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Posted by: Captain Button Jun 28 2007, 09:11 AM
Piro:

Savior rejected
Step away from the seiyuu!
Protests unheeded


Miho

I turned to the light
Reaching for bright redemption
But the light is blind

The betrayal you have sown
Dooms you to dwell in darkness

Posted by: alter3d c0re Jun 28 2007, 11:07 AM
Wow. That is just....wow. If I could sum things up so nicely, I wouldn't have to resort to wall of emot-words.gif posts and poems. Nice one.

Posted by: shadowinthelight Jun 28 2007, 12:03 PM
One quickie for now

He shows her anger
Instead of the praise she seeks
The pain cracks her heart

Posted by: animecliche Jun 28 2007, 12:50 PM
Stay away he said
She tries to shrug that one off
He doesn't relent

Peh... Not spectacular, but at least I gave it a go

"It's the bible, y'get points fer tryin'!"

Posted by: Captain Button Jun 29 2007, 08:04 AM
QUOTE (alter3d c0re @ Jun 28 2007, 01:07 PM)
Wow. That is just....wow. If I could sum things up so nicely, I wouldn't have to resort to wall of emot-words.gif posts and poems. Nice one.

8#-)}

Thank you.

And thanks to animecliche and shadowinthelight for theirs.

Posted by: Moya Jun 29 2007, 02:24 PM
...I'm not very good at this, and I'm not even supposed to be online, but here I am. I hope it turns out okay.

~

I rescued this girl,
But his voice is cold and harsh.
Didn't I do right?

~

I don't like that one. It makes me cringe, actually. I'll try another.

(...Wait. I/don't/like/that/one. // It/makes/me/cringe/act/u/ally. // I'll/try/a/noth/er. That's five, seven, five. Weird...)

~

Uncertain delight,
My first rescue: a success!
But he asks for her.

(Or, maybe...)

Uncertain delight,
My first rescue: a success!
Why can't he forgive?

~

That last line isn't right, but this is off the top of my head, and I'm more certain of my prose than my poetry. Sorry, though. I did try, I guess... *sigh* Darn. I need to practice, I think.

Everyone else has done wonderfully, though! Good work.

Have a nice day!
~ Moya

Posted by: Kakurei Jul 5 2007, 02:28 PM
This looks like fun, I hope my poetry is still L337

Piro:

Can't let the past go,
To prevent more betrayal,
Stay away from her.

Miho:

A strange new feeling,
To protect instead of hurt
Maybe I can change.

Kimiko:

Opened eyes anew,
Dark savior talks to my love,
Why is he angry?


Well that should cover all of the participants in that panel. I hope these are any good.

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