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Posted by: AncestralHamster Jun 5 2004, 07:39 PM
(Original definition from http://www.filespace.org/nom_de_plume/mtsdintro.html#2.)

Drabbles are fanfictions of precisely one hundred words--not a single word more or less. They are often written in first-person, and generally focus on a character's thoughts and feelings. It's possible to write a "half drabble" (50 words) or "double drabble" (200 words).

Originally introduced to the forum by Brent Dax, drabbles have been neglected of late, and I think they are worth reviving. I encourage all interested parties to try their hand at drabbling. Some samples:

http://forums.megatokyo.com/index.php?showtopic=1224690&view=findpost&p=1224690. The first SD forum drabble.

http://forums.megatokyo.com/index.php?showtopic=1427160&view=findpost&p=1427360

http://forums.megatokyo.com/index.php?showtopic=1527092&view=findpost&p=1527092

Also, just because someone may have written a drabble from a given character's POV does not mean you can't write one for that character too. You may have a different take on what that character's thoughts would be.

And now, from Erika's point of view ...

They are waiting for me. Out there, the mob and everything it represents. The fears I couldn't face. It was foolish to think I could hide from my past with no consequences.

Yanagisawa waits for me to make up my mind. He will support me regardless of what I choose to do. He speaks, confirming it, and suddenly, briefly, my heart's pain vanishes. The dear man. He's been like a father to me for so long, always there for me. If only more men were like him ...

Enough of that. Time to face your fears. Time to fight.



Posted by: OceanSoul Jun 5 2004, 07:54 PM
QUOTE (AncestralHamster @ Jun 6 2004, 01:39 AM)
(...)

Time to fight.


Amem to that Hamster. Amem to that. As unlikely it is to happen sleep.gif

So many Dream Theater songs come to my mind.

Posted by: PhoenixLord Jun 5 2004, 08:29 PM
Hmmm a cool thing to revive. I remember reading the intro and being very confused about drabbles since I had been lurking and not seeing any. A very good one too. THough, don't know abotu you, but I don't think like that. wink.gif

Posted by: Chun Jun 5 2004, 10:54 PM
*Thinks if they should do a meta-rabble thread

I dunno... but that'd just stink to compile... though It's an interesting form of telling.

~Chun

Posted by: Damion Requiem Jun 6 2004, 01:07 PM
w00t...the return of drabblage!

Interesting thought on Erika's relationship to Yanagisawa-san. I never really pictured anything more than a work relation between the two, maybe cordial friendship. I never would've pictured him as a father figure (especially given that most father figures aren't scared to death of the person they're father-figuring to). But now that you put it like that, I can see it.

Excellent work, Hamster-sama! Hmm...maybe I shoud try my hand at this here shortly...

Posted by: masamage Jun 6 2004, 05:36 PM
Ooh...

I'd like to give this a shot. It ended up being 150 words, though; tee hee. I figured that if double- and demi-drabbles were allowed, I might as well. Gomen.

Here we are, then. It's from Yuki's point of view, even though she's not in this strip directly.

~

“Some girls after him”… I guess that means he’s not really dating that…woman. Maybe she just assumes it’ll turn out that way…she’s probably always gotten what she wants. Poor Piro-san.

I guess they’re at work right now. I wonder what he’s doing… and what she's doing. Probably nothing. Just wearing her expensive costumes, making him do all the work. Hmph.

What must it be like, putting up with an old, self-centered washout all the time? I bet she’s still full of herself. I bet she reminds them all the time how famous she was. I bet she still thinks everyone loves her…but really, they’ve forgotten all about her. I mean, who’s ever heard of her? Just my stupid brother.

...I guess she’s like me, waiting for Pir—waiting for people to notice. But other than that, we’re completely different. Right?

Because…I want to be liked for who I really am.

Posted by: Keita-chan Jun 6 2004, 05:49 PM
QUOTE (Chun @ Jun 5 2004, 11:54 PM)
*Thinks if they should do a meta-rabble thread

I dunno... but that'd just stink to compile... though It's an interesting form of telling.

