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Posted by: phaedrus Jan 22 2004, 08:18 AM
Soul still in Nihon,
an exhausted traveler
displays his trophies.

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(I'm proud of this one. The opening line tries to simultaneously capture wistful longing for a long-anticipated but now finished trip, while also making a reference to William Gibson's wonderful description of jet-lag as the soul not keeping up with the body during travel.)
[/!haiku]

Posted by: breremarer Jan 22 2004, 05:07 PM
So soon back to house,
No energy left to draw
Welcome home Fred-rin.


((First line was originally "So soon back home", but it wouldn't fit the syllable count. Too bad...I like it a lot better))

Posted by: Mintaka Jan 22 2004, 11:58 PM
Bright hues in winter,
A pile of dreams and visions --
He prefers her arms


And a personal note from me:

Away since springtime,
I return before the birds
But after Piro....

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