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|Posted by: Rowan Bristol Dec 22 2003, 10:07 AM|
| The rain has withdrawn
leaving only the ruin
a whisper of snow
|Posted by: Debu Dec 22 2003, 10:10 AM|
| largo knows it all
piro-san knows none at all
erika is scared
|Posted by: Temenus Dec 22 2003, 10:26 AM|
| Through the autumn eve
A sketchpad close to her heart
As a plate of steel
|Posted by: AncestralHamster Dec 22 2003, 10:58 AM|
Armor of Ice melts
magnified by time
|Posted by: MoneyMan Dec 22 2003, 11:04 AM|
| Make one lucky guess
Forget all the other ones
and be named hero
|Posted by: phaedrus Dec 22 2003, 11:16 AM|
| Winter winds cannot
chill my soul, for the snow has come.
My heart melts anew.
|Posted by: Echo Dec 22 2003, 12:00 PM|
|Not so strange, her shock,
despite his cyber-shield, she's
an analog girl.
The storm has now passed,
but wiser weather eyes see
another front approaching.
|Posted by: Arrot Zang Dec 22 2003, 12:11 PM|
| hm... unless i'm wrong usually when someone posts, they want a responce then other people also doing the same thing.
Well Rowan Bristol i find your haiku good for the effect of the strip, has a lot of symbolism, the rain withdrawn would be the guy who was kicked out of megagamers, while the 'whisper of snow' can be the oncoming storm of what has become apparent as 'yuki'
|Posted by: Echo Dec 22 2003, 12:36 PM|
I'm not saying that you're wrong, because people really do like to get responses to their posts (who doesn't?), but there's no insult intended by not responding to the haiku that comes before ones own. It's a haiku thread after all, and traditionally discussion outside of haiku format has been curtailed in those threads.
But by all means, compliment someone if you enjoy what they've written. I agree with you, Rowan's haiku was very well done.
|Posted by: elyscape Dec 22 2003, 12:49 PM|
| [!haiku] In haiku threads, the tradition is not to respond with a response, but to respond with another haiku. Generally, though, one does respond with a response. [/!haiku]
Well, Mr. Piro
Seems you were wrong once again
The mission was a failure
Was she in the store?
He walks past
Saying to her, "I
did warn you."
His love life
|Posted by: EarthStarFan Dec 22 2003, 01:15 PM|
| The world is falling
Beautiful white walls crumble
Diamond dust or snow?
Ingredients make the soup
Sweet, sour and bitter