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Posted by: AncestralHamster Jun 9 2004, 06:19 PM
Venomous words from
once trustworthy councilor.
Now snake in the grass.

[3-5-3]
Spiteful words
from fallen angel.
Jealousy?
[/3-5-3]

Edit: Forgot the Haiku tag. Could a moderator edit the thread title to include that, please?

Posted by: snark Jun 9 2004, 07:11 PM
QUOTE (AncestralHamster @ Jun 10 2004, 12:19 AM)
Venomous words from
once trustworthy councilor.
Now snake in the grass.

Demanding perfection, with
No leeway for old mistakes

[irish haiku]
It seems Seraphim's stuck in her past,
One must wonder how long this will last,
All her comments are venom,
She shouldn't have said'em,
And poor Piro is just left aghast.

Now she's started to act all aloof,
And she's trying to make Piro goof,
It shouldn't be hard,
To see through her facade;
Tell her what she can do with her "poof"!
[/irish haiku]

Posted by: Bryce Jun 9 2004, 07:49 PM
Soap-box time, I'm afraid...
Please label cgs, haikus, poetry, fanfic, &c with the de-facto standard `tags', [cg], [fanfic], or whatever. I have a lot of web-boards to read and I use automation to make things go faster by skipping uninteresting topics using various programs that operate on the topic title. (Uninteresting to me, of course your opinion may vary - they're nothing wrong with the above stuff, it's just not something I usually feel the need to view.)

As it stands, the topic title is exactly the same as the title of Piro's thread, and as I don't have the subtitle or poster in the summaries my software delivers, I ended up here instead of my intended destination.

So, I'd really be happy if everyone would use the standard tags in their topic titles - thanks.

Edit: Thank you.

Posted by: AncestralHamster Jun 10 2004, 09:31 AM
Scorching summer wind
withering the young spring growth
blighting the harvest.

QUOTE (snark @ Jun 10 2004, 01:11 AM)
Demanding perfection, with
No leeway for old mistakes

Even perfection
would not satisfy her hate.
Acting on malice.

Posted by: Lareth Jun 10 2004, 12:38 PM
Please, people. I see it more like this:

How many times must
Piro stub his toes before
opening his eyes?

one can hide behind
mighty walls of ignorance
but never walk free

words cut like scalpels
opening the tender flesh
that hides the cancer

the sick need healing
the ignorant need teaching
the weak, a challenge

Piro's happiness
is a butterfly trapped
too long in its coccoon

awakened by tuth,
the warrior's spirit will
rise in him at last

-Lareth

Posted by: Lukkai Jun 10 2004, 02:51 PM
Well, looking at this
I begin to wonder what
Bad Sera has in mind



freestyle (I know it's not really haiku, but it sounds good somehow):

Oh, the horror
The dark Sera brings
Upon our beloved Piro

/freestyle


The conscience now shows
Her dark side, bashing the girls.
But what does she want?

Posted by: masamage Jun 10 2004, 03:30 PM
Wahh! I don't like it!
The universe loves me. It's
Awful. How scarring.

Grow up! Honestly,
Do you think the rest of us
Need to hear you cry?

She made them happy;
She gave them the illusion
That somebody cared...

But she's tired now, so
No more! Everyone go home!
She ran away, but

The door slamming shut
Got everyone's attention.
Now here they all are,

Shouting, "We love you!
Please come back!" And what's she do?
She sneaks off and hides.

Between you and me, Piro,
I don't think she deserves them.

Posted by: nekobawt Jun 10 2004, 03:40 PM
"angel's" vitriol
is too much for piro's brain
to handle at once.

seraphim lacks sympathy
and she has a caustic tongue..

Posted by: cantabile Jun 10 2004, 04:29 PM
[haiku]
"She's the one they want"-
did you think that possibly
she knows it's not "her"?
[/haiku]


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