's renga.

Posted by: Lukkai Jul 19 2004, 01:00 PM
QUOTE (masamage @ Jul 19 2004, 08:10 PM)
Inexact, but close--
A poem in this form is
Known as a 'tanka'.
When you write the three lines, and
Your friend the two, that's renga.

I stand corrected.
So sorry for giving out
Wrong information!

Posted by: XkyRauh Jul 19 2004, 01:52 PM
[ haiku? ]

lounging with a smile,
Ed forsees Ping's destruction.
A crafty bishie. :-)

With ears still ringing,
A long moment of silence:
things have just begun!

[ irish haiku? ]

From a room in the school overhead,
Bishie Ed wants the robot girl dead.
First blast didn't take,
now Sonada's in the wake,
one more shot coming in the next thread!

All the fighting in Mt's Japan,
reminds me of Mt: the Clans--
"My character wins!"
"No way, she's too thin!"
Oh, where are the Funny Farm vans?

While Ed's up on his perch, debating,
his gun is recharging, he's waiting.
It's got a big bore--
that's hard to ignore--
Anyone else think he's compensating?

--Xky *waving his Mami flag happily*

Posted by: Dark Morford Jul 19 2004, 02:00 PM
QUOTE (XkyRauh @ Jul 19 2004, 02:52 PM)
[ irish haiku? ]

From a room in the school overhead,
Bishie Ed wants the robot girl dead.
First blast didn't take,
now Sonada's in the wake,
one more shot coming in the next thread!

All the fighting in Mt's Japan,
reminds me of Mt: the Clans--
"My character wins!"
"No way, she's too thin!"
Oh, where are the Funny Farm vans?

While Ed's up on his perch, debating,
his gun is recharging, he's waiting.
It's got a big bore--
that's hard to ignore--
Anyone else think he's compensating?

That is not haiku
I think it's called "Limerick"
Not bad rhyming, though

Posted by: Lukkai Jul 19 2004, 02:31 PM
Well, limericks are
Also accepted in here.
Irish we call these.

Posted by: XkyRauh Jul 19 2004, 02:33 PM
QUOTE (Dark Morford @ Jul 19 2004, 08:00 PM)
That is not haiku
I think it's called "Limerick"
Not bad rhyming, though

[ irish haiku? ]

You are technically right, that is true,
but I've got some new info for you:
when I came in the past,
regulars had a blast
calling limericks "irish haiku."

Now that may seem absurd in a way,
to call limericks such things today.
but I say with a smile
that it's been quite a while
since I visited these forums each day.

So accept my apologies, please,
I did not mean to cause such unease:
if it's haiku you seek
I'll make thirty a week
and submit them to you without cheese. :-)

[ haiku? ]

to summarize things:
I haven't been here in months
things have clearly changed.

Labels can vary
but it seems I'm an old dog--
I don't want to change. :-D

--Xky

Posted by: t1ph4Ni3 Jul 19 2004, 02:46 PM
"I don't wanna die!
I've never been loved!", he says.
Poor, Lonely Fanboy!

Fanboys flee the scene;
Rent-a-zilla's job is done.
Where are his porkrinds?

laugh.gif

Posted by: Lukkai Jul 19 2004, 03:04 PM
QUOTE (XkyRauh @ Jul 19 2004, 10:33 PM)
[ irish haiku? ]

You are technically right, that is true,
but I've got some new info for you:
when I came in the past,
regulars had a blast
calling limericks "irish haiku."

[irish haiku]
Well I really have to agree.
We're looking at lim'ricks with glee.
And indeed we do
Call them 'irish haiku'.
So do continue with that tag of thee!
[/irish haiku]

[3-5-3-5-5]
Tags we use
Are 'irish haiku'
and 'haiku'.

As well as others
That match the used form.
[/3-5-3-5-5]

Posted by: snark Jul 19 2004, 03:21 PM
[3-5-3]
Sap rises
As tree prepares to
Put forth shoot
[/3-5-3]

QUOTE (XkyRauh @ Jul 19 2004, 08:33 PM)
to summarize things:
I haven't been here in months
things have clearly changed.

No change to label
"Irish haiku" still abound
In the haiku threads

[for example]
Ed speaks of his "little princess",
But there's something we can now guess,
He's had far too much fun,
Playing with a big gun,
By his mildly disturbing caress.
[/irish haiku]

Posted by: t1ph4Ni3 Jul 19 2004, 03:30 PM
Must go run and hide
Bishie Ed is scraring me
He exudes evil


Ping's body is her own.
"What you own can be taken"
with a single click


ROAR! STOMP! SNORT!
Just doing my job
for pork-rinds
(3/5/3)

Posted by: Dark Morford Jul 19 2004, 04:33 PM
I understand now.
Limericks are good; don't stop
writing the funny

Posted by: masamage Jul 20 2004, 12:39 PM
Resting against it,
Ed feels the cool metal warm
In loving response.


Another fun form:
[http://www.stinky.com/dactyl/dactyl.html*]

Run away! Run away!
Lunatic Bishie-Ed
Surveys the scene with his
Peaceful new eyes,

Blissfully certain it's
Time for this 'princess' to
(Uncomprehendingly)
Meet her demise.

[/dactyl]


* (I think the 'waltz' thing was just confusing. Ah well.)

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