~Chun

I could compile those in my spare time, if one was done...God knows I've got waaaay too much of it. Plus, I know a good bit of HTML.

*will do one tommorrow, a tad busy right now*

Posted by: flybank Jun 6 2004, 06:18 PM
I like the Hamster version, but I think it is wrong somehow. It is good, but it is not Erika in some way.

Mesamege is also very good, but I think it shows a self awareness that Yuki lacks. I don't think Yuki is thinking this clearly.

lets see how badly I can do.

From the POV of Piro:

QUOTE
  This is not the Moeko I knew.  She was so happy all the time, no matter what happened.  I don't think she wants to hear how much I loved her.  I don't think I ought to ask for her autograph either.  This is not the time.

She smiled again.  She is ready to face the demons.  Just like Moeko.  Courage, strenth and a smile!

Posted by: masamage Jun 6 2004, 10:00 PM
QUOTE (Keita-chan @ Jun 6 2004, 04:49 PM)
I could compile those in my spare time, if one was done...God knows I've got waaaay too much of it. Plus, I know a good bit of HTML.

Oog. It's a fun idea, in general, but I'm all for a rest before we tackle another project like that.

Another thing is...drabbles are a lot more work than haiku, so having people get bumped away because they were five seconds too late is rather more tragic. It would also be a great pity to have only one character's POV for each strip.

I say let's just continue with the current strips. This is pretty fun.

QUOTE (flybank)
Mesamege is also very good, but I think it shows a self awareness that Yuki lacks. I don't think Yuki is thinking this clearly.

Well, perhaps. On the other hand, she's being aware of things that aren't actually true.

Thank you for the compliment, by the way. Yours is cute, too. ^_^

(It is 'Masa', though.)

Posted by: AncestralHamster Jun 6 2004, 11:59 PM
Thank you for your responses, in particular to Masamage and Flybank for stepping up to the plate and taking a swing at drabbling.

QUOTE (OceanSoul @ Jun 6 2004, 01:54 AM)
Amem to that Hamster. Amem to that. As unlikely it is to happen sleep.gif

Probably not in the physical sense at least. I'm assuming she is going to give a speech to her fans, and show them why they should forget about her and move on. If that's her intent, I doubt it will succeed: this is fanaticism she is dealing with here, and she has consistently underestimated its power.

QUOTE (Phoenixlord)
Hmmm a cool thing to revive. I remember reading the intro and being very confused about drabbles since I had been lurking and not seeing any.

Not surprising, since my drabble for [475] was the last one posted, so drabbles have been gone a long time.

QUOTE (Masamage)
Another thing is...drabbles are a lot more work than haiku, so having people get bumped away because they were five seconds too late is rather more tragic. It would also be a great pity to have only one character's POV for each strip.

Masamage has expressed the same concerns I have with a Meta-drabble project. It is one thing to have a 17 or 14 syllable verse preempted by someone else, quite another to have a hundred word drabble preempted. It's likely to cause hard feelings and frustration. It would be better to keep the present casual format.

QUOTE (Damion Requiem)
Interesting thought on Erika's relationship to Yanagisawa-san.

Thank you. My reading of the comics suggested that to me. Both seem to express a certain amount of affection for each other through sarcastic remarks. Neither Erika nor Yanagisawa seem to be given to open displays of sentiment, so such sarcastic rejoinders are the only way they can (or will) show any sorts of affection for each other.

QUOTE (Flybank)
I like the Hamster version, but I think it is wrong somehow. It is good, but it is not Erika in some way.

There's room for more than one interpretation of what Erika's thoughts might be at this moment. If you disagree with my interpretation, please feel free to write another drabble from her POV. There's plenty of time, since Fred probably won't be giving us a new comic until Tuesday.

(Just to be clear, I'm not offended. Megatokyo is all about perceptions, and I realize that my mental image of any given character probably does not accord with that of other people. As such, I expect a certain amount of disagreement. As long as it remains polite, I'm fine with it.)


