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Posted by: Opt498 Jun 8 2003, 10:49 PM
Surprised, Erika
Threatens savage limb-beatings.
Dom counters with guns.

Personality:
Hers was not made for stardom.
It must be painful.

Posted by: Marak Jun 8 2003, 11:02 PM
Her eyes opened wide
Dom's smile says, "I gotcha now"
Thus, threats are exchanged

Posted by: Caduceuskun Jun 8 2003, 11:05 PM
With her past revealed
There are even more questions
An idol singer?

Posted by: AncestralHamster Jun 8 2003, 11:08 PM
Music from the past
causing her present discord.
Haunting Erika.

3-5-3
Erika.
What has damaged you?
Broken Bird.

Posted by: Shoka Jun 8 2003, 11:32 PM
a pair of cd's,
and dom's cheesy smirk, reveal
hayasaka's past

[irish_haiku]
For the people around her no hint
Of the past she rejected long since,
Did our Erika tell,
This idoru who fell
Out of sight, out of mind, out of print.
[/irish_haiku]

Posted by: richard_h_g Jun 8 2003, 11:37 PM
oh cool.
does this mean Erika used to be a singer? interesting...
i hope dom gets beaten up! hes deserves it.

Posted by: EarthStarFan Jun 9 2003, 12:08 AM
Maybe it was hard;
Sometimes, you gotta run free.
But some wounds don't heal . . .

[3-5-3]
Broken bird
Fell from the spotlight;
What happened?

Posted by: Rowan Bristol Jun 9 2003, 12:27 AM
haunting melody
sugar in the bitterness
a pleasant weapon

Posted by: Dom Jun 9 2003, 02:02 AM

Posted by: Opt498 Jun 9 2003, 03:17 AM
After translation,
I begin to suspect that Dom
Knows something we don't.

Posted by: nuvan Jun 9 2003, 03:29 AM
It would be kind, Opt
To provide a translation
for those who cannot

Posted by: Opt498 Jun 9 2003, 03:39 AM
My own translation
Has neither grace nor beauty.
It's best left to others.

I trust my knowledge
Only so far as this: I shall
Romanize the poem:

"Chikai kako
Hatsuyuki no you
Hohoemi wa"

Posted by: Meagen Jun 9 2003, 04:34 AM
Erika: idol.
Her fans: poets and filkers.
Coincidence? Not!

Meagen

Posted by: Integral Jun 9 2003, 07:25 AM
Memories long past:
An idol fallen from grace.
Broken bird, indeed.

Posted by: LFP6 Jun 9 2003, 07:36 AM
An idol singer
She turned away, walked away,
'Cause fame took its toll.

Posted by: roguenine Jun 9 2003, 05:19 PM
Fred drops a bombshell
Ev-er-y-one is surprised [1]
Erika, pop star?

This explains a lot
Like her loathing of show biz
It creates questions

Dom writes Haiku that
I, for one, can't read at all.
Can someone translate?

[!haiku] [1] You must pronounce every syllable [/!haiku]

Posted by: OceanSoul Jun 9 2003, 07:50 PM
Disclaimer: I wish to take part in this thread... Ive never been here before, and i am not so clear on the rules. Im sorry if i am unintentionally breaking this haiku, but i hope to make up with the inspiration this strip gave me..

***

For too long i've been away
Strayed from MT in pain
But now that my link is ok...

I am shocked, scared!!
Panting... what is this Fred?
The chill in my spine is so great...

Shrouds of the past are gone
A part of me wished it was left alone
But there's no return, its done

Frail do i feel
It still feels unreal
My fan soul's too great
Too solid... and it may break...

Yet now what i see
Is the upcoming insanity
Of a deadly duel to be

The bard's heart is his own
But mine's very strong

Hayasaka, no matter what character you turn to be
Your character in in my mind is the real one for me

*****

Sigh... it feels overdramatic at times, but i think its ok.

I don't know why, i seem to have a problem on disagreeing with an author about how a character turns out to be. I usually pick a character in a story, build a sort of past, and grow a great fondness for it.

Then... the author decides to reveal a character, and it always happens that the character is very different from what i WISHED it was.A feeling of disappointment filled me, and i tended to distance me from the story, from the character the author develops, and to develop into my own fictional character and story around it.. It happened before.

I was fearing about it happening to Erika Hayasaka.

It seems the time of the trial has come. I dont know if id like what Mr. Gallagher decides, my experience says i won't like it, but there's still hope that says i will like it.

What i am sure though... is that ill never fully like what the author decides for his character. And that's becase my characters and stories are too much grey for people to feel comfortable with.. Perhaps i should transcribe it to a fanfic, maybe other grey people could appreciate it.

*Sigh*... it seems this subject really filled me with thoughts... im sorry if im clumping up stuff where i should not, i think perhaps this better belongs to a regular thread... Just reply or PM me if you wished it removed and ill do it.

Anyway, i just need to know these words were online for everyone to see for at least some time

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