Incidentally, part of the challenge of a drabble is trying to convey your point in with limited words. My first draft was 130+ words and I had to revise several times to get it down to 100. So one should attempt to adhere to one of the standard formats.

Posted by: flybank Jun 7 2004, 12:31 AM
I think this is too passive. I think she is more active

QUOTE
They are waiting for me. Out there, the mob and everything it represents. The fears I couldn't face. It was foolish to think I could hide from my past with no consequences.

Yanagisawa waits for me to make up my mind. He will support me regardless of what I choose to do. He speaks, confirming it, and suddenly, briefly, my heart's pain vanishes. The dear man. He's been like a father to me for so long, always there for me. If only more men were like him ...

Enough of that. Time to face your fears. Time to fight.


I think that you are right in that we have differernt ideas of her motivation for leaving.

My try.

QUOTE

Do they kow what they want out there?  It isn't me, it is something else, something horrible I can't touch.  I told them the truth, didn't they listen?

How can I convince them to live what is real, instead of living in a fantasy?  It must be awful to live only in a world of dreams. 

Time to let them know, that if they truely love me, then they should love me for who I am, and not a rediculous dream


Bleh, maybe I will edit tomorrow. My view of Erika's departure was because she was trying to preserve he self respect, rather than she was frightened by anything.

Posted by: TheGreatHibiki Jun 7 2004, 11:04 AM
Intersting.... I have heard of Drabble before but never seen it.

Nice one Hamster.

Posted by: Keita-chan Jun 7 2004, 11:54 AM
QUOTE (masamage @ Jun 6 2004, 11:00 PM)
Another thing is...drabbles are a lot more work than haiku, so having people get bumped away because they were five seconds too late is rather more tragic. It would also be a great pity to have only one character's POV for each strip.

This is true, but drabbles are stand-alone...they don't rely on another person to finish it, like rengas do. So it wouldn't matter as much if we had multiple drabbles for one character.

As for taking a break, the longer we take before we start a meta-drabble (if we do) the more likely it'll be to overlap with the metarenga restarting at the end of Chapter 5.

EDIT: Oh yeah, forgot I was gonna do one. Yanagisawa's POV.

Poor Erika-san...there are some things you just can't hide from.

There must be something I can do...she's a good worker.

Sigh...none of those damn fanboys have any respect for her privacy. All they want is to see their "idol". Disgusting.

Hah...there are some things more important than sales. Privacy is one of them. And I don't have any of your stuff, anyways.

Whoa...she smiled. Wow...I'd forgotten just how cute she is when she does that.

Yeah...even if Piro-kun and I chased 'em off, they'd just be back later. Well, such is life.


100 on the dot, counting suffixed names as one.

Posted by: masamage Jun 7 2004, 12:43 PM
All right, here's another try, this time sticking to the spirit of the drabble. It's from Seraphim's point of view, much as I dare venture to guess at what that is. ^^

~

Back just in time. Looks like things have been changing around here. Good; it was getting a little stagnant. ‘Course, Piro’s just going along with everything again… He really is hopeless. Even more than I thought.

Okay, so he’s got no experience. But even allowing for that, look at this girl! I’ve never seen such a teaser. He should’ve known she was hiding something… Not that those little games really train you for subtlety.

I used to think she’d be good for him, a nice break in the drama… but she’s no better than that Nanasawa girl. Wake up, Piro!

~

Edit: Good one, Keita-chan. It sounds like him. ^^

Posted by: Nebulious Jun 7 2004, 01:30 PM
A fine composition, AH. Unfortunately, I can only count 99 words! But its a very minor matter; another word is easily added. Fantastically written and I love the perspective.

I really like your two, Masamage. You did an excellent job getting into their heads.

And since I'm procrastinating and ambitious:

~
This friend of Piro’s should have told us her secrets long ago. If she is somehow connected with the reintroduction of our nemesis, then we are facing serious complications. Is she aware of any current operations in the horde? And what of the queen…

And Dom. Just two days ago we fought alongside as allies. Now he has fallen. Not even the most valiant can resist this menace. Yet the expression on his face…is he the litch now? Is he captured, a traitor, or somehow deceived to do this?

Time is running short. Will anyone be left when we return?

~

Yes, I'm aware that this is a largo drabble and not a single word of l33t or mention of b33r. I believe that when the situation is dire, Largo is a very perceptive and intelligent person.

Posted by: TheGreatHibiki Jun 7 2004, 01:41 PM
Well I hope this is good, I don't really feel all that Piro like today...

In a way I suppose my Gray is written like Drabbles just longer... REALLY longer.

[Piro POV]
_________________________________________________________________

I found it odd that I couldn’t see the Minako in Hayasaka-san. Now that I knew Hayasaka was THE Hayasaka Erika, famed idol singer and seiyuu, I wonder what happened to her. Boss-san won’t tell me, even though he knows.

I don’t feel the attraction I did for her like I had when I was in America, like Japan has taken the trill out of all of this. Thinking about Japan in America was different than thinking about Japan in Japan. I guess I now think about America, here in Japan. I can’t believe Largo was right about all this.

Posted by: 1n50mn14c Jun 7 2004, 03:17 PM
You know, a "meta-drabble" would be possible, we would just have to make some rules for it. First, we would need to find out who is interested, and then get everyone to pick a couple of strips they want to do drabbles for so that nobody can preempt them. We would have to have just a few strips booked at time (If there are ten people interested, then ten strips would be booked). That way if other people want to join, they can get the next free strip.

I think it would be a fun project. If anyone's interested, we should start one up sometime (maybe a week from now so we can get a list of who is interested and which of the first set of strips each person will do). Let me know what you think.

I'll post my first drabble in here later. I can't really do it right now since I'm in school and I really should be doing my work.

Posted by: Keita-chan Jun 7 2004, 07:27 PM
That sounds like a good idea, 1n50mn14c. The only problem I can think of is that it might be hard to do a hundred words for the earlier, 4-panel strips.

Also, for calling strips, I think that calls should be by strip and character, not just strip. And we should have probably at least two drabbles per character per strip.

Posted by: PatheticEli Jun 7 2004, 07:44 PM
Man..haven't seen one of these in a while...

Posted by: TheGreatHibiki Jun 8 2004, 12:24 PM
Frankly a meta-drabble sounds good, I wouldn't mind doing the ticket scene, I could do that no problem... If a Meta drabble starts I want the ticket scene!!!!



Posted by: 1n50mn14c Jun 8 2004, 01:03 PM
Okay, here's my drabble. It's from Piro's point of view.

I never thought I would meet her in real life, but here she is. I’ve been working with the idol all week without even realizing it. I wonder if she could tell I am a fan of her old self. She probably thinks I’m just another otaku loser.

Hayasaka isn’t at all like I imagined she would be. I thought she would be, well, sweeter, not so cold. I guess I shouldn’t have assumed that the seiyuu would be like the character, but I couldn’t help it.

Why am I disappointed? I should just accept her as herself, right? Whatever…

Posted by: masamage Jun 8 2004, 04:27 PM
QUOTE (1n50mn14c @ Jun 8 2004, 12:03 PM)
Okay, here's my drabble. It's from Piro's point of view.

Ooh, that is excellent. I hadn't thought of some of those things before, either... Wai. ^_^ Nicely done.

Posted by: OceanSoul Jun 9 2004, 06:45 PM
QUOTE (AncestralHamster @ Jun 7 2004, 05:59 AM)
Probably not in the physical sense at least.  I'm assuming she is going to give a speech to her fans, and show them why they should forget about her and move on.  If that's her intent, I doubt it will succeed: this is fanaticism she is dealing with here, and she has consistently underestimated its power.


I am sorry if i sound too hopeless, but i dont think she would even try a speech. It is fruitless as we know. All it would do is further sink her already wounded pride.

Only a more shocking demonstration of hate would do the job: a public burning of girl phase merchandise, a harsh new hair cut, or (what the hell) a tatoo. huh.gif (Thank goodness im just a reader of MT and not the writer)

Well, As long as Miho keeps up her devilish plots, its ok, really. smile.gif